Do Not Read This.

Do Not Read This.

Trying to make the beginning of a Fantasy novel. Not sure if I'll keep this version, I've restarted about 10 different ways, so probably not. Oh well, enjoy. Please give comments, suggestions, critiques, I would love to be a great writer one day ;)

published on April 17, 201392 reads 48 readers 24 not completed
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Chapter 2.

On A Run. And Busted.

The next morning, my eyes flutter open at the sound of my alarm clock going off. It's sound is annoying, BEEP BEEP BEEP, as if it thinks I will never get up! I angrily throw the covers off of myself and leap to my feet, slamming a hand down, hitting a button to silence it. I fight the urge to hurl it into a wall. I take a deep breath, hoping I didn't wake my father. I doubted it. But I had to have the alarm clock, just to make sure I'd wake up.
     With a sigh, I stumble over to my dresser, still in the dark as the sun has yet to come up over the ground. I don't bother turn on the light, yet. I yank open a dresser, immediately wincing as a stab of agony shakes up my side. I grit my teeth, ignoring it, and feel my fingers through the fabrics. I easily recognize the soft mesh material of basketball shorts, then the fleecy material of a sweatshirt, and then a t-shirt. It works. I rummage through another drawer for smaller articles of clothing, such as socks. Still, without a light. My feet shuffle across the wood floor as I stagger tiredly across the room. I dress quickly and I let my toes drag across the floor. They run into a familiar, hard, coarse material and I deftly bend down and hoist my bag to my shoulders. I let out a gasp as my side feels like its being attacked by needles. I stubbornly shake it off and creep through the house, my bag on my shoulders. My eyes dart around, making sure no one is watching. As if my father would be awake. He's probably wasted in his room, probably won't get up for hours. I slip out of the house, quiet as possible and take off on a run down the street, my pale green eyes flit from house to house as my back thuds painfully on my back. Books, a laptop, a phone, and countless papers all bounce inside the bag with each abrupt stride. I find running difficult, as the weight throws off my small build.
     It's getting a little lighter out, the sky an eerie grey as the sun stretches up over the horizon.
     A bolt of lightning seers through my body and I fall to the ground, paralyzed from the jolt and with fear, a silent scream that will never be heard leaves my lips.
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kindperson
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on July 14, 2015
Avienexjel
Good. ;)
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on July 17, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Will you please continue? You're a really really really really really really really really really really really really really really talented writer!
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on June 06, 2014
Nobody.07
O.o *that moment when you think your writing sucks... and you've people who really like it. That's when you know you are too picky with your own stuff* XD
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on October 21, 2013
THEVAMPSDEMILOVATO
this is good
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on October 09, 2013
swageyamatobiyolo
OMG WHEN DOES THE BOOK COME OUT
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on October 08, 2013
kikizoey4me
You know if you title it do not read it most peoples natural instinct is to read it xD
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on August 27, 2013
kellygirl2
Good but well confusing
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on May 04, 2013
Nobody.07
I would like everyone to know that Qfeast automatically Copyrights all works that are posted through this site. Though yes, I think I will take off the chapters... >.>
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on April 23, 2013
GONETOOLATE
Liked it, but if something you write is really good then don't post it on the Internet for too long, someone might take it.
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on April 23, 2013
fleur22045
write more!
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on April 23, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks guys :D It means a ton, no joke :3
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on April 18, 2013
Idiot_Killjoy
.........YOU NEED TO WITE MORE OR I WILL DIE!!!!!!!!! =P
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on April 18, 2013
secretgirl
Its amazingly,I loved it
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on April 18, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks Marge!! XD
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on April 18, 2013
TheDoctorsAwesomestAssistant
AWESOME!!!!!!! I agree with everybody else:D
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on April 18, 2013
Nobody.07
I'm working on it right now, Big Mac!!
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on April 18, 2013
Bmac99
Soo Good! I want to know what she's training for so add more soon... please!
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on April 17, 2013
Nobody.07
thanks Clove ;) Means a ton when I see/hear others loving a piece of writing I created XD
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on April 17, 2013
Clove
I love this, you have great talent :)
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on April 17, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks Beauty!! ;) I will and you will find out that the father is mentally ill... etc.
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on April 17, 2013
Beauty784
I like the idea! I agree with Steph, what is the training about? Anyway, you should continue!
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on April 17, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks!! ;) Usually I don't stick to a story- obviously check out the stories I've made and they are never finished XD And this story I have rewritten several times... oh well- I will keep with this one for Qfeast!
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on April 17, 2013
HellRaiserPrincess
I see that your already becoming a great writer. This story is off to a good start and it leaves the reader to thinking: "why is she training?" I love stories like this that make the reader think and wonder you know? It's a good start and very interesting/enjoyable to read. Please continue on with this and let me know when you right more.

-Steph<3 =)
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on April 17, 2013