Catching Roses

Jessica Holister is probably one of the smartest in the world- nicknamed by the media "Sherlock Holmes", with her identity remaining a secret. And her past, what she thought became gone, was back.

published on April 21, 201790 reads 22 readers 28 not completed
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Chapter 9.

Chapter 9- Joanna William's POV

  I never knew I'd get in the FBI lab.
    Sadly, it isn't as facinating as you'd expect.  It almost looks like any normal office building.  The thing is the cubicles are spaced out and more people are walking around.  Other than that, it's like any other building.
  After turning into several hallways, we both arrived into a typical lab.  White equipment, and white everything.  Quite bland.
  Jess tossed the bags to a blonde male in a coat, who bounced them around before catching them from not being prepared.  He pushed his glasses up and sighed.  "Jess, you can't just toss stuff at me.  I could break it." He snarled, putting his gloves on after setting them down.  
  "Well, you caught them." She replied, sitting in a stool, then turning to more equipment.  Jess had then grabbed some of the bags from the spot he set them down, then rolled back to open them.
  "Mind taking a spot next to me and helping me with this?" She asked, taking the planners and callender out.
  "Su-"
    "Not you, Damien.  Joanna." She corrected, looking up.  "You need to run a DNA sample off the cigarrette bud."
  He got sligtly confused, but then saw me.  "Oh! You! Hello!" He smiled, going up to me, shaking my hand.  "I'm Damien Morono, nice meeting you!" He smiled.  I smiled back, then put my hands in my pocket.
  "Joanna, please." Jessica begged.
   "Did you just say 'please'?" Damien asked, turning to Jessica.
  "Yeah.  Isn't that what you're supposed to do when requesting something?"  She replied.
   "Oh dear God, she knows some social skills.  Now for her to use them more."
"Don't you have something to do?" She glared at him.
    "Yeah.  DNA sample.." he muttered, running off.
  "That was kinda mean, Jess." I muttered, grabbing some planners and opening them.
  "It was?  Seems like a proper way to get him to focus." She replied, scanning through them.
  I did also, sighing.  "No, it wasn't.  The proper way to end the conversation would have been to leave it right there."
  She sighed, then grabbed another planner, scanning through it.  
  After a while, she slammed the one she had down and turned to Damien right beford he opened the door.
  "Any luck?" She snarled a bit, seeming annoyed.  I grabbed another planner, looking through it.
  "Jess, you know we can't work that fast." He sighed, grabbing a file.  She sighed, rolling back and leaning on a counter.
  Wait.  Buisnuess card.
    "I have something." I smirked, pulling it out.  She snapped her head up, rolled to me, and grabbed it, smiling.
  Damien slid over and looked over her sholder, sighing.  "Damn, we get our equipment from there." He snarled a bit.
  "Too bad.  They're scamming peices of shits anyway." Jessica smirked, standing.
  "Wait- don't we need a warrant?" I asked.
    She blinked, turning on her heels, and gave me a blank stare.  "Why'd we need a warrant?  Isn't weird that thet ALL work for the same company?"  She objected.
  "Jess, she's right.  It isn't enough in the courts' eyes." Damien added.
  "So you're telling me we need more information, that we most likely don't have time to collect, then wait on getting a warrent while they dump bodies and grab more people?" She whined.  
  "Yes, you need to wait."
    "On the cigarette bud also?"
  "Yes, on the cigarette bud also."
    "Wait.  That'll be enough evidence!" She smiled, standing normally.
  "No, Jess.  We need to truly confirm it, not go on one of your unlikely chances." He scolded.
  "But I'll be bored waiting. " She pouted.
  "Jess, I'm not your parent.  I'm not your boss.  I can't do a thing." He scolded.
  "But-"
     "Jess.  No."
  She whined, standing.  "I have 0 cases, and nothing to do.  That never ends well."  She pouted.
  "Why don't you start a blog?" He reccomended.  
     Her face made a clear no, but an idea popped in my head.  Luckily, she'll be focused on other things.
  Time to get typing.
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SlugcatSeagullAghase
The story is really good. Usually, I don't like casual writing styles, but that type of writing style really helps with this story. My only problem is that I feel like the story jumps around too fast. When you write the next chapter, try to slow down and explain everything. Otherwise, this is a really good story, and I can't wait to read the rest!!
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Orange.Soda
Allright! I'll keep that in mind!
Thanks!
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No prob ^-^
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LhasapooLover
I like your story @Forever_Great_Bohemian_Rhaspody :)
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Weiss_Schnee
I do like this story and see potential in it as a Qfeast classic.
My only concern with this story is the amount of space between sentences. I understand if this is your normal style, but...
I feel like nothing is organised into paragraphs that flow one after the other.
I like stories where the time flows on, and it's shown in the paragraph spacing. Books like See More▼
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Orange.Soda
Allright, thank you for the imput! It really helps.
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sapphirethehedgehog
Okay, your writing style is awesome and it's very fun tot read, my only criticism would be that there's a lot of speaking and not a lot of saying what is actually going on and describing it. The only way the reader is able to keep up I see looking at all the speaking, maybe try to vary it a little more? Does this help? ^.^U
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Orange.Soda
Plenty! Thanks!
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vive_la_revolution
Hey, can I be your official editor?
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Orange.Soda
Sure!
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vive_la_revolution
Mkay, great!
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Orange.Soda
Sounds good to me!
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vive_la_revolution
Mkay! Actually, I think it'd be easiest to make a hidden page and PM you the link - I'll post constructive critiques and chapter edits on there, if that's alright with you.
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Orange.Soda
However you do it best!
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vive_la_revolution
Really? That's awesome! I'm really flattered. ^_^ Would you like me to send edits in PM or just leave constructive critiques or?
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Orange.Soda
I was actually gonna ask if you'd do that--
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vive_la_revolution
Yay!! Thanks ^_^
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vive_la_revolution
Okay, so something that I actually didn't think about that you did fantabulously was that Sherlock is this crazy observant character that could tell her so many random details it's ridiculous. My only critique is that her panic attack probably wouldn't be calmed down immediately (also, hugging a person having a panic attack without their permission isn't a really See More▼
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vive_la_revolution
Also, it would be cool to change the last sentence to "We shook hands and walked to my therapy session." It changes all of the action to something that they're doing together; Jessica isn't dragging Joanna into her life, but Joanna is walking into her life. If that makes sense? It's not a big deal, just a tiny literary thing. XD Seriously though, I frikkin love See More▼
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vive_la_revolution
Jessica described in detail another person - what they were wearing, where they were going, what they were thinking - seemingly unimportant details that would help ground Joanna in the present. And then Joanna was almost completely calm, so maybe Jessica just glanced at one more new passerby and described them to help Joanna (and also to establish to the readers See More▼
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vive_la_revolution
I love it!!
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on April 21, 2017
Orange.Soda
Also, I'm writing more now!
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on April 21, 2017
vive_la_revolution
Of course!
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Orange.Soda
Allright! The details are fixed. Mind re-reading to make sure I got that right?
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vive_la_revolution
Basically! Legit though, I really love this so far and I can't wait until you write more.
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Orange.Soda
Allright! Basically more detail and more accurate information?
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