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May somebody please read what I have so far?
https://www.qfeast.com/story/NWK91O/Heroes-of-Holovor
Heroes of Holovor
Heroes of Holovor
This story takes place many years into the future, In a galaxy, the Cyberplex, where all planets have advanced technology. However, this story is only focused on one of the planets in this galaxy; Planet Vortice. But that's not the point. In the country of Holovor, a new school has been built, but with many advanced classes, Many teenagers from the ages of 13 to 18 had been sent to this school. Why? They must learn to defend themselves from Viridi, the evil sorceress. This school is the only place that is safe from her. The story focuses on 4 girls, 13 year old Mintra Timons, 15 year old Estela Purana, 14 year old Taro Cahiira and 16 year old Corrin Hadden. Together, they form a team that might possibly save their world.
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13 days ago
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Lurking Nightmares: Relocation
Lurking Nightmares: Relocation
21 years she has been waiting. Revenge is all she seeks. They were relocated to a place of many know about. One knows of a danger that lurks in every shadow. She is always watching. Forgotten. Rejected. Broken... But is she as bad as you think? Behold the fourth book of Lurking Nightmares: Relocation where a new enemy awaits to strike and new secrets are yet to be uncovered. Your never alone.
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on November 05
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Review Pleaseeeeeeee
I love how everyone was looking forward to this. Yet nobody seems to b be interested now that it's published.

https://www.qfeast.com/story/LLIw8b/Butterfly-Kisses-Zelink-Friendship
Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]
Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]
Some great things don't always go as planned; Sometimes, things happen. But Zelda refuses to let life spoil her day with Link. (Zelda, Link, Friendship. Prior to game)
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on October 12
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This is probably one of my most popular recent stories. Made just under a month ago, but people love it.
But it still needs a review:
https://www.qfeast.com/story/RkhWjg/Vanished-for-Torture
Vanished for Torture
Vanished for Torture
Welcome to a world far beyond the one we know. Once you pass through these doors, there is no hope for you. Those who enter, never leave. Welcome, to Warehouse #666, where the innocent children of the world are held prisoners, tortured, even murdered.
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on October 05
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Lady of the lake
Lady of the lake
Long after the death of Lancelot and Elaine, Nimue, the noble witch of waters, sets off to find her supposed "grandson" -but her quest is interupted by wolves, hunters, and the imagination of the forest.
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on October 03
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These eyes
These eyes
This mix of dark and fantasy and mystery is perfect for bedtime or just for fun! As always please like, follow and comment 😊
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on August 31
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New Moons (Mia X Hunter)
New Moons (Mia X Hunter)
Mia, a loyal servant to her lady, Artemis, and part of her Hunt, meets a boy during one of their stays at Camp Half-Blood. Little does she know that he might be the love of her life.
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on August 17
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Sharpie
Sharpie
She drew her feelings. And one of those feelings were her damaged heart.
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on June 30
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Mirror, Mirror
Mirror, Mirror
Um, hey. I wrote a Twilight Princess fanfiction. It's a sequel to the actual game. Enjoy.
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on June 19
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What should I write next?
What should I write next?
Sci-Fi/Alternate Universe / Fantasy / Realistic / Fanfiction/Spinoff. Vote on this poll. Once you vote, the poll results will be displayed
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on April 17
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Wolves Of The Ravine
Wolves Of The Ravine
Ferone doesn't know where he belongs. He doesn't know where he is. Or even what he is. But his whole life changes when he comes across the wolves of the ravine. Can outsider Ferone save an entire pack from peril?
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on April 05
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/his7uD/The-Road-to-Power
Unfinished, but will add chapters if you guys are keen.
The Road to Power
The Road to Power
Abigail Taylor was born with magic - but she's having trouble getting it to work. Maybe it's for the best. Magic doesn't always work out well. One morning, she wakes up to learn that her parents have disappeared - and she's far away from home. Alone and confused, she and her sister have to make it to safety and find out what happened to their parents - all while staying out of sight. It won't be easy. But Abigail is determined. And it's amazing what a magician can accomplish when they put their mind to it.
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on April 02
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/ZxKFqc/Warrior-Cats-Burning-Stars-Book-One-Stepping-Stones?ref=
I haven't finished it yet, and I'm wondering what you guys think so far.
Warrior Cats~Burning Stars~Book One~Stepping Stones
Warrior Cats~Burning Stars~Book One~Stepping Stones
Applestar, leader of AshClan, former leader of AshClan. Until a mysterious cat kills him. Who what and why remains unknown. And to Ashpaw, nothing would be the same. Ashpaw was beside Applestar as they buried him: and there she made her promise. She would find Applestar's killer, and she will revenge not only her leader but her fathers death. Even if it means she has to die doing so.
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on March 14
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/wONC6e/Beware-The-Midnight-Man
This is my first attempt at horror. If you like horror please let me know what you think!
Beware The Midnight Man
Beware The Midnight Man
He plays his game with the cover of night. He never loses. Those who play his game gamble more then their live... He is the Midnight Man. (horror rated R)
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on January 21
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Parasite.
Parasite.
Amer Pari was not a normal child. He had white deer horns, mint eyes, cat ears, and a snake tail. He felt alone. His parents could of been worse, but it didn't change the fact he was meant to be a parasite. You will see how this bookworm will endure through his life, and find a host.
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on November 07, 2015
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http://www.qfeast.com/story/blYF39/Top-of-the-World-Dark-vs-Light-Story-1

I want feedback like what I should add and how to make it better right now I think the story is terrible
Top of the World: Dark vs Light (Story 1)
Top of the World: Dark vs Light (Story 1)
Do you like a world where there is no bullies, A world where wild animals aren't caged but left in the wild blocked off from human development, a world where no one can be the same even if they tried, and a world where animal and child abuse doesn't exist. In This book all that exists
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on October 17, 2015
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It's less a story than a theory but...I'd still like reviews.
http://www.qfeast.com/story/fc8iJI/Gem-Resonance-Are-Gems-Meister-Weapon-Fusions
Gem Resonance? (Are Gems Meister/Weapon Fusions?)
Gem Resonance? (Are Gems Meister/Weapon Fusions?)
This is a crossover theory spanning the TV show Steven Universe and the anime/manga Soul Eater/Soul Eater NOT. It involves in-depth analysis of Soul Resonance and Death Scythes, and talks about Gems and (vaguely) how they work. Fusion is also plays a major role in this theory. Don't like any of these things? Probably shouldn't read this then.
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on September 23, 2015
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Character Romance (OCXOC or OCXCharacter)
Character Romance (OCXOC or OCXCharacter)
Hello! Rowena, here! I'm gonna do this because I saw others and wanted to try! I'll butt in sometimes, but it'll be for laughs! Enjoy my French Toasts! Requests I can do: Sonic, Soul Eater, other fandom ideas are welcome. :D
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on September 19, 2015
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Rowena's Book of Rowena!
Rowena's Book of Rowena!
I made a page called Rowena's Page of Rowena, so now I made a story. May include some grim backstories and intense fangirling. :/
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on September 05, 2015
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