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Ok so no one has read this and it's bothering me I stayed up half the night writing it
Please read it
https://www.qfeast.com/story/wTC1HV/Escape
Please read it
https://www.qfeast.com/story/wTC1HV/Escape
Escape...
My pain was growling at me trying desperately to escape. I smashed my fist against the wall again. And again, angry at what seemed mother to most but the pain was did not go unseen..
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No reads... hmmm m not surprised really. I guess I'll just delete it...
on March 05, 2017
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Tired
on March 03, 2017
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Also Mother is supposed to be nothing idk why that happened but I was really tored
on March 03, 2017
on March 03, 2017
Hey, I need some help with this story. For those who know Kpop or are just very fanfic minded, could you please help? I'm not really sure about how my writing is, and I would appreciate some critique.
https://www.qfeast.com/story/s75YPs/A-Difference-in-Genders-A-BTS-Story
https://www.qfeast.com/story/s75YPs/A-Difference-in-Genders-A-BTS-Story
A Difference in Genders (A BTS Story)
This is my first BTS fic ever, so please comment what you think about it, I'd love feedback so I can improve! ^^
on February 04, 2017
A brand new story I wrote where Vocaloid songs are given a story twist.
Only songs with stories and secrets hidden within the lyrics will make this story, however.
https://www.qfeast.com/story/FrBX0P/Vocaloid-Songs-as-Stories
Only songs with stories and secrets hidden within the lyrics will make this story, however.
https://www.qfeast.com/story/FrBX0P/Vocaloid-Songs-as-Stories
Vocaloid Songs as Stories
I've done some digging into Vocaloid songs I really adore, and I've found that some songs have hidden stories behind them. As such, I've managed to construct these songs into stories that convey the song's meaning as best as I could. If you feel there's a song that should be added in this story, feel free to request it, and I will try my best.
on January 27, 2017
Right...
You know that feeling when you've got a good story idea but you can't think of a name for it?
Yeah, I'm stuck in that feeling right now! HELP!
If you think you can help, just reply to this, and I'll PM you the idea.
You know that feeling when you've got a good story idea but you can't think of a name for it?
Yeah, I'm stuck in that feeling right now! HELP!
If you think you can help, just reply to this, and I'll PM you the idea.
on January 19, 2017
I'm struggling for story ideas, guys.
Any help to contribute would be GREATLY appreciated.
Any help to contribute would be GREATLY appreciated.
on January 11, 2017
Thanks for the 7 thumbs on my post guys :)
I'm gonna post my story idea here, since... well, you know, it's gonna make more sense.
But the 10 thumbs up are still needed if you want those peaks!
Anyway, here's the idea:
If you guys remember a while ago, I created a page for a story idea I had called "Eternal Dusk". However, I never actually got round to writing that story, and ended up scrapping the idea. The only thing is that I forgot to delete the page.
But now, I actually See More▼ have an idea for it. A lot of you know that I absolutely ADORE Percy Jackson. So an idea came to me, to revive "Eternal Dusk", but as a Percy Jackson fanfiction, offering a different story.
There will be appearances from some canon characters, I can say that much, but the main characters will be OC's created by myself and @The_Astute_Potterhead.
The idea? Listen to this and tell me what you think:
Hecate, possessed by the spirit of Kronos, plunges the world into an eternal night. The moon always stays high in the sky, and it is forever night time. Apollo, now without a job, releases a prophecy to Camp Half-Blood through the Oracle, Rachel Dare (please tell me I spelt Rachel's name right? Or correct it for me if I'm wrong), which six demigods of different parentage accept.
Now, I need to think of how the fridge I'm gonna word the prophecy to something riddle-like. It won't be as good as how Riordan does it, but I'm still gonna try. Oh boy, wish me luck...
I'm gonna post my story idea here, since... well, you know, it's gonna make more sense.
But the 10 thumbs up are still needed if you want those peaks!
Anyway, here's the idea:
If you guys remember a while ago, I created a page for a story idea I had called "Eternal Dusk". However, I never actually got round to writing that story, and ended up scrapping the idea. The only thing is that I forgot to delete the page.
But now, I actually See More▼ have an idea for it. A lot of you know that I absolutely ADORE Percy Jackson. So an idea came to me, to revive "Eternal Dusk", but as a Percy Jackson fanfiction, offering a different story.
There will be appearances from some canon characters, I can say that much, but the main characters will be OC's created by myself and @The_Astute_Potterhead.
The idea? Listen to this and tell me what you think:
Hecate, possessed by the spirit of Kronos, plunges the world into an eternal night. The moon always stays high in the sky, and it is forever night time. Apollo, now without a job, releases a prophecy to Camp Half-Blood through the Oracle, Rachel Dare (please tell me I spelt Rachel's name right? Or correct it for me if I'm wrong), which six demigods of different parentage accept.
Now, I need to think of how the fridge I'm gonna word the prophecy to something riddle-like. It won't be as good as how Riordan does it, but I'm still gonna try. Oh boy, wish me luck...
on December 30, 2016
I have 2 story ideas but I have no idea of I should write them or if anyone would actually be interested in reading them... Advice?
@Bookworm10 I've decided not to write any stories her because they never get noticed sooo yeah; I have them on Watt.pad tho
on February 04, 2017
on December 28, 2016
Any ideas for a new book? I need help because I'm stuck on what I should write about.
on October 26, 2016
https://www.qfeast.com/story/aQeH6N/Alice-in-Cyberland
Criticism would be great, please!
Criticism would be great, please!
Alice in Cyberland
Yes. Another Alice in Wonderland fanfic, but it's different. After a cyborg named Phoenix goes into Wonderland, she realizes how different this one is from the origonal. The queen and Alice are dead , with the prince gone. People are in a battle for control, and everything is... advanced. And she joins one group to get things back in order.
on October 19, 2016
I need a review on one of my most unnoticed stories on here, please!
https://www.qfeast.com/story/LLIw8b/Butterfly-Kisses-Zelink-Friendship
https://www.qfeast.com/story/LLIw8b/Butterfly-Kisses-Zelink-Friendship
![Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]](/imret/pp/nbLlgU.jpeg?w=200&h=200&sc=1 "Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]")
Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]
Some great things don't always go as planned; Sometimes, things happen. But Zelda refuses to let life spoil her day with Link. (Zelda, Link, Friendship. Prior to game)
on October 19, 2016
Okay, I actually want to take a turn away from my regular stories, and work on something dark, and gory.
So come at me with ideas, people! Tell me what you've got, and I'll see what I can make :)
So come at me with ideas, people! Tell me what you've got, and I'll see what I can make :)
Oh...I can come up with many gore filled stories....dark as well....At least I think I can....
What about a story about an affliction within the scenario world, where the afflicted gain something...regular scientists try to make a cure for said affliction...thinking it is a problem...when all reality, some of the afflicted started using their new found additions See More▼ to horrid use...while others put them to good use...
Or
What about a world where anyone can be literally any living thing. As long as that living thing can have an neural implant placed just behind the base of the skull where their entire existance, their memories, and themselves are stored on an SD card-like device that can be placed into the body of any body (with the implant) and can be anything...Wars between various animal kingdoms, nations, clans, and individuals may break out....what would it be like to live in the not so distant world like that..?
What about a story about an affliction within the scenario world, where the afflicted gain something...regular scientists try to make a cure for said affliction...thinking it is a problem...when all reality, some of the afflicted started using their new found additions See More▼ to horrid use...while others put them to good use...
Or
What about a world where anyone can be literally any living thing. As long as that living thing can have an neural implant placed just behind the base of the skull where their entire existance, their memories, and themselves are stored on an SD card-like device that can be placed into the body of any body (with the implant) and can be anything...Wars between various animal kingdoms, nations, clans, and individuals may break out....what would it be like to live in the not so distant world like that..?
on September 15, 2016
on September 15, 2016
https://www.qfeast.com/story/Mseinv/Lurking-Nightmares-The-Return Can I have some critique on this even though it's not yet finished and it may have a few spelling errors.
Lurking Nightmares: The Return
Remember the day those teens died and became the animatronics that vowed revenge? If so, they've been relocated to another place but this time they won't be on the stage no more. Those animatronics were locked away in storage decaying from missing parts and than there are the newer animatronics who are the best attractions for "Funtime City" it may seem fun but what's the story behind them that creates their forms. Are they also young teens who've suffered like Ellie and her friends? Find out in Lurking Nightmares: The Return.
@luckpup There is a first story that I have made before this one. It is completed and you may read it if you want.
on August 31, 2016
@LilGaster Your welcome. Reviewing it was my pleasure, I'll be sure to read any more chapters that come out.
on August 31, 2016
I think this is going pretty good.You asked for it to be critiqued, so make sure to keep your reader engaged, don't get too cliche, or confusing. I just think you should show more character, and scenario detail.
on August 31, 2016
on August 31, 2016
Need Critique on this bit.
Blackness poured itself onto the empty desert. Blood spilled from the young woman's injured head, dribbling onto the grains of sand below and staining them a crimson hue. She glanced over at the prince who treaded beside her. "M-Matthew..." She winced. "Can we rest here...?"
Prince Matthew sighed and shook his head. "We're in the middle of the desert, Bean. We'll freeze to death!....Bean?"
Breathing a sigh of exhaustion, she collapsed onto the sandy See More▼ ground.
"Ugh, you're unbelievable. Sleeping in a place like this....Just like a kid..." Matthew sighed, pulling a woolen blanket over her sleeping form.
"Though... Aren't we all just children? Autumn...You...I? Caught up in our parents' wars?"
The prince placed a hand on the sleeping woman's shoulder.
"Heh...How convenient..."
Blackness poured itself onto the empty desert. Blood spilled from the young woman's injured head, dribbling onto the grains of sand below and staining them a crimson hue. She glanced over at the prince who treaded beside her. "M-Matthew..." She winced. "Can we rest here...?"
Prince Matthew sighed and shook his head. "We're in the middle of the desert, Bean. We'll freeze to death!....Bean?"
Breathing a sigh of exhaustion, she collapsed onto the sandy See More▼ ground.
"Ugh, you're unbelievable. Sleeping in a place like this....Just like a kid..." Matthew sighed, pulling a woolen blanket over her sleeping form.
"Though... Aren't we all just children? Autumn...You...I? Caught up in our parents' wars?"
The prince placed a hand on the sleeping woman's shoulder.
"Heh...How convenient..."
I know I'm late, but this sounds great just make sure to keep your readers engaged, and don't get too cliche, or confusing.<3
on August 31, 2016
on August 01, 2016
https://www.qfeast.com/story/r3wzgB/Personal-Story-Ideas Could somebody review these?
Personal Story Ideas
Just a list of story ideas for me to look back on, it's my personal list written as a private story, so this begs the question: How tf are you reading this? ya hacker! (Well, maybe you're a part of the underground, so i guess you're excused... this time...)
on August 01, 2016
So. I've established a universe and the possibility to link them, so crossovers could be made, but from the universe, what to write?
Idea 1:
Anonymous:
A story about a man who is an utter nobody, living as a bum, recently released from assault charges. His father, member of the hacking group "AnonTech", passes away, leaving him a mask he used in his will, with a small note "you are who you choose to be, it's never too late"
The man takes this mask, along with a trench coat. See More▼ He tosses them aside and forgets about them, until he sees the injustice of the world through a terrible event. He slips on the outfit, and sneaks into a criminal base at night. He sleathily subdues them all, retrieving an odd object from within, which turns out to be much more. The people see the outfitted man on the news, regarded as a hero due to cameras withing the criminals base.
Idea 2:
Whispers from the other Side:
Taking place in the same world as the above story, a young boy is struck by lightning. After he recovers, he discovers he can see spirits. While coping this ability and keeping it a secret, He meets an odd spirit who teaches h that in order to make physical contact with other spirits, he must be able to control and moderate his aura, using a "vessel" . He gains an odd pendant, allowing him to do so. As he resolves conflict between spirits, and getting into the tangles and dangers of demons, he discovers a horrific truth about a future only he can prevent.
I can't give away too much without giving away plot, but this is what I'm thinking about after writing "Impure". Leave a vote on which you'd like me to write first
Idea 1:
Anonymous:
A story about a man who is an utter nobody, living as a bum, recently released from assault charges. His father, member of the hacking group "AnonTech", passes away, leaving him a mask he used in his will, with a small note "you are who you choose to be, it's never too late"
The man takes this mask, along with a trench coat. See More▼ He tosses them aside and forgets about them, until he sees the injustice of the world through a terrible event. He slips on the outfit, and sneaks into a criminal base at night. He sleathily subdues them all, retrieving an odd object from within, which turns out to be much more. The people see the outfitted man on the news, regarded as a hero due to cameras withing the criminals base.
Idea 2:
Whispers from the other Side:
Taking place in the same world as the above story, a young boy is struck by lightning. After he recovers, he discovers he can see spirits. While coping this ability and keeping it a secret, He meets an odd spirit who teaches h that in order to make physical contact with other spirits, he must be able to control and moderate his aura, using a "vessel" . He gains an odd pendant, allowing him to do so. As he resolves conflict between spirits, and getting into the tangles and dangers of demons, he discovers a horrific truth about a future only he can prevent.
I can't give away too much without giving away plot, but this is what I'm thinking about after writing "Impure". Leave a vote on which you'd like me to write first
on July 27, 2016
Just a bit of advice:
When writing an adventure story, romance is okay, but things an adventure story. Don't interrupt the main story for romance, instead, make it part of the main story, examples of what not to do :
The fifth wave
Example of what you should do:
Original teen titans
When writing an adventure story, romance is okay, but things an adventure story. Don't interrupt the main story for romance, instead, make it part of the main story, examples of what not to do :
The fifth wave
Example of what you should do:
Original teen titans
An example of one that takes part of the game to do romance and has it separate from the main story but makes it work:
Fire emblem
Fire emblem
on July 27, 2016
on July 27, 2016
https://www.qfeast.com/story/bPfik0/Everything-within
Hi this is my first romance story and I would really like if people will take a look.. any advice to better my story can be known.
Hi this is my first romance story and I would really like if people will take a look.. any advice to better my story can be known.
Everything within
"You are my everything," he claimed softly. Crystal was the school nerd she was very smart, but when the new kid came around these two seem to crash into each other. Both are open to the possibility.
on July 26, 2016
https://www.qfeast.com/story/Q8e0GU/A-Tail-Tale Since a few others are presenting their stories as well... If anyone would like to read my story, rate and critique it as much as you want, here it is.
A Tail Tale
They say conflict drives people away, and prejudices are made to splinter us. What happens to a society that has long lived united against struggles of revolutionary war, civil war, world wars, depressions, and terrorism when disease strikes. When the very places we gather in become quarantine zones, or our graves? When one day your neighbor could be fine, friendly, and happy, but then become ravenous, becoming something else. When society is struck by two similar plagues that either turns you into a "freak" or a dangerous feral like creature that loses all intelligence and humanity. While both types look exactly the same, society divides itself to defend, or attack against this threat.
on July 26, 2016