Pack

Pack

I give credit to Erin Hunter for inspiring me to write this story. It is similar to the Warriors series. I wrote it when I was younger, so it isn't as good as my others.

published on November 20, 201345 reads 22 readers 14 not completed
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Chapter 3.

Chapter One

I stood on the edge of my territory feeling the wind wrap around my muzzle and wind its way through my fur. The sun was high in the sky and I could feel its warmth on my pelt. I should be getting back to camp. They probably will be wondering where I am. I could catch a couple of loads of prey and that might make up for it. Suddenly I caught a whiff of a StormPack enemy fighting dog! On my territory! I raced back to camp to tell Crystalstar, our leader, to go investigate.
When I got back to camp, Crystalstar was grooming himself outside his den. I ran up to him and told him that I had heard a StormPack fighting dog deep inside our territory. Crystalstar told me to gather my mentor, Dewclaw, Runningflower, Spottedpool, Whitebramble, and  Redpaw.
By the time I had told them that Crystalstar wanted to see them, the StormPack fighting dog was entering the camp. As soon as he did so, I noticed that he was limping. I told Crystalstar that he wasn’t a threat to our pack anymore and that he probably needed our help.
Turns out, I was right. The StormPack fighting dog explained to us that he came in peace, and that StormPack was in danger. DarkPack and SeaPack were attacking StormPack’s camp and StormPack would be wiped out if we didn’t help them.

I am so excited! What  would a battle be like?! Will anyone die? I certainly hope not! Will I become a fighting dog after the battle? With all of these questions spinning through my head, I raced through the underbrush after my pack leader to help save StormPack.
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Two words Continue it!!!!!!!!
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Mcdazzle2000
Lol thanks, but I don't think that I will. It was just something that I wrote when I was younger. Anyway, the author wrote a series based around a similar idea after I wrote this, so I definitely don't think I'm going to write any more in it. Sorry. :/
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
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on January 31, 2017
Mcdazzle2000
Yea... sometimes stuff like that just happens :P
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on January 30, 2017
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
It's ok. When I was writing Killer on a heart beat the idea came from Chara and her backstory but then I realised that everyone knew her and someone asked if I got the idea from 'Angels book' so since I never really finished it beacuse of that but the original name was killer with a heart. I was super excited about it toO ? Oh well
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on January 26, 2017
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on January 25, 2017
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on December 14, 2016
Darky_the_Wolf_Dog
This is awesome so far!
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Darky_the_Wolf_Dog
You welcome! ;)
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Mcdazzle2000
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on November 24, 2015
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on November 23, 2015
Mcdazzle2000
Thanks. I doubt I'll be adding more to it though. Im focusing purely on Dragon Princess right now. :) I want to get it published.
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on November 23, 2015
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on November 10, 2015
Mcdazzle2000
aw thx!!!!!
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on June 06, 2014
gonebitches
Your a good writer
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on June 06, 2014
Mcdazzle2000
It is not my best piece.
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on January 03, 2014
Mcdazzle2000
I wrote this a long time ago, when I was 11, so I accept your rating.
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on January 03, 2014
Mcdazzle2000
Can you tell me why you rate it this?
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on November 26, 2013