Crimson the hedgehog

Crimson the hedgehog

I decided to make a story about my OCs Crimson and Dusk.I may add other peoples OCs if they allow me to which they may not.I am only a mild Sonic fan so sorry if things are not that good.Making the prologue then anything else.

published on April 01, 2014116 reads 25 readers 28 not completed
Chapter 1.

Prolouge-The begining

Crimsons POV

I sighed and looked up at the lakes water.I could see the reflection of the moon above.This was my brother as well as my favorite spot.We used to come here all the time, before..before he well died..

-Flashback-
My brother and I were skipping rocks on the lake water.My brothers name was Dusk.Dusk looked at me and I glanced back smiling.Suddenly a loud gunshot was heard in the distance.We looked at out village.Smoke was rising above it.Dusk looked at me and i could see he was scared.We ran back as fast as we could which was pretty fast even at a young age.When we reached the village I saw a egg shaped..thing laughing and many robots.Dusk and i hid in the shadows. The egg thing looked like it was talking but I could not hear from this distance.

A robot spotted us and told the egg thing.I looked at Dusk with fear.Two robots started heading towards us.Dusk told me to run away before they could take us."W-what will happen to you though?" i asked although knowing the answer already. Dusk looked at me."Go" he said once more.I nodded and ran over to the bush before the robots came.I peeked out and watched silently.Dusk was brought to the egg thing on his knees."Well, well look what we have here.Hmm..you remind me of someone"The egg thing said studying my brother.
I saw my brother growl but say nothing."A silent one it seems, well that will change soon enough." the egg thing grinned.The robots picked up my brother by his neck and dragged him into the ship.After returning they took the other villagers.Among the few I saw my mother and father.

I could not stand it anymore.I ran into the forest on the verge of tears. I went to the lake we were at before and sat down and sobbed.I had just seen my brother,my parents and everyone I ever loved been taken away for who knows what.I heard someone behind me and saw a blue hedgehog."Hey.Are you alright?" he said.I stayed silent and continued to cry. "Are you lost?" He asked. I sniffled and stopped crying."N-no" I said looking at the stranger."Have you by any chance seen a..hmm. A egg shaped person?". I slowly nodded pointing to my village.The blue hedgehog looked over and saw the village."Oh no. we are too late" he whispered.

"Well Im Sonic.Whats your name?" he asked softly."I-its Crimson" I replied with a sigh."Are you from that village?"I heard him say.I nodded half heartedly trying to hold back tear but it was no use.I burst out int sobs remembering what hd happened."Shh.Its going to be ok"Sonic said trying to comfort me.I continued to cry but stopped later and started to fall asleep.
-end of flashback-

Its been seven years since then.I still miss Dusk and wonder what happened to him every day.Sonic announced me as a Freedom Fighter and I had met many new friends.Shadow,Knuckles,Silver,Tails even Amy.Although I think Shadow and i relate the most as we have both lost someone dear.I sighed and murmured"I wish you were here Dusk..

Author Note:Sorry if its bad like I said I am not the biggest Sonic fan but yeah.
Crimson:Hope you enjoyed ^_^
Me:Please comment
Dusk:I wi-mmph*I stop Dusk from saying anything pushing him of the set*
Me:Spoiler!!
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Comments (28)

sapphirethehedgehog
It's been ages since you updated this, and left it with a cliffhanger?! Come onnnnn XD I want moreeeee
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The_Panda_Otaku
Sorry Sapphire. There is this other story I am working on as well and I have been on Quoted more then Qfeast but I will try.
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sapphirethehedgehog
Hiiiiii!
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on October 02, 2015
The_Panda_Otaku
Hey Sapphire!
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on October 02, 2015
sapphirethehedgehog
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on October 01, 2015
cassiesanime
my cousins name is saphire lol
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on October 01, 2015
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on May 31, 2015
Alexishedgebat
Thanks.
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on May 29, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
Your welcome
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on May 26, 2014
Alexishedgebat
Yay you added my cousin Julie.
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on May 25, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
Im working on it, also you mean a character for this story?
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on May 02, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more! How do I create a character?
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on May 02, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
thanks
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on April 28, 2014
SnakesVenomSans
I like this
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on April 19, 2014
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on April 18, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
I know how I want the story to end
But I dont know where to start
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on April 18, 2014
Alexishedgebat
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on April 18, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
Aww thanks
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on April 18, 2014
Alexishedgebat
this is so good. 8D
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on April 18, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
Thanks
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on April 14, 2014
Vanessa_the_dark
i LOVE the story
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on April 13, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
I try it's probably not the best story out there and chapters may not come out fast but yeah
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on April 06, 2014
SnakesVenomSans
It is really good. I wish my stories were that good
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on April 06, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
Thanks.I am trying
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on April 06, 2014
SnakesVenomSans
I love it! Keep it up!
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on April 06, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
Thanks
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on April 02, 2014
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on April 01, 2014
Stars_In_The_Sky
Nice story so far!
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on April 01, 2014