Silvermoons story

Silvermoons story

This is my first MLP FiM fic no idea why I'm writing it but yeah sorry if it may be short.If anyone can create a cover art that would be appreciated since i am not that artistic. Constructive criticism is fine.

published on March 30, 201421 reads 11 readers 27 not completed
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Chapter 2.

Chapter 1:Memories

After practicing my daily routine, I headed to PonyVille since my best friends ShootingStar and SunShine lived there.When I arrived,I headed to SugarCubeCorner since that was our favorite hang out spot and since they were usually there. On the way there, a very energetic pink mare with poofy pink hair bounced over to me and asked"HiSilverMoon!AreYouheadingtoSugarCubeCorner?wellifyouarethatswherei'mheadingtoo!CanItagalongwithyou?" Ending with a huge smile and looking at me. I personally had no idea what Pinkie Pie said except something about tagging along with me so I smiled back and said "sure race you there!". I heard her say ok so I then zoomed off to SugarCube Corner. I knew I probably was going to lose since she always beat me somehow.

When I arrived,I saw Pinkie Pie there.I smiled again and then after saying good job I headed inside with Pinkie Pie behind me.I saw ShootingStar and Sunshine sitting at a table.They noticed me and motioned for me to join them.I happily obliged and sat down with them. ShootingStar was a dark blue mare with a bright yellow mane and tail as well as dark blue eyes.She had a Cutie Mark of a shooting star and was a pegasus like me. SunShine was a sky blue mare with a red and orange mane and tail(a bit like Sunset Shimmer).SunShine had sky blue eyes and a cutie mark of a smiling sun.She was a quite talented unicorn.

All of a sudden the wall crumbled. As the debris cleared, we could see a pony covered in shining black armor. Behind the pony were two other ponies covered in armor but what chilled me the most was that the armor was made of bones. The pony in black armor looked like the leader and had a ominous skull helmet as did the others. On the chest there was a symbol that looks familiar.It was like Twilight's Cutie Mark except the star in the middle was black and the outside star was bone white.The leader also looked like he had a scar around his eye.  Memories of the 'incident' came flooding back.

(flashback)

There was smoke everywhere. 'Dad?,Dad? Where are you!?' Dad!?' I cried out hoping for an answer. When no answer  came, I started searching hoping that he was still alive although at heart I knew it wasn't but I refused to believe that. A couple minutes later I found somepony. The pony looked up at me, grinning   like a mad pony.I screamed in fear. The pony wore shining black armor and on the chest there was a black star with a spike kinda looking thing that came out of the gaps and was bone white. The pony in armor just smiled wider and then I noticed he was holding a katana with a black hilt and a blood red diamond-shaped gem embedded in it. The blade however was covered in blood. I then saw my fathers dead body that had been stabbed in the heart at his feet. Blood was flowing out of the wound.My face turned a very pale white.The pony had killed my father.My father was dead because of this pony. The world seemed to freeze. I felt anger boil up inside of me and I then punched him in the face as hard as I could being a filly at the time.This made him drop his sword which I then picked up and slashed his eye with. "My eye!"he shouted in pain holding his eye. I stepped back and dropped the sword just realizing what I had done."Why you little brat!" he said picking up his sword and walking towards me.I looked at him in fear.He was going to kill me.The pony pointed the sword to my throat. "Say goodbye" he then said. As he was about to finish me off he stopped."your'e lucky this time since I gotta run." He said before disappearing in a cloud of smoke. I looked at my dead father and started to cry

(End of flashback)

"No,no,no this can't be happening!" I kept saying hysterically. Once I had calmed down a bit I then told myself "Yeah its all a very bad dream. It all a dream.So why can't I wake up!......It isn't a dream. The leader saw me and looked at me dead in the eye.He then told the other two ponies he was with something that I couldn't hear but I was certain that it wasn't good.

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Comments (27)

caspertheminorman
If you want, I could draw you a cover. I really have nothing else to do, anyways.
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caspertheminorman
Also, even if you say no I’m making one >:0
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Cristallite
Np, thank you so much
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on May 08, 2018
caspertheminorman
It looks bad, but I finished it yesturday.
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on May 07, 2018
Cristallite
oof. You're more than welcome too uwu Thank you~<3
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on May 07, 2018
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on May 06, 2018
silvermoon43344
-.-
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silvermoon43344
o im just bored that's what i mean when i make this face sorry about the confusion this story is a great story
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Cristallite
Oh, thanks! This story is kind of on hiatus though since I have no ideas and a bad sense of writer's block, that and I'm working on something else.
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on December 21, 2015
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on December 19, 2015
Cristallite
I wrote this a while ago for one of my OC's. I just created that name because it would suit it. I honestly am not proud of it and will probably edit it next time I have time. Please do not be offended because of it's name. This story has nothing to do with about you. It is about my OC.
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on December 19, 2015
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on December 15, 2015
Cristallite
Thanks CD(mind if I call you that?)
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on June 15, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
I'm not an MLP fan but this is good! :)
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on June 15, 2014
Cristallite
Working on it!
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on May 13, 2014
Cristallite
Ok sorry if i dont add chapters to my stories for a while.I assure u I am working on them
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on April 06, 2014
Cristallite
Hmm Crystals younger sister perhaps:

Possible names: Flare,Ember Storm,fire,cloud (you can combine some of these words like firestorm)

Eyes:Sky blue,firey orange,deep blue,crimson red
Cutie mark ideas:something to do with a storm cloud,regular cloud,fireballs,fire,orange,phoenix
Coat ideas: Dark yellow,Red(any shade),orange(any shade), white or something else. See More▼
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on April 01, 2014
Cristallite
Umm couldn I just say what could happen? Maybe shes good but then the villians gain something precious of hers say for a sibling or something special and threaten her to act as a spy for them until shes found out and the main characters forgive and she gains the thing back?
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Cool so is Crystal evil good or changes from one side to he other and if so what side did she begin with?
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
If so I will try to put it in the next chapter and tell me what alignment she or he is.Like if shes good or working with the villain and if she ever changes side.
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Do you still want the oc from before?
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Anyone have any OC I could use or they want me to use and please try to get others to read this if possible :D
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Also sorry if I got some info wrong and I am still not used to how Lunq speaks so that may be wrong but I tried.
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Thanks and i will
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on March 30, 2014
Pinkie123
I like it you should post the next chapter :D
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Might as well post the next chapter
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Also I have the first three chapters done
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
I will continue if you guys like it :D
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on March 30, 2014
Cristallite
Tell me what you think like i this is my first story.
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on March 30, 2014