Catching Roses

Jessica Holister is probably one of the smartest in the world- nicknamed by the media "Sherlock Holmes", with her identity remaining a secret. And her past, what she thought became gone, was back.

published on April 21, 201790 reads 22 readers 28 not completed
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Chapter 8.

Chapter 7- Jessica Holister's POV

  As we walked away from the press, I finally was able to ask Joanna something.
  "What's your answer from the question I asked earlier?"
    "What?"
  I sighed in annoyance.  "Earlier I had asked a question: Why does the therapist bother you?"
  She sighed.  Clearly she was also annoyed with me.  "You really want to hold onto that?"  She snarled.
  "Well, you never answered." I responded, looking at my phone.  Antonio had sent me the address.  We had enough time to talk about it, luckily.
  "Well, there's something off about him.  Like he's new at this, or was never taught how to be a therapist properly." She replied.
  Joanna was still looking like there was more to it.
   I could obly chuckle, realizing she was trying to be polite.  "You think he's also got some issue also, or he has something off about him becides his appearence?" I asked.
  "Kinda." She replied.
    "Well, he WAS a soldier also, and only recently became a therapist 4-5 years ago.  He's slightly old fationed, and has trouble calming himself after my sessions with him."
  "Maybe he's never dealt with a sociopath before?"
    I looked at her, confused as hell.  "Sociopath?  None of his paitients are sociopaths." I questioned.
  She returned the look.  "You arent a sociopath?"
   Ouch.  "No, not at all.  I just can't show sentiment or empathy, or whatever it's called."  I confirmed.  
  "I'm confused." Obviously.
   "It's like all my emotions are behind a wall.  They're there, you just can't see them unless I show them."  I explained.
  "So you're like a vulcan?"
    I nodded, turning to the next house.   There was more press than usual.
   I shoved through, and there was a clear difference this time- the body was on the roof.
  I looked up, sighing.  "I really don't like doing this outside with an audience." I growled, putting on gloves and going to the ladder that lead up.
Wait.  "Joanna, go inside, and video chat me.  Here's my number.  Call as soon as you get inside." I told her.
  She sighed, but took the paper with the number and walked inside.  I climbed up, and looked at it.
  Grabbing my phone for all the photos, I took a recording of the surronding area, then a couple of other things (body, under it, and surrounding area, other sorts).
  Joanna did the call finally, and I opened it up.  "Allright.  Now, do this slowly, but show me around the house."  I told her.
  "Actually, I have an easier way.  Footprints." She smiled, showing me the heel prints.
  "Perfect! Now show me around the path.  Calenders, photos, and any planners please." I smiled.

  "HEY! REDHEAD!  ARE YOU SHERLOCK!?" A reporter shouted.
Joanna took that as her que to stop, luckily.
  I looked over, making a confused face.  "WHAT GAVE YOU THAT IDEA?" I shouted back. He smiled a bit.
  Brown hair.  Single, but on a dating site.  He has a dog- a bloodhound.  He takes reporting seriously- and is really a popular reporter.
  "YOU SEEM TO BE NOTICING ALOT MORE DETAIL THAN THE REST!" He shouted.
  I shrugged.  "I'M NOTICING THE SAME AS THE OTHERS, DON'T WORRY!" I smiled, looking back at the phone.
  "WHAT WERE THE PICTURES FOR, THEN?" He shouted.
    I sighed.  "SO I CAN HAVE MY OWN COPY OF EVERYTHING!" I replied.  He was clearly not convinced.
  "YOU AREN'T WEARING A UNIFORM!" He pressed.
   "I HAVE NO NEED TO."
  "OH?  THEN HOW AREN'T YOU SHERLOCK?"
   "BECAUSE SHERLOCK IS A MALE, HASN'T BEEN SEEN BEFORE, AND WOULD MOST LIKELY BE RAMBLING.  IF YOU WANT THE REAL ONE, GO TO BRITIAN.  NOW LET ME WORK PLEASE!" I shouted, climbing down and going to the door to the house, slamming it shut.
  Right then Joanna was smirking and had just ended the call.  "Finally got annoyed?" She asked.
  "I thought you were more observant than that." I replied, following the heel prints, recording them.
  She chuckled, and tapped my sholder.  In her laytex, blue gloved hands were planners and a callender, all in seperate bags.
  I smiled, taking them.  "Wish to tell me where they lead?"
    Her smile turned into a frown.  "Another body."
  Oh, joy.  They were moving fast.
  I ran into the room, and smiled.  The body was the furthest in the decomposition process.
  I ran outside, climbing up to the roof.  Joanna had allready told them.  "The bodies we've found are older than the first one.  This has been going on for at least a month." I informed.
  "What!?  That's absurd!"  Someone shouted.  I sighed.
    "Killing in general is absurd.  Details will be at the lab.  Joanna, care to join me on the way there?" I smiled.
  She shrugged. "Like I have better to do."
    I smiled, starting to walk out.  "Then let's go."
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SlugcatSeagullAghase
The story is really good. Usually, I don't like casual writing styles, but that type of writing style really helps with this story. My only problem is that I feel like the story jumps around too fast. When you write the next chapter, try to slow down and explain everything. Otherwise, this is a really good story, and I can't wait to read the rest!!
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Orange.Soda
Allright! I'll keep that in mind!
Thanks!
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No prob ^-^
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LhasapooLover
I like your story @Forever_Great_Bohemian_Rhaspody :)
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Weiss_Schnee
I do like this story and see potential in it as a Qfeast classic.
My only concern with this story is the amount of space between sentences. I understand if this is your normal style, but...
I feel like nothing is organised into paragraphs that flow one after the other.
I like stories where the time flows on, and it's shown in the paragraph spacing. Books like See More▼
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Orange.Soda
Allright, thank you for the imput! It really helps.
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sapphirethehedgehog
Okay, your writing style is awesome and it's very fun tot read, my only criticism would be that there's a lot of speaking and not a lot of saying what is actually going on and describing it. The only way the reader is able to keep up I see looking at all the speaking, maybe try to vary it a little more? Does this help? ^.^U
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Orange.Soda
Plenty! Thanks!
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vive_la_revolution
Hey, can I be your official editor?
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Orange.Soda
Sure!
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vive_la_revolution
Mkay, great!
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Orange.Soda
Sounds good to me!
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vive_la_revolution
Mkay! Actually, I think it'd be easiest to make a hidden page and PM you the link - I'll post constructive critiques and chapter edits on there, if that's alright with you.
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Orange.Soda
However you do it best!
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vive_la_revolution
Really? That's awesome! I'm really flattered. ^_^ Would you like me to send edits in PM or just leave constructive critiques or?
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Orange.Soda
I was actually gonna ask if you'd do that--
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vive_la_revolution
Yay!! Thanks ^_^
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vive_la_revolution
Okay, so something that I actually didn't think about that you did fantabulously was that Sherlock is this crazy observant character that could tell her so many random details it's ridiculous. My only critique is that her panic attack probably wouldn't be calmed down immediately (also, hugging a person having a panic attack without their permission isn't a really See More▼
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vive_la_revolution
Also, it would be cool to change the last sentence to "We shook hands and walked to my therapy session." It changes all of the action to something that they're doing together; Jessica isn't dragging Joanna into her life, but Joanna is walking into her life. If that makes sense? It's not a big deal, just a tiny literary thing. XD Seriously though, I frikkin love See More▼
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vive_la_revolution
Jessica described in detail another person - what they were wearing, where they were going, what they were thinking - seemingly unimportant details that would help ground Joanna in the present. And then Joanna was almost completely calm, so maybe Jessica just glanced at one more new passerby and described them to help Joanna (and also to establish to the readers See More▼
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vive_la_revolution
I love it!!
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Orange.Soda
Also, I'm writing more now!
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on April 21, 2017
vive_la_revolution
Of course!
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Orange.Soda
Allright! The details are fixed. Mind re-reading to make sure I got that right?
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vive_la_revolution
Basically! Legit though, I really love this so far and I can't wait until you write more.
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Orange.Soda
Allright! Basically more detail and more accurate information?
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