Chosen

Chosen

Every five years one child from each family 10-18 is chosen because of their abilities and Amethyst Brite is one of these. She must find out what element she controls and survive the Element Testing.

published on May 04, 2014577 reads 63 readers 114 completed
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Chapter 4.
First Impressions

First Impressions

DAWN'S POV

After the Elementors where all settled down, Each section was led in through a door. I gaped when I stepped out the door. We where on a giant room that had a glass roof. I saw the wind people on the other side. "Wind and Water will practice here." Said the Wind Elementor. I ignored the rest and went to explore the room. There were small streams running through the entire room. The sun shone brightly in through the clear roof. I was so lost in my thoughts that I didn't see a guy who was ALSO lost in his thoughts. "OW!" I said as I bumped into him. "You where the guy that was really bad at all the elements!" I blurted out. He raised an eyebrow. "Thats... A bit harsh." I blocked out the comment. "How did you survive!?" I asked, eager to learn. "Um... Well, I think the Elementor didn't want my sister to.." He didn't finish his sentence. "Oh." I said. I decided it wasn't the best choice to talk about that, so I changed the subject. "My name's Dawn by the way!" I said. "Airion." He replied.

AMETHYST'S POV

I saw Airion go to a different room as me. Our Elementor took us to a dark room. It had lava cracks in the obsidian looking floor. There was no sign of sunlight, only the dim glow from the lava. The walls where mostly stone and dirt. The Earth Elementor explained everything that was going on. He said that he knew all the practice and first choosing had gone very quickly for us. "This is your training room." He said. He also said, every day we would duel one person until we had dueled all. Then the top 10 would move on. After that the top 5 would go to the "other place." I instantly got to work. I felt uncomfortable because the Fire Elementor kept standing there and watched me practice. Nothing happened even though I tried and tried. The Elementor let out a soft chuckle. "First you must concentrate." He said. "I AM!" I wanted to shout back, but I restrained. I sat down on the surprisingly cold floor. I closed my eyes and thought. For a second nothing happened. Then, I saw fire inside my mind and I opened my eyes quickly. I now had a throbbing headache. The palm of my hand was burning. When I finally had the courage to look at it, the Elementor's Brown-Red eyes brightened and I saw. On the palm if my hand, was a red mark. It was kind of flame shaped.

AIRION'S POV

Practice went pretty well. I couldn't get my mind off that Dawn girl, though. Then again, she was second picked, I was last. She was WAY out of my league. The good thing is, the Elementor said: "You have improved." That was pretty cool.
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Celia_Bowen
Is anyone else reminded of Divergent?
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CrystalDiamond2323
I wrote this before I knew divergent existed
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on September 29, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
not anymmore. its marked as completed
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on September 28, 2014
Celia_Bowen
You know you can actually edit what's alredy there, right?
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on September 28, 2014
Celia_Bowen
Cool
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on September 28, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
thanks! i'm gonna make an edited version that's longer and has no pov switches and is less cheesy
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on September 28, 2014
Celia_Bowen
Wow. So basically you came up with a storyline as good as one that millions of people have read, that's really amazing. Great job! All the switching POVs are kind of confusing
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CrystalDiamond2323
-CHOSEN-
remembering Chosen with 72 readers, but only 20 chapters. Released's first chapter is in!

@Aliyss @Animefan224 @BlueWatermelon @BobDaCool @Coolcass22 @Creator3000 @Crimsonthehedgehog @Me1234 @JeweledOwl812 @MockingjayDistrict @SC_Q.13 @The.Girl.With.The.Glasses
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BobDaCool
yay!who thumbed this down btw
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The.Girl.With.The.Glasses
Awesome story! Though you might want to add some paragraph breaks in the first chapter ;)
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CrystalDiamond2323
:3 thanks and yea
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SC_Q.13
Love this story!
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SC_Q.13
Reply to comments here. You can even reply to replies, but it will look weird. Qfeasters have to get used to it.
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CrystalDiamond2323
Ok then...
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on July 12, 2014
SC_Q.13
sorry. recording this
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on July 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
What? I'm confused
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on July 12, 2014
SC_Q.13
see?
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on July 12, 2014
SC_Q.13
Like this
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Coolcass22
I Loved the Whole Thing, its so fascinating and like a proper book. I hope you become an author when you become older because I would surely read your books
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CrystalDiamond2323
Aww!! Thanks
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BobDaCool
Awesome
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on June 24, 2014
Animefan224
I really like this! This is pretty much exactly what I want in a book!
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CrystalDiamond2323
Thanks :D
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JeweledOwl812
Super cool! It was awese from the beginning!
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JeweledOwl812
*awesome
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CrystalDiamond2323
Thanks! :)
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CrystalDiamond2323
:D I hope you enjoyed it
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on June 08, 2014
BobDaCool
Awesome!
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on May 31, 2014
Cristallite
I must say, that you had a amazing beginning makingdreaders(like me) want to read more, the chapters between were full of actions si readers didnt get bored. The chapters were quite long (which I like) and you also had a amazing finish
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Wolfleader117
My first ones are about my roleplay characters/my friends' characters, biographies, last known locations, that sort of thing. Then after I'm done with all that, I will be writing the roleplay out (Some character's names were forgotten, so I had to create new names for the forgotten ones, lol)
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on May 26, 2014
SC_Q.13
yay Magic is there!!! :D
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on May 26, 2014
BlueWatermelon
amazing finish!
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on May 24, 2014
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Coolcass22
Honestly crystal, these are amazing!
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on May 22, 2014
Coolcass22
Wow o_o Take me a couple of days to read then x
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on May 22, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
20 it think
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on May 21, 2014
Coolcass22
How Many Chapters Is There Crystal? x
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on May 21, 2014
Coolcass22
Amazin' x
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on May 21, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
:D anytime
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on May 20, 2014
Cristallite
^_^ Np
I'm just grateful that you added me in it etc
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on May 20, 2014
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Cristallite
Nah its fine
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on May 20, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
Srry, just that sequels don't really get as much attention as the actual story
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on May 20, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
No sequel
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on May 20, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
WRITE A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE.A.SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I NEED A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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CrystalDiamond2323
SEQUEL TIME XD XD XD
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CrystalDiamond2323
Sometimes i did want to make a sequel, but meh
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