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Two Sides of a coin
Two Sides of a coin
Meet Lena and Lani Finn. They are two twin sisters with nothing in common. Or that’s what they all thought
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on November 27, 2019
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Lindsflea
even though this isn't my favorite genre of a story, i have to say that your writing is very good! you put in a lot of detail in your writing, and not to mention many good vocabulary words to go along with it. i urge you to continue, because that story will definitely spark interest in people who read that genre.
on June 29, 2019
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on April 15, 2019
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Connecting stars
Connecting stars
Love makes people happy & cherished but not for all. The story of Chizu, who had feelings for her classmate Makoto since Elementary Music Festival. To meet him again & to remind him of his promise to sing again one day together, she joins his highschool & gets struck in a love triangle with Michiko . Get ready for a rollercoater of feelings and Experience Jealousy, Love, Hatred & lies, the pain of one sided love.
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orangeade
haha ikr. I wrote that when I was 11. thanks tho!
on April 15, 2019
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Mr.Slinky
Well, it's a good story. However, I would suggest working on your English writing skills. It's a bit choppy, and some of the grammar is messed up. Cheers, and keep up the good work.
on April 15, 2019
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on July 04, 2018
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It's still a work in progress, but I'd really appreciate some reviews on what's in it so far.

https://www.qfeast.com/story/qX4LRO/Heirs-of-a-forgotten-world
Heirs of a forgotten world
Heirs of a forgotten world
In our days, in our time, legends that talk about fantastic creatures, magic, alchemy and mystic artifacts, are only that. Legends. Nothing more than stories, tales. But when an ancient threat returns from lands disappeared from the time, the legends must come true once again.
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on November 13, 2017
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Anyone?
Still writing it and haven't edited it yet, but I'm working on it!
https://www.qfeast.com/story/iHW5nP/Catching-Roses
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on June 03, 2017
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Silence (undertale fanfic)
Silence (undertale fanfic)
Description coming soon (maybe after I finish at least 3 more chapters)
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on March 14, 2017
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I just rly want some reads
I worked so hard on this.

https://www.qfeast.com/story/77gV9F/Only-Constant
Only Constant
Only Constant
((Rewrite of Cana's Tale)) It was a special kind of friendship; The kind that can withstand nearly anything. All of their hardships, the troubles they'd faced; Not even time itself is enough to conquer their relationship. But when an evil lord returns to battle the princess's best friend, will it change?
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on December 11, 2016
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Lurking Nightmares: Relocation
Lurking Nightmares: Relocation
21 years she has been waiting. Revenge is all she seeks. They were relocated to a place of many know about. One knows of a danger that lurks in every shadow. She is always watching. Forgotten. Rejected. Broken... But is she as bad as you think? Behold the fourth book of Lurking Nightmares: Relocation where a new enemy awaits to strike and new secrets are yet to be uncovered. Your never alone.
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on November 05, 2016
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Review Pleaseeeeeeee
I love how everyone was looking forward to this. Yet nobody seems to b be interested now that it's published.

https://www.qfeast.com/story/LLIw8b/Butterfly-Kisses-Zelink-Friendship
Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]
Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]
Some great things don't always go as planned; Sometimes, things happen. But Zelda refuses to let life spoil her day with Link. (Zelda, Link, Friendship. Prior to game)
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on October 12, 2016
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This is probably one of my most popular recent stories. Made just under a month ago, but people love it.
But it still needs a review:
https://www.qfeast.com/story/RkhWjg/Vanished-for-Torture
Vanished for Torture
Vanished for Torture
Welcome to a world far beyond the one we know. Once you pass through these doors, there is no hope for you. Those who enter, never leave. Welcome, to Warehouse #666, where the innocent children of the world are held prisoners, tortured, even murdered.
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on October 05, 2016
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Lady of the lake
Lady of the lake
Long after the death of Lancelot and Elaine, Nimue, the noble witch of waters, sets off to find her supposed "grandson" -but her quest is interupted by wolves, hunters, and the imagination of the forest.
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on October 03, 2016
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These eyes
These eyes
This mix of dark and fantasy and mystery is perfect for bedtime or just for fun! As always please like, follow and comment ?
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on August 31, 2016
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New Moons (Mia X Hunter)
New Moons (Mia X Hunter)
Mia, a loyal servant to her lady, Artemis, and part of her Hunt, meets a boy during one of their stays at Camp Half-Blood. Little does she know that he might be the love of her life.
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on August 17, 2016
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Mirror, Mirror
Mirror, Mirror
Um, hey. I wrote a Twilight Princess fanfiction. It's a sequel to the actual game. Enjoy.
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on June 19, 2016
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Wolves Of The Ravine
Wolves Of The Ravine
Ferone doesn't know where he belongs. He doesn't know where he is. Or even what he is. But his whole life changes when he comes across the wolves of the ravine. Can outsider Ferone save an entire pack from peril?
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on April 05, 2016
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/ZxKFqc/Warrior-Cats-Burning-Stars-Book-One-Stepping-Stones?ref=
I haven't finished it yet, and I'm wondering what you guys think so far.
Warrior Cats~Burning Stars~Book One~Stepping Stones
Warrior Cats~Burning Stars~Book One~Stepping Stones
Applestar, leader of AshClan, former leader of AshClan. Until a mysterious cat kills him. Who what and why remains unknown. And to Ashpaw, nothing would be the same. Ashpaw was beside Applestar as they buried him: and there she made her promise. She would find Applestar's killer, and she will revenge not only her leader but her fathers death. Even if it means she has to die doing so.
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on March 14, 2016
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Parasite.
Parasite.
Amer Pari was not a normal child. He had white deer horns, mint eyes, cat ears, and a snake tail. He felt alone. His parents could of been worse, but it didn't change the fact he was meant to be a parasite. You will see how this bookworm will endure through his life, and find a host.
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on November 07, 2015
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It's less a story than a theory but...I'd still like reviews.
http://www.qfeast.com/story/fc8iJI/Gem-Resonance-Are-Gems-Meister-Weapon-Fusions
Gem Resonance? (Are Gems Meister/Weapon Fusions?)
Gem Resonance? (Are Gems Meister/Weapon Fusions?)
This is a crossover theory spanning the TV show Steven Universe and the anime/manga Soul Eater/Soul Eater NOT. It involves in-depth analysis of Soul Resonance and Death Scythes, and talks about Gems and (vaguely) how they work. Fusion is also plays a major role in this theory. Don't like any of these things? Probably shouldn't read this then.
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on September 23, 2015
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..::Pigtails::.. [Annie x Mina]
..::Pigtails::.. [Annie x Mina]
Annie had her one friend, Mina. Ever since Annie acquaintanced Mina, she had deep feelings towards her. (Annie's POV)
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on August 15, 2015
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