Heartbreak Girl

Heartbreak Girl

Luke dedicates his life to Lauren, the one who never sees the truth. Okay, so this is technically a Luke Hemmings fan fiction, but you don't have to know who Luke Hemmings or 5 Seconds of Summer are to understand it, because I'm just going to write it as a normal story. I hope you like it!

published on June 22, 2014330 reads 32 readers 151 completed
Chapter 1.
Chapter She Looks So Perfect

Chapter She Looks So Perfect

It's been a week since he texted back. I've texted him about three times a day, but he never replies. He's been avoiding me at school. I have no idea what's going on.

I've been with my boyfriend Nathan for seven months. But lately, it seems like he's drifting away from me, and I don't know what to do.

The screen of my phone lights up. I keep my phone on silent, because I hate when it makes noises.
I check my phone. There's a text from my best friend, Luke.

I am so lucky to have Luke as my best friend. He makes me feel so much better, especially with all the drama with Nathan nowadays.

The text reads: Hey. Do you want to talk? :)

I smile slightly. Luke knows me so well. I click on his contact and ring him.

We talk for a long time. An hour later, I am wiping tears from my cheeks as I tell him, "I really have to go now, Luke. Thanks for being a friend." And I hang up. I sigh, putting my head in my hands. Luke is the only good thing in this mess.

A/N: Okay guys, that was a pretty bad chapter, but I just wanted to get it started. Please stick with me, it'll be better (I hope ;) ).
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luckypanda
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on October 24, 2015
luckypanda
I'm sorry but y Ben and Jack? They're like my friends, and i used to have a crush on 1 of them.
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Avienexjel
No, I like how at first Lauren liked Ashton! It makes it more tense.
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Avienexjel
You know, for Luke.
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MockingjayDistrict
I don't recommend shipping Ashton and Lauren
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on July 23, 2014
swageyamatobiyolo
And what do you mean Lauren's more attractive like that?
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on July 23, 2014
swageyamatobiyolo
True, but I had to please the Luren shippers - especially @MockingjayDistrict, who would kill me if I didn't have a happy ending for Luren haha!!
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Avienexjel
Also, Lauren is even more attractive like that.
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CrystalDiamond2323
AWESOME!!! This story was lovely!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw, thank you so much!!
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JocelynIsFluttershy
Can I have an OC if I'm not too late? If I can:
Name: Jocelyn
Age: 10
Appearance: 5 feet tall, color changing eyes, shoulder length brown hair, and lots of freckles across her nose under her eyes and on her cheek(face cheeks don't be weird)
Personality: A little weird, funny, kind, LOVES animals, LOVES video games, can be quiet and mysterious at times, and is See More▼
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swageyamatobiyolo
I am so sorry, I am literally JUST about to finish this story!! But I'll be starting a new fan fiction in a few days, maybe if you like that one you could create an OC?
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swageyamatobiyolo
The storyline will be different though!! You won't find out much about the girl's life and backstory in Try Hard. And anyway, you might not want an OC! You might hate it!!
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JocelynIsFluttershy
LOL just put the same OC LOL
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CrystalDiamond2323
Poor Calum! BESIDES THAT...
AWEEEESSSSOOOOMMMEEEEEDD
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swageyamatobiyolo
Yeah, I know, right?? I feel so bad for Calum!! Okay, that's weird, because I'm the one writing it... Anyway, I'd like to know, do you think you would read Try Hard?
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swageyamatobiyolo
Only about two. I actually have the ending all worked out!!
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on July 10, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
How many more chapters in this story?!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Yay!! Thanks!!
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CrystalDiamond2323
Yea!! Of course
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MockingjayDistrict
AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you!! Just wondering - will you be reading Try Hard?
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Lady_Artemis
WHAT?!?!
OMG PLZ PLZ GET TO THE END OF HEARTBREAK GIRL FIRST THOUGH!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Yeah, of course I will!! There's still a few chapters left!! Would you read the new fan fiction, though?
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you!!!! I'm planning on having completely new characters - except for the boys, obviously! And a different story-line, of course!
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Lady_Artemis
OF COURSE I WOULD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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MockingjayDistrict
Awesome chapter! This is getting intense OMG!!!! Thanks a ton fot mentioning me!!!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha, thanks!!! And like I said I mentioned all my most caring and dedicated readers, and you're definitely one of them!! You take it all so seriously!! And you're my Luren shipping buddy!
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CrystalDiamond2323
AWEEEEEESSSSSOOOOOMMMMMMMEEEE
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you!!!!
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Lady_Artemis
DA FEELS IN CHAPTER 20!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And thank YOU for writing this story in the first place!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw, thank you so much!!!!
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MockingjayDistrict
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LUREN FOREVER!!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WWWWWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
I'm so glad that you liked it!!
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MockingjayDistrict
Ur welcome
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CrystalDiamond2323
What happened to Ashton? They never broke up o.o
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swageyamatobiyolo
But were they ever officially together? You'll find out in the next chapter!
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swageyamatobiyolo
You think you know what? Tell me in private message!
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CrystalDiamond2323
OMG i think i know... I'm not sure though
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CrystalDiamond2323
!!!!!!!!!! I WANT TO READ MORE NOW
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Lady_Artemis
OMG THEY'RE FRIENDS AGAIN AND THEY'RE TOGETHER WOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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MockingjayDistrict
MOOORE! I'm so excited!
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CrystalDiamond2323
WRITE MORE PLEASE
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CrystalDiamond2323
I'm the only Ashton+Lauren shipper...
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NOOOO!
Luren shall prevail!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha, yeah!! Well, I kind of ship Ashren. But don't you ship Luren too???
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swageyamatobiyolo
Well, that's your own opinion!! And I'm so glad you have an opinion!!
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CrystalDiamond2323
I ship both i guess, but Luke is acting pretty self-centered
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The_Astute_Potterhead
This is the best book i have ever read love it! And i whish Lydia kicked Callum out of her room with her heals
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swageyamatobiyolo
Oh my God thank you so much!!!! And I'm very sorry that didn't happen!!
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The_Astute_Potterhead
Remember never say you aren't beautiful because pretty girls who do not know it are more attractive than Gorgeous girls who flaunt it Bye and UPDATE!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha, okay, bye!!!
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The_Astute_Potterhead
Aw do not say that every one is beautiful in their own ways! Well i got to go and let's hope you updated more about me like way more and bye!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw thanks!!!! But seriously, you don't know what i look like - I am SO not pretty!!!!! :O :O :O
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The_Astute_Potterhead
Not in a lesbian way by the way
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The_Astute_Potterhead
I know i am* Flips hair* Just joking! Well you are welcome dear anything for my dearest Author! You are so amazing and i think pretty I don't know why you are still single and do not have boys always following you around i am absolutely in love with your personality
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swageyamatobiyolo
Sorry, I just had to reference 5SOS.
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swageyamatobiyolo
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD I AM CRYING YOU HAVE ABSOLUTELY NO IEA HOW MUCH THAT MEANS TO ME THNK YOU SO SO SO MUCH YOU'RE JUST TOO NICE!!!!
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The_Astute_Potterhead
Why wouldn't i? This is the most Amazing story i have read in my entire life and even when i am thirty and have children i will make them read it
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swageyamatobiyolo
Ah thank you thank you thank you THANK YOU!!!!!! You're so kind!! I'm honoured that you read this - and actually like it!!!
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The_Astute_Potterhead
Yay! You are such a caring Author always thinking about your reader's feelings and thoughts
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swageyamatobiyolo
I'm thinking of including as many of the OCs as possible in the next chapter!
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The_Astute_Potterhead
Can Lydia BE IN IT MORE PLEASE?
Sorry for Caps Lock
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha, thanks!! And yeah, Luren is the most popular ship!!
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The_Astute_Potterhead
It is aright but i like your idea so much better! And noh my god i really Luve Luren!
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MockingjayDistrict
Write more quickly, you must fix this mess I call Luren!!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha!!! I'll try my best!
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CrystalDiamond2323
OMG OMG WRITE MORE THIS IS AWESOME MORE MORE WRITE WRITE QUICKLY
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw, thank you so, so much!!!
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MockingjayDistrict
OMG chapter Tobiasteen is killing me!!!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha!! Just checking, you mean it's good, right?
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swageyamatobiyolo
Okay that was weird
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on July 03, 2014
swageyamatobiyolo
Yay!! I really loved the idea!! Now the Luren ship is sailing along in the Ashren sea...
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MockingjayDistrict
Yeah, I love it!
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Lady_Artemis
I WANT TO CRY FROM READING CHAPTER 14!!!!
THAT IS SO SWEET!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw, thank you!!!
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CrystalDiamond2323
Omg!!!! I actually ship Ash and Lauren though :/
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MockingjayDistrict
LUREN FOREVER!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
No, I just guessed.
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MockingjayDistrict
Was I that obvious?
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swageyamatobiyolo
I see that you weren't happy with that comment!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
I think you're like the only Ashren shipper haha!! Well, I kind of ship it.
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CrystalDiamond2323
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The_Astute_Potterhead
Hey guys! Well my dear friend the person who made this story allowed me too make a roleplay about it and i will ver soon hope you join the role play!
Famous aurthor is out now! bye and if you want me too follow you write something to my wall or follow me i always follow back by the way
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MockingjayDistrict
Yay you posted why Ella hates Lauren! And you included my reason! Now, let me get back to shipping Luren...
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha!! I loved your reason, so I just had to include it! And shipping Luren is a full-time job, isn't it? Not as easy as it seems!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha, it's awesome!!
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MockingjayDistrict
Yup! *ship ship ship ship* Ship sliding away, ship sliding awaaaaaaaaay, I'll forever be shipping Luren and now I'm ship sliding away... (LOL that was a parody I came up with on the spot to Slip SLiding Away)
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MockingjayDistrict
But, Lauren actually is nice...
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha!! I'll tell you in private message!
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MockingjayDistrict
Wait, what? Explain further!!!!!!!!!!! Wait, did you just do a... RICK HANGER?!?!?!?!
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swageyamatobiyolo
No, poor LAUREN! Ella isn't alone, she has her family and friends...oh, wait, her family hates her and she has no friends. I guess she is alone!
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MockingjayDistrict
Wow... poor Ella.
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swageyamatobiyolo
Yeah, she's genuinely that sweet. But Ella is desperate for a reason to hate her, so she convinced herself that Lauren is actually awful and out to get everyone.
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MockingjayDistrict
You have 105 reads! WRITE THE TEASER NOW LADY!!!!!!!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha I'll do it as soon as possible!!
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CrystalDiamond2323
OMG!!!!!!! I know what happpeeennnss.... I think.
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swageyamatobiyolo
Private message me your theory!!
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MockingjayDistrict
Luren is a great ship name for Luke and Lauren!
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MockingjayDistrict
Wait, I think I know why Ella hates Lauren: She knows Luke likes her, and is mad that she is so COMPLETELY OBLIVIOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Note the all caps part).
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha, good theory!! No spoilers yet, though!
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swageyamatobiyolo
It will be revealed in the teaser!!
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MockingjayDistrict
AM I RIGHT OR LEFT?!?!
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MockingjayDistrict
Oh no, does Lauren get together with some other guy?
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swageyamatobiyolo
No spoilers!!
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MockingjayDistrict
It's really food so far though
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swageyamatobiyolo
Ah thank you so much!!!!
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MockingjayDistrict
This is going to get interesting... I don't k ow whether to be happy or sad...
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swageyamatobiyolo
I hope it'll be interesting!!
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MockingjayDistrict
ASH?!?!?!?!?!?!?! Excuse me a moment... I SHIP LUKE AND LAUREN!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Me too haha Luke/Lauren is my OTP haha!!!
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