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Maybe can someone please review what I have so far?
https://www.qfeast.com/story/NWK91O/Heroes-of-Holovor
Heroes of Holovor
Heroes of Holovor
This story takes place many years into the future, In a galaxy, the Cyberplex, where all planets have advanced technology. However, this story is only focused on one of the planets in this galaxy; Planet Vortice. But that's not the point. In the country of Holovor, a new school has been built, but with many advanced classes, Many teenagers from the ages of 13 to 18 had been sent to this school. Why? They must learn to defend themselves from Viridi, the evil sorceress. This school is the only place that is safe from her. The story focuses on 4 girls, 13 year old Mintra Timons, 15 year old Estela Purana, 14 year old Taro Cahiira and 16 year old Corrin Hadden. Together, they form a team that might possibly save their world.
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on Monday
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Any ideas for a new book? I need help because I'm stuck on what I should write about.
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Lady_Artemis
When in doubt, write FANFICTION!!!
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on October 26
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Fates Have Been Sealed.
Fates Have Been Sealed.
Basil somehow finds herself in the mess. Sold off to Kemen and meeting others...will she even make it through it all? Will she learn the rules? What will happen?
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on October 20
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Alice in Cyberland
Alice in Cyberland
Yes. Another Alice in Wonderland fanfic, but it's different. After a cyborg named Phoenix goes into Wonderland, she realizes how different this one is from the origonal. The queen and Alice are dead , with the prince gone. People are in a battle for control, and everything is... advanced. And she joins one group to get things back in order.
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on October 19
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I need a review on one of my most unnoticed stories on here, please!

https://www.qfeast.com/story/LLIw8b/Butterfly-Kisses-Zelink-Friendship
Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]
Butterfly Kisses [Zelink Friendship]
Some great things don't always go as planned; Sometimes, things happen. But Zelda refuses to let life spoil her day with Link. (Zelda, Link, Friendship. Prior to game)
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breann.west.5
Thankssssssss
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Rebel_Assasin
I allready read it. It's great.
on October 19
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on October 19
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any ideas? huge writers block rn
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on September 15
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Okay, I actually want to take a turn away from my regular stories, and work on something dark, and gory.
So come at me with ideas, people! Tell me what you've got, and I'll see what I can make
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tylnapp
Oh...I can come up with many gore filled stories....dark as well....At least I think I can....

What about a story about an affliction within the scenario world, where the afflicted gain something...regular scientists try to make a cure for said affliction...thinking it is a problem...when all reality, some of the afflicted started using their new found additions See More▼
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on September 15
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/Mseinv/Lurking-Nightmares-The-Return Can I have some critique on this even though it's not yet finished and it may have a few spelling errors.
Lurking Nightmares: The Return
Lurking Nightmares: The Return
Remember the day those teens died and became the animatronics that vowed revenge? If so, they've been relocated to another place but this time they won't be on the stage no more. Those animatronics were locked away in storage decaying from missing parts and than there are the newer animatronics who are the best attractions for "Funtime City" it may seem fun but what's the story behind them that creates their forms. Are they also young teens who've suffered like Ellie and her friends? Find out in Lurking Nightmares: The Return.
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AnimatronicHeart
@luckpup There is a first story that I have made before this one. It is completed and you may read it if you want.
on August 31
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luckpup
@LilGaster Your welcome. Reviewing it was my pleasure, I'll be sure to read any more chapters that come out.
on August 31
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AnimatronicHeart
@luckpup Alright thanks. It's still a work in progress though.
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luckpup
I think this is going pretty good.You asked for it to be critiqued, so make sure to keep your reader engaged, don't get too cliche, or confusing. I just think you should show more character, and scenario detail.
on August 31
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on August 31
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Need Critique on this bit.

Blackness poured itself onto the empty desert. Blood spilled from the young woman's injured head, dribbling onto the grains of sand below and staining them a crimson hue. She glanced over at the prince who treaded beside her. "M-Matthew..." She winced. "Can we rest here...?"
Prince Matthew sighed and shook his head. "We're in the middle of the desert, Bean. We'll freeze to death!....Bean?"
Breathing a sigh of exhaustion, she collapsed onto the sandy See More▼
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luckpup
I know I'm late, but this sounds great just make sure to keep your readers engaged, and don't get too cliche, or confusing.
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on August 01
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Personal Story Ideas
Personal Story Ideas
Just a list of story ideas for me to look back on, it's my personal list written as a private story, so this begs the question: How tf are you reading this? ya hacker! (Well, maybe you're a part of the underground, so i guess you're excused... this time...)
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on August 01
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Before writing, please think through you're story and plan out what will happen. This'll be easier for readers because updates will happen faster.
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on July 27
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So uh... hi? I have to number of different ideas...

Uh...

1) In the world which has recovered and rebuilt from the nuclear war, everything seems in order. Accept 98% of the population is blind. The blindness was caused by the people who saw the nuclear explosions, then it was passed down genetically. The other 2% are doctors and politicians... essentially, healthy people rule the world. Then there's our main character, Grey. She is deaf, and probably the only deaf person left See More▼
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PermanentSmile
Okay
on July 27
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TheSmolKookieMonster
:^) if you need any tips on how to make it more interesting i'm here
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PermanentSmile
I've had the idea for awhile, thanks so much @TheSmolKookieMonster
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TheSmolKookieMonster
I really look forward to reading it. Its a creative, and solid idea.
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PermanentSmile
@TheSmolKookieMonster Thank you!!
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on July 27
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So. I've established a universe and the possibility to link them, so crossovers could be made, but from the universe, what to write?

Idea 1:

Anonymous:
A story about a man who is an utter nobody, living as a bum, recently released from assault charges. His father, member of the hacking group "AnonTech", passes away, leaving him a mask he used in his will, with a small note "you are who you choose to be, it's never too late"
The man takes this mask, along with a trench coat. See More▼
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Angel_the_fallen_angel
I know stupid qfeast
on July 27
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Lightstriker195
Thx, sorry qfeast just told me to put this on here
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Angel_the_fallen_angel
Idea two
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on July 27
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Just a bit of advice:
When writing an adventure story, romance is okay, but things an adventure story. Don't interrupt the main story for romance, instead, make it part of the main story, examples of what not to do :
The fifth wave
Example of what you should do:
Original teen titans
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Parabolic
An example of one that takes part of the game to do romance and has it separate from the main story but makes it work:
Fire emblem
on July 27
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Parabolic
Or any new age cartoon void of a plot
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Lightstriker195
Another example of what not to do:
Scooby doo: mystery incorporated
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Parabolic
More examples of to do:
Bravely second
Bravely Default
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Starlord3452
YASSSS
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on July 27
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/bPfik0/Everything-within

Hi this is my first romance story and I would really like if people will take a look.. any advice to better my story can be known.
Everything within
Everything within
"You are my everything," he claimed softly. Crystal was the school nerd she was very smart, but when the new kid came around these two seem to crash into each other. Both are open to the possibility.
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on July 26
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Stories of my OCS
Stories of my OCS
These are Short Stories of Aksel,Arabella,Bjarke,and Kristen so don't flame around these parings. Warning the stories contain Yaoi Boy X boy,Norway X England,and the aftermath of "Hong Kong can you please say my name?" the main paring of that story Hong Kong X Iceland and Bjarke is the only child of Denmark and yes the main fandom of this story is Hetalia
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on July 26
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It's not done but please rate and critique
https://www.qfeast.com/story/7HCzc4/Broken
Broken
Broken
Kayla was new and had no friends. She had been suicidal for a year. Now almost killed by her mom, she went to live with her dad. Social anxiety, normal anxiety, and depression are gonna make this hard for her.
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on July 26
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/Q8e0GU/A-Tail-Tale Since a few others are presenting their stories as well... If anyone would like to read my story, rate and critique it as much as you want, here it is.
A Tail Tale
A Tail Tale
They say conflict drives people away, and prejudices are made to splinter us. What happens to a society that has long lived united against struggles of revolutionary war, civil war, world wars, depressions, and terrorism when disease strikes. When the very places we gather in become quarantine zones, or our graves? When one day your neighbor could be fine, friendly, and happy, but then become ravenous, becoming something else. When society is struck by two similar plagues that either turns you into a "freak" or a dangerous feral like creature that loses all intelligence and humanity. While both types look exactly the same, society divides itself to defend, or attack against this threat.
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on July 26
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https://www.qfeast.com/story/g9opsC/Blood-of-Dragons?ref=sl Please have a read and I welcome any pointers
Blood of Dragons
Blood of Dragons
Abandoned at the doors of the Arcane tower, a little babe cries, eyes of brass and hair of gold, a half breed, between elf and man... And the blood of ancient fire running through his veins. The fate of the land rests on him, but where he leads it, no-one knows...
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on July 26
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