Legacy

Legacy

This is my most progressed book. It was originally based on a roleplay, and it has taken off from there. I hope you enjoy~ Also, I would really appreciate it if you could leave your opinion in the comments. I am always open to encouragements/criticism. BYE!

published on January 19, 2021428 reads 32 readers 76 completed
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Chapter 4.
Chapter 4- Bronze Bruised

Chapter 4- Bronze Bruised

I waited outside the boys locker. Now this may sound weird, but I have no friends of my own, and I feel responsible for Solus. Henry and Jonathan walked out, laughing and high fiving each other.
"What a freak. Did you see his body? He's covered in bruises," Jonathan jeered.
"Not only that, they look bronze. I mean, I knew he was different but BRONZE bruises? How weird can you get?"
As they walked off, I felt oddly protective. At the same time, I felt confused. Bruises?
Solus suddenly walked out, slipping his shirt on. I caught a glimpse of the bruises, but suddenly it was covered. While I was distracted, he bumped into me. I felt myself falling, then almost in a flash Solus grabbed my wrist, stopping me mid air. His hand was warm and soft, and for some reason reminded me of fresh baked bread back at home.
"You ok?" He asked, his eyes currently a red-brown colour to go with the the bland brown of the gym walls.
"y-yeah. Thanks... Solus." His name still felt foreign in my mouth, like from another language. I wouldn't be surprised if it was.
He helped me up without effort, much stronger then he appeared. I felt it in the way he let go of my wrist. He was holding back his magic strength.
No duh, I silently told myself. If he used his magic strength just then, he would crush my wrist like a twig. But something in the back of my mind tickled, trying to get me to notice. I ignored it.
"Thanks again" I smiled awkwardly. He rubbed the back of his neck and smiled back.
"As I said before, its nothing"
We went to the rest of the class. The teacher started taking attendance, and stopped at Solus's name.
"Oh, you don't have a last name?" She looked up at Solus.
"My kind uses titles instead of last names" He said 'my kind' like he was surrounded by animals, not his own race. Then again, he basically was.
"ok, well, what's your title?" The teacher raised a eyebrow, curious. Solus shuffled his feet. I understood how he was feeling. The whole class was staring at him, waiting for his response. It seemed personal to him, though I couldn't figure out why. If angels used their titles as last names all the time, why would it be awkward now?
He whispered under his breathe.
"Speak up please"
He looked up and spoke louder, but the words.. they weren't English. Or French. Or anything from this world. The words sounded ancient and powerful, from a race long forgotten. I would have thought it was a spell if what he said wasn't short.
The class was quiet for a few seconds.
"Um.. alright I'll write that down in the attendance book uh.. how do you spell it?" The teacher was hopelessly confused, like the rest of us.
Solus sighed, "Just call me Solus." And that was the end of that.
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lemon_drizzle69
This is really good
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
Thanks
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on September 20, 2021
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on August 31, 2021
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on August 31, 2021
McFaggot
GAWD DAMN SOULUS UR OLD
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McFaggot
CDDCSSE3
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on July 23, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
LMAOOO
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
NAHHH UR NOT THE FIRST
SOMEONE CALLED HIM SOULZ ONCE @Weirdo_Willow
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on July 23, 2021
McFaggot
I SPELT SOLUS WRONG I'M SO DUMB
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on July 23, 2021
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on July 23, 2021
Neon01
Wait a min... Why does Solus' mom look familiar(Ch. 7)
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on April 15, 2021
Neon01
4.7 now
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Neon01
Your welcome
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on March 28, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
XD XD yeah ik. it amazes me everytime lol.
and thanks
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on March 27, 2021
Neon01
Uhhh...@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 you have 376 reads on this story
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on March 27, 2021
Neon01
Yeah
I just think this book deserves 5
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on March 27, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
Lol hopefully people vote it up-
Tho tbh I'm just glad people like my book lol
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on March 27, 2021
Neon01
I think we need 6 more until 5
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on March 27, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
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on March 27, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
@moonston
guess what!
I added new chapters
And finished the book
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moonston
i red it its great
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on March 22, 2021
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on March 22, 2021
Your.local.idiot
im crying for 2 reasons
1. souuls died
2. the book end ed
qwq
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on March 22, 2021
moonston
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 omg love the book im glad you added more chapters i was like wheres the chapters but they are all so good thanks
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
lmao np. im adding more rn
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on March 22, 2021
AceyKitty
I'm never gonna finish this book. It's somehow TOO long for me and how DO YOU KEEP COMING UP WITH CHAPTERS?!?!?! DON'T YOU GET WRITER'S BLOCK?!?!?!
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
XDDD Bish I almost NEVER get writers block. I dream about the plot every night, then write it down in the morning. Its a good thing I have vivid dreams. Also, the books almost over, so you'll have plenty of time to catch up
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AceyKitty
@moonston lol
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on March 22, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
lol well if it helps I knew my character very well before i started writing. hes form a rp @moonston @Masky_Weeb_Fan
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on March 22, 2021
moonston
same @Masky_Weeb_Fan i always almost have writers block after the first chapter
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on March 22, 2021
AceyKitty
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 It seems so easy for you but when it comes to me I have a writers block right after the first chapter-
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on March 22, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
lmao I just am really attached to the book. I love it like a part of me. I have so many ideas for it, I just put them together and put it on paper whenever I fele inspired @Masky_Weeb_Fan
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on March 22, 2021
AceyKitty
Thank the LORDS!!! Tech me your way of NEVER getting writers block!
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on March 22, 2021
Your.local.idiot
me before i read it: this should be a good story but idk if im going to be into it
me after i read it: HELL YEAH BEAT THEIR ASS SOLUS!!
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
XD aw thanks guys lmao.
@AlphaWolf71808 @Your.local.idiot
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on March 20, 2021
Neon01
Same reaction after @Your.local.idiot
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on March 20, 2021
Neon01
This deserves 5 why the f*ck is it 4.6
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on March 20, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
@moonston
I made more lol. Sorry it took so long things have been happening-
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on March 18, 2021
moonston
When are you going to make more @BlueTheQuizWhiz97
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on March 05, 2021
moonston
OMG LOOOOVE CHAPTER 29 WHEN ARE YOU GONNA WRITE MORE?
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
Hopefully really soon. Thank you! ^w^ ^w^ >w< @moonston
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moonston
ok your welcome @BlueTheQuizWhiz97
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on February 19, 2021
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on February 19, 2021
XxDxmxn
sorry...school has been-hell...
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on February 18, 2021
moonston
are you gonna make mre it was amazig
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
HELL YES. Thank you for asking, I have gotten literally no comments on this story for awhile and I wasn't sure if it was good or not lately @moonston
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
nah its fine. I don't blame you. Just blaming literally every other person who read my book but said nothing--- Jk Jk I love you all if your reading this.
(Dang moonston its tough knowing lots of people-)
@moonston
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on February 18, 2021
moonston
sorry alot of school work and wasnt really reading much
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on February 18, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
Chapter 21 is FINALLY out
@Kitten_Snowflakes
@MagicMouse16
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@moonston See More▼
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on February 04, 2021
moonston
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 omg both 10 and 11 is awesom is chap 12 coming soon sorry if i bother you but these stories are just womderful
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on January 20, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
chapter 10 is out. Just so you know
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@Michael.Afton735
@Kitten_Snowflakes
@SadisticLover
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XxDxmxn
YESH!
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moonston
omg it was amazin ima wonder whether or not thier gona get married and have kids i bet chap 10 is even better
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
xD hopefully it is
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on January 20, 2021
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on January 20, 2021
moonston
omg chap 8 was amazing do chap nine as soon as you can and i ship solus with ash
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moonston
just about to read chap 9
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on January 20, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
YAY! the first ship! ^w^
Chapter 9 is done
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on January 20, 2021
moonston
omg chap seven was awsome to i dont know how you do perfect stories
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
if you need any more tips talk to me in a direct chat. thank you! btw its bottom to top. I had to split it up cause it was too big @moonston
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on January 20, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
I roleplayed for years in fantasy. I love writing descriptive things. And I am a artist. Normally I write poems cause their short and easy, and I lose motivation in stories over time, but cause you and a few others are being supportive its kept giving me motivation. And I love this story too. Just like all of you I'm addicted to it, except I'm writing it instead See More▼
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
Another thing to help with writing stories is to be descriptive. Draw things out, put it in order, and try not to add any extra things that could change the direction you want it to go. Think of your favourite book, think of how they try to connect you with the characters, and use that. A good thing to do is suspense. for example...

Susie went on a walk across See More▼
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on January 20, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
If I put these two characters in different situations (for example and this isn't a part of the book) in a plane crash. Ash will probably freak out, but Solus being through a lot of different things and is quite acting in situations that might end badly would try to protect anyone at the cost of himself. He loses less when he gets hurt, cause he's immortal, but See More▼
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on January 20, 2021
BlueTheQuizWhiz97
The trick to writing better stories is to take it from the heart. Think about your characters thoughts, feelings, and personality. Imagine how each one would feel in each situation, and with eachother.
For example, Ash (which can be a boy or a girl), has problems with their magic, and feels like Solus is kind and mysterious. She thinks he is powerful, but holding See More▼
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on January 20, 2021
moonston
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 maybe you can teach me how to write better stories and go check out my storie/script i made to see if its goo but yeah i love these stories heres the link to mine https://www.qfeast.com/story/iWODhi/mha-script-made-by-me
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moonston
when is chater seven coming chap six was amazing
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moonston
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 well if you wasnt sure about it im glad i gave a little clarification cause chap 6 was amazing
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
Thank you so much. I really like everyones support, it inspires me to do better. oh, and chapter 7 is out. I just finished it @moonston
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
hopefully soon! ^w^
I'm really glad you like chapter 6, I wasn't sure about it
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moonston
great i love chap 4
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on January 20, 2021
lemon_drizzle69
Yes I think it's a good idea to turn it into "I" perspective. And the story is amazing so far!! Keep up the great work love???
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
^w^ thanks beautiful, I was accidentally turning "you" into "I" halfway through the last chapter so I think this will help
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on January 19, 2021
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moonston
ok the third is very good too
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
thanks! ^w^
did you see the authors note at the bottom?
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Michael.Afton735
love it very addicting
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
thank you! 3rd chapter coming soon!
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XxDxmxn
So good and addicting!
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
thanks! ^w^✨
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XxDxmxn
Np!
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moonston
when are you gonna continue
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BlueTheQuizWhiz97
rn actually. The chapters are long-ish
I'm glad you like the story, and I will happily take suggestions
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