Impure

Once, long ago, three factions ruled over the nation of Alma. The Kendred, Shedan, And Morphis, each with its own god. Under the fires of an ancient war, the Morphis died off, and their god disappeared. One thousand years later a dark curse has swept over the land, transforming Alma and her people. It is now up to Martin Dunshire and his friends, Leo Wallace and Linda Baroo, to free the land from a never ending nightmare. As the threat of war is on the doorstep, A dark truth comes to light.one that will forever change Alma. Can they do it before time runs out? (feel free to rate, add to favorites, or comment. All criticism is helpful)

published on January 16, 2016461 reads 73 readers 170 not completed
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Impure
Chapter 2.
Chapter 0: Welcome to Briarwood

Chapter 0: Welcome to Briarwood

        
        “Martin, Hurry up!” Leo Shouted, “We’re gonna be Late”.
“I’m trying, I’m not as fast as you!”, panted Martin,
“Well then you should have joined the scouts, They’ll build you up!”
“And take orders from you? I’m a man of my own order thank you.” Martin replied
“Oh yes, my apologies Mr. Uptight-High and Mighty, Lord of the Guards” Leo retorted, rolling his eyes.
They were on their way to a festival held once a year in their village, Briarwood, in which they will be competing in a competition to decide the ranks of the Knights, Guards and Scouts, The three different divisions of the village’s army. Leo Wallace, a 17-year-old boy with a slender build, green eyes, and rusty brown hair, is the current leader of the Scouts of his village. The scouts specialize in stealth and agility, and depend on quick and precise attacks. Martin Dunshire, an 18-year-old with a moderate build, black eyes, and somewhat-spiky black hair is the current leader of the guards, who specialize in heavy defense and hard attacks, their attacks are stronger than those of the scouts, but slower.
        “They’re having the cross rank tag team again this year, right? Last year we tore it up” Leo asked.
“Yeah, but it’s the last event as to not drain the energy of the competitors before they can test their rank. Even though we have to use wooden weapons, they still take a toll.” Martin stated.
“Well, at least they’re letting me use both wooden katanas this year, that make blocking a lot easier” Leo said.
“Well I feel like a child using that wooden shield, but at least I could carve my Longsword to my preference.”
“Now you’re getting into the spirit, just hope that that shield doesn’t break this year, I had to handle your defense last year and we both know how that turned out.”
        “Ha, yeah, how many teeth did you lose again?” Martin asked.
“Just the one! And they were able to put it back in, remember? Look and see for yourself!” Leo pulled down his lower lip and opened his mouth, showing that he still had his molar.
“Yeah, just shut your mouth, you’re gonna catch flies like that” Leo quickly closed his mouth and continued walking.
        “Hey, I think I see it!” Leo said, pointing to a large sign that said “BRIARWOOD VILLAGE FESTIVAL”.  
“What was your first clue?” Stated Martin.
“Heh, always the sarcastic one aren’t you? Let’s hurry.”
Leo started sprinting to the sign, Martin simply stated
“Ugh, this again…. LEO HOLD UP!”
        
Cheers and chatter of a crowd could be heard around inside the festival, People gathered around from all over the village to purchase merchandise and play games celebrating the Kendred culture, all which would boil down to the final event.
Two men in broad, plated armor were standing at the entrance, as well as a large, muscular man with short blonde hair. Leo and Martin Approached the entrance, and they heard the man speaking to the soldiers
“Ok, I’m going to make this brief. If you see a Shedan, order them back to their village unless they can prove they have business here. This village is currently under treaty, so do not engage.” He announced
        “Understood sir, but what exactly is a “Shedan”?” One of the guards asked.
“Are you dim? Who do you think our war is with? The Shedan is the rival faction of the Kendred. I swear what did you all learn in boot camp?” Darren stated.
“We didn’t go to boot camp… this IS our learning.” A soldier replied. The man gritted his teeth.
“How will we know that they’re Shedan, and not a Kendred like us?” The other guard asked. The man sighed.
“Look for animal ears, tails, etc. Trust me, you’ll know those mutts when you see them.” Leo and Martin approached the ongoing conversation.
“Hey Darren.” Martin chimed in.
“And where have you two been? As captains you’re supposed to help guard the Festival” Darren went into a small fury, demanding answers. Martin retorted with a snooty tone.
“We were patrolling the outer path. And we got our orders directly from my father and Leos grandfather.” He finished. Darren put his hand on his face and sighed once more.
“I guess if it was ordered by Connor and Garret, it must’ve been important, what was the business?” Darren Asked. Leo looked up at him.
“Somebody reported a theft and a bit of fur was found near the site” Said Leo. “They think maybe a couple Shedan had something to do with it but they aren’t sure, they wanted our opinion”
“Alright then, I was misinformed, please continue on your way.” The two started walking, but then looked at the symbols on the soldier’s plated armor. Leo turned to Darren staring pointing to the recruits.
“Are these two new?” Asked Leo.
“Yep” said Darren “They just joined about a month ago, so they’re standing guard for some experience” Martin looked up at both of them.
“Well, I wish the best of luck to both of you” said Martin “we’ll be on our way”
“YESSIR” The soldiers shouted in unison. Darren’s face went red.
“Okay, you two DO NOT TAKE ORDERS FROM ANYWHERE BUT ME.” Darren ordered. The two soldiers started to sweat. Martin looked up at Darren.
“What about my father?” He said with a smug face.
“Yes, they have to take orders from Connor.” He said, his eyes closed with annoyance.
“And what about Garret?” Martin added. Darren looked at him.
“You two just go on your way, and let us do what we need.” He said.
“Alright then.” Martin said. The two past the front gate in the clearing of the forest. The walked a ways into the cluster of people walking through the paths. Leo looked at Martin.
        “What do you think of those new recruits?” he Leo.
“What? Oh. I think I feel sorry for them.
“Why?”
“Just look, they’ve been stuck with Darren.” Martin explained.
“You have a point.” LE said, he hang his down just a little, but then looked back up brightly.
“Hey, look who it is!” Leo shouted
They made their way through the crowd to a small fountain spring in the middle of the festival. There was an Elderly looking man chatting with a man who appeared to be middle-aged.
        “Yeah, Gina would’ve loved the festival Connor,” Said the Elderly man “She would’ve been proud of her son to see he’s the head scout now.”
“Yeah, poor kid. Lost his mother to fever, and his father just up and vanished like that. I could never do that to Martin”
“Hey Dad!” Martin shouted.  The middle-aged man turned to look at the boy
“Speak of the devil” The elderly man said.
“Hello Connor.” Leo said, Connor just smiled and replied “Greetings Leo.” He looked at the elderly man.
“I think Garret wanted you to see something” Connor said.
Yes, I do” Said The elderly man.
“Yes?” Leo asked.
“Follow me”
“Alright.” Leo walked off with his grandpa, waving to Martin and Connor.
        “Hey Martin” Connor said to his son
“I have something for you” He pulled a small amulet out of his pocket.
“Here take it” Martin grasped the small pendant dangling from his father’s hand.
“It’s a family heirloom, it came from your mother’s side, but now I’m giving it to you.  She always said it would bring good luck when you really needed it. Please be careful with it”
“I will, I promise” Martin said “I miss her too.”
“I know you do” said Connor, he then looked at Martin puzzled, and noticed he was looking around.
“You looking for somebody?”
“Yeah, I thought Sarah would be here, not like her to miss a traditional thing like this”
“Well, your sister’s got her studies to tend to up at the academy, she wants to be a healer you know”
“Yeah I know” said Martin. “I’ve never had the same interest in magic she shows, I never understood all the different classifications and types.”
“Well, she takes after your mother, she always loved magic” an announcement was sounded from down the street from where they were standing.
“Hey! Looks like the guard tournament is coming up, you better get out there!”
“Right!” Martin put the pendant in his pocket and walked off to the arena to prepare.
        
        “What did you want to show me grandpa?”
“You’ll find out when we get there”
They approached a large tent, and entered. A man was sitting at a small counter and immediately recognized Garret.
“You got it ready?” Garret asked.
“Yep, got it right here” The man pulled up a package from behind the counter, and handed it to Garret. “Alright Leo, I want you to take good care of this, I had it made specifically to your preferences” Leo unwrapped the package, and pulled out a sheathed blade.
“Thanks, Grandpa.” he said. His eyes studied the sheath.
“Go on.” Garret pointed to the sword.
Leo slowly pulled out the blade, and held it firm. It had a single blade along the side, and was jet-black.
“Grandpa, this mark…” He gestured to a mark near the hilt of the blade.
“Like I said, it was specifically made for you, it matches that mark on your wrist doesn’t it?”
        “yeah, it does.” Leo put the blade back into its sheathe
        “Hey, what’s the story of that mark?” The man at the counter asked.
“Oh sorry, not my business,” He quickly ended his previous statement. He turned and started to get something from behind him.
“However, there were two crystals your grandfather gave me for the hilt.” He said. Leo gave him a puzzled look.
“So I made a second.” He finished. He pulled up another package and unwrapped it. The blacksmith smiled.
“Thank you, sir, but I don’t know if I can pay for this. I don’t exactly get paid as a scout because of my age.” Leo explained.
“Don’t worry, it’s free of charge.” Scott said. Leo’s eye lit up.
“Thank you, sir.” He said.
Leo grasped the second blade and attached the sheathes to his belt. “you said you wanted to know the story behind the mark?” Leo said to the man at the counter.
“It’s none of my business.”
“It’s alright.” Leo replied “It doesn’t really mean much I don’t think, it something that ran in my dad’s side of the family. It’s really just a birthmark”
“So your dad had that mark too?”
“Yeah, on his left wrist, just like I do.”
“What about your grandfather”
“No, afraid not” Garret chimed in.  
“Well, you two better get going, they’ve already started the guard’s tournament, don’t want to miss your classes ranking” The man said.
“Thanks Scott, we’ll be on our way” Said Garret. “Thank you” Said Leo. Leo and Garret waved back as they left the tent.

        Leo and his grandfather walked around the streets for a while, talking about how things had been going in the village. Things had changed after all. A war between the Shedan and Kendred clans had finally ended. All seemed to be at peace.
“It’s nice to have the festival out of the village this year” Garret stated. “It feels nice to be out in the forest, and not surrounded by the village walls.”
“Yeah. Especially since everyone has been so paranoid lately. I think the heat is getting to everyone” Leo agreed.
“Well, if anything happens, I’m positive you and Martin can handle it. Look at you, kiddo, the youngest scout captain Briarwood has ever seen. Your mother would be proud.”
“Yeah.” Leo sighed
His grandfather brought up the generosity of the blacksmith, quickly trying to change the subject.
“Grandpa, I’m not sure if I can use the second one” Said Leo. “I mean, I like to use two weapons, but it’s usually my Saber and my dagger.”
“It’s alright, you can use it if yours breaks, or you can practice with two swords.” Replied garret. Leo moved the first katana onto the back of his shoulder-strap.
“Why are you moving that there?” Garret asked, out of curiosity.
“Because the baldric part of this uniform is supposed to hold my primary weapon to my back. I can sheath it a little easier now, and I’m not smacking things as I turn.” Leo replied. They were approaching the arena
“AND THE WINNER IS” they heard the announcer shouting “MARTIN DUNSHIRE!”
“I’m not surprised.” Garret stated “That boys got talent, his blocks are flawless, and he’s got good reaction time. Kind of like you, you have incredible speed and strong counters. You two could really teach each other a thing or two.”
“The only thing he’s taught me is how to use my teeth as a shield.” Leo replied sarcastically. “But he is definitely strong, I’ll give him that. He held of those three wolves that slipped in through the hole in the outer wall Single handed, and he didn’t even break a sweat. It was almost inhuman.”
“Well you might have been in on the action if you hadn’t misplaced that saber of yours.” Garret chuckled.

        Leo and Garret were walking down the street as Martin approached them from the arena. “There you two are. Looks like you’re next Leo.” Leo noticed Martin was holding his shoulder as if he had been wounded.
“Yeah, did you take a big hit to the shoulder or something?”
“Yeah, the last fight. He bashed me with a shield and knocked me back, and proceeded to attack me.”
“Ouch, how’d you get out of that?”
“He knocked me to the ground when I was hit in the shoulder, and because. I was on the ground I swept his feet, jumped up, and held my blade to his throat.”
“and they called it there?”
“Yeah., hey, don’t mind me, but I’m gonna go sit down over here by the infirmary. I’m not bleeding but some ice won’t hurt.” Martin turned and headed to a large white tent.
“Good luck.” He said as he walked off.
“NOW CALLING ALL SCOUTS. PLEASE LOOK AT THE ROSTER AND AWAIT YOUR MATCH” The announcer shouted.
“Well Leo, I think it’s time you head up.” said Garret. Leo nodded and started his walk up to the arena. “OUR FIRST MATCH IN THE SCOUTS TOURNEY WILL BE KAITLYN RONES VS. LAWRENCE BARKER”

        “Gah, that’s cold.” whined Martin as a nurse put ice on his shoulder.
“I know, but you need to put some ice on that wound sir, or its going to get worse” said the nurse.
“I know, thanks. I think I can take it from here.” He took the chunk of ice wrapped in rags from the nurse. “Ok, is there anything else I can do for you, sir?”
“No, that will be all, thank you” The nurse gathered her supplies and left the infirmary. It wasn’t much, mainly a white tent with a couple tables and beds, and a back area where the doctors and nurses kept their supplies, and treated serious injuries. It was located directly beside the arena, so cheers could be heard from the crowd outside.
“it’s ok, well get you fixed up” Martin heard someone outside say, and he saw a young girl helping a boy with a broken bleeding nose into the Infirmary.
“Here have a seat here, I’ll be right back” the girl turned around and saw Martin. Martins face filled with disbelief. “Sarah?” he asked. She didn’t even give any time to react. His sister pounced on him and gave him a hug.
“Martin!”  she cried. “I missed you so much”
“I missed you too, could you not hug so hard?  My shoulders in bad shape.”
“Oh, sorry, I’ll be right back out here to fix you up, I have to go get my things.” His sister ran into the back room.
“I thought she was at the academy?” he thought
The boy sitting on the bed across from him looked up and exclaimed “Captain Martin! Sir it’s an honor!” His voice was a bit muffled.
“Oh, hi. That looks like it hurt, what happened?”  Martin gestured to the boy’s nose
“I just got my nose bashed in by Captain Leo, sir. He felt so bad about it I felt sorry for him, and I was the one that got hit!”
“Yeah, that’s what he’s like, he could sneak into your home and murder your family, and you’d still give him the shirt off your back, and please, you don’t have to call me sir, I’m not giving orders or anything” Martin gave a friendly grin to the boy.
They sat down and chatted about the fights in the tournament.
“So how many people qualified for the Scout tourney?” Martin asked.
“Only, eight” He replied. “First I fought Kaitlyn, then I fought Joey, but they were nothing compared to captain Leo. I knew he would be tough though, he’s the youngest captain the Kendred have seen!”
“Heh, yeah,” Martin shrugged, and then a look of realization crossed his face.
“Oh I’m sorry.” Martin said to the boy. “I never asked you your name.”
“Lawrence Barker, sir.”
“What round did you face Leo in, may I ask?” Martin asked Lawrence.
“The third round, Semi-finals.” He replied
“I’m gonna go out on a limb and say he didn’t look as intimidating as you thought, and you dropped your guard?”
“Yes sir.”
“You really don’t have to call me sir, just call me Martin.”
“Oh, I’m sorry sir… uh, I mean Martin”
        “Ok you two, I’m on my way!” Sarah shouted from the back, she came out from the back room, wearing her blonde hair down and had an excited grin. She walked over to Lawrence.
“Ok, is it just your nose or did you get hit anywhere else?”
“just my nose, thank you.” Lawrence replied
“Ok, now hold still” She raised her hands over his nose, and mumbled inaudible words. Her hands glowed with a golden light. She lowered them to reveal Lawrence’s nose fully repaired.
“Wow.” he exclaimed. “Where’d you learn to do that?”
“The academy?” Martin budded in.
“Yeah, but I can tell that you Don’t really care much about that, do you?” She explained.
“Nope.” Martin grinned. “It’s nice to have you back here little sis.” Martin thought about what he had just said.
“Hey, I thought Dad said you wouldn’t be home this year?”
“I know; I haven’t really seen Dad anywhere. There was a group of trolls that decided to make their home underneath the school, so they sent all the students home until they could deal with the threat.” Martin nodded in agreement.
“Though I do have to say it’s nice to be back in Alma, let alone Briarwood… Oh, right!” she looked over at Lawrence. “You can go, just be more careful”
“Yes, thank you.” He got up and left the tent.
“Oh Martin, Terrance is such a wonderful place, I hope you get to go there someday.”
“Yeah, but I like Alma’s forests a bit better than Terrance’s plains and mountains.” Martin shrugged.
“Ha. Alright, which shoulder did you say was hurt?” Sarah remembered what she was doing.
“My left one.” Sarah Pulled down the shoulder of his shirt and began to heal it.
“So how have things been down here since I left?” Sarah asked.
“Well, in the past couple years, not much has happened, Leo and I became captains, a couple of bandit raids, a wolf attack or two. Oh, and the Shedan Village near here signed a peace treaty, so that’s taken care of for now.”
“Well, that last part doesn’t sound like it’s not much…. Aaannd there, your shoulder should be good as new” Martin leaned forward and twisted arm about.
“Wow! Thanks Sis!”
“No problem, just don’t do anything rough with it.”
“Will do. Hey, that’s impressive spell work you have there, so what all can you do with it?”
“Right now I can cast lesser healing spells and wards, but that’s about it. As far as healing goes…. I can only heal minor wounds; it would take a more powerful mage or multiple healers to cure a more serious wound.”
“Oh, nifty.” Martin responded.
        “Hey,” Sarah said. “You haven’t noticed anything strange going on have you?”
“No, not really. Well, except the Shedan have been less active around here, but that’s probably because we have a treaty.”
“Yeah, about the treaty, what resolved that? You said you were a captain now, so you must know”
Asked Sarah anxiously.”
“It wasn’t anything big, but promise me you won’t spread it around?”
“I promise” His sister ensured, she looked into his eyes to signal he could trust her.
“Ok, so it was a couple weeks ago when the drou-” Martin was interrupted by a sudden burst into the tent.
“MARTIN, COME QUICK, ITS AN EMERGENCY!” Leo ran in panting and screaming.
“Leo what’s going o-”
“NO TIME FOR THAT, GET YOUR SWORD AND SHIELD AND FOLLOW ME, HURRY! I’LL EXPLAIN ON THE WAY!”
Martin ran out of the tent and made his way to the blacksmiths, he shoved his way through panicking crowds.
        “Scott!” Martin shouted, as he ran into the forge.
“Captain, sir it’s an ho-”
“I’m sorry to interrupt you, but I need my sword and shield ASAP.”
“YESSIR!” Said Scott, he rushed into the tents back compartment and came out with a silver sword and shield, both engraved with the Kendred symbol for “Guard”
“These are the best I can give you right now.”
“Thank you.” Martin exclaimed.  He took the sword and shield and ran out the doorway of the tent.
“yes sir, alright, sir.” Scott returned to his work.
        Martin fought his way through the screaming crowd. He saw the faces of people crying in sheer terror. People were hiding and trying to shield their children as they ran for safety.
“Good god, what happened?” He thought to himself. There was one lady who had fallen and was being trampled by the crowds. Martin quickly ran to her.
“Take my hand, you need to get out of here!” She grabbed his hand and pulled herself up, and without a second thought, fled.  Martin looked off into the distance to see Leo, who was lying limp and lifeless on the edge of the forest. “Oh God, Leo!?” He shouted, there was no reaction. He started making his way to Leo. He was about ten feet from him when he was hit in the back with something sharp.
“Hah! Gotcha!” He heard someone say. Martin was knocked to the ground.
        “Hello there. You’re Martin Dunshire, Captain of the Briarwood Guards, right?  Not so High-and-Mighty now, are you?” he heard someone say. He looked up to see a boy with wolf ears and yellow eyes looking down upon him. “So what do you say Kendred, are you ready to die?” The boy raised his blade. And begun to bring it down.
        The movement was swift. He couldn’t think, and there was no time to react. He saw his life flash before his eyes.
The sharp sound of metal clashing made Martin’s ears ring, followed by a moment of piercing silence.
“WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU STILL DOING DOWN THERE, MARTIN? GET UP AND HELP ME WITH THIS!” As Martin looked up, he was amazed to see Leo standing above him.
“What the hell?” The Shedan boy exclaimed. “I thought I finished you!”
“Rule number one, Don’t ever assume in combat!” Leo Broke the block and jabbed at the boy with his katana
“Rule number two, never underestimate the enemy!” Leo sliced at the boy. and unsheathed a dagger strapped to his shin.
“Rule number three, never assault a captain!” Leo pulled back his katana and threw the dagger, striking the boy in the chest. The Shedan fell back, unmoving.
“Welcome to Briarwood, mutt.” Leo said.
“Damn you” The Boy said with his final breath. Leo sheathed his katana, fire burned brightly in his eyes, but at the same time, he appeared to regret his actions.
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Alexphobia
I read this over three times now and I still love it. This is a story you can read quite a few times and still be excited and stuff
or something
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Dungeon_Master
MOOOORRRREEEEEEEEEEEE
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Dungeon_Master
YUSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
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Wisperton
Working on it as we speak
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on December 08, 2016
Wisperton
I'm hoping to add more to it soon
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Wisperton
^_^
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Alexphobia
I hope you can do that soon! ^^
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Wisperton
Thanks, this really means a lot to hear
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TheFreakGirl
I love this so much! Please continue this, I can't wait for the next chapter. :3
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Wisperton
Thank you! I'm gonna update it again shortly, been having a lot of trouble getting my laptop to connect with the school wifi
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TheFreakGirl
Holy- *pauses, the speaks again.* Anyways, are you good now to start a rp? @Do_Not_Fear_The_Reaper
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Dungeon_Master
Indeed
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tylnapp
Not to "butt in" as they say, but that explains quite a bit Reaper....
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TheFreakGirl
Okay.
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Dungeon_Master
Later, when I have stable internet
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on October 29, 2016
TheFreakGirl
O.o Okay...? Um, wanna rp Impure? @Do_Not_Fear_The_Reaper
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on October 29, 2016
Dungeon_Master
Everywhere and nowhere
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on October 29, 2016
TheFreakGirl
Where the heck did you come from?! @Do_Not_Fear_The_Reaper
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on October 29, 2016
Dungeon_Master
Just like me
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on October 29, 2016
TheFreakGirl
Oh, but me and some other readers shall be waiting.
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tylnapp
I may have referred my sister towards the story of Impure....and Qfeast....

I await for a new chapter of Impure to be uploaded, as many others do. I may need to re-read the story again in order to be able to fluently traverse to the next chapter, like a person traveling from one town to the next...the same but different at the same time, and must be re-read See More▼
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Wisperton
Thanks, and that sounds nice. I look forward to to the addition to a tail tale (qfeast will not let me post this comment, gosh) :D though I would r ecco mend rereading after the next update because I'm revising everything
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tylnapp
Thank you, and I will note that.

I may have just shut my door to my room due to my parents....watching youtube videos with more than the usual amount of swearing in them....and now I worry whether that may have been rude or not...as that door separates the two bedrooms...
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Dungeon_Master
WHERE IS THE NEW CHAPTER! I AM DYING FOR IT!!!
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Dungeon_Master
IT'S THE TENTH IN YOUR COUNTRY! NEW! CHAPTER! PLEASE!
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Wisperton
Gonna put it up later if I can get my computer to connect
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Wisperton
It's on my computer lol it'll be up on on about the tenth, no Wi-Fi to upload it
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Dungeon_Master
GAHD< DOObIT, DANM IT
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Dungeon_Master
I NEED MORE!!!
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tylnapp
There are a few...RPs that are currently going on now..
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Dungeon_Master
*mimicks rocket the rackoon* Oh... Yeahhh
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
It seems so, interesting.
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on July 19, 2016
Wisperton
so as you can probably infer, your characters will have more links to them than you think
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on July 19, 2016
Wisperton
More accurate and cost-friendly models were forged by the hands of the reptillian people in the small village, Vasvatican (Sister town to Veres-Vaunty). Meanwhile models were dug up and found in the south-eastern forests, though incredibly inaccurate, they made good for closed-quarters combat and executions. Though still rare as the reptillian people are a private See More▼
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on July 19, 2016
Wisperton
Guns (Pistols [Or Minute-Muskets] and Muskets) were developed in the earlier stages of "The great war" by the Wilven Kendred, many artifacts were passed down from this era: The golden bow, The Pendant of Wilver, and the "Twin Technique" for steel-forging, aong with the ability to make muskets. The use of muskets faded do to problems with accuracy, and how costly See More▼
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
I see, though (If google is correct) it sounds as if regular HP rounds do more anti-infantry work than penetration, though you do have some knowledge on the subject. Its interesting, though makes sense how there has been different types of ammunition over the years.
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
Crossbows used a similar tech back when, with clay on the outside then the point inside the hollow clay ball, which worked to pierce plate armour
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
Tyler has the vulpes version of of a longer rifle, admittedly without hollow points (Which I thought were for anti-infantry rather than armor piercing [Which I thought FMJs were for]), but still gets the job of defense done.
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
YEESSS, And why are you not writing the story! I need to find out who this mysterious stranger is!
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
Dares rifle was a 3 round, cylindrical, long barreled, high accuracy and velocity rounds, and while the cartridges are still lacking, he has hollow point bullets as to pierce armour
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on July 19, 2016
Wisperton
Y'all are getting it all wrong. it was made by the eastern pineapples.... No, but i could really go into very deep plot about this right here if you want to lol
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
A six round, cylindrical, short barreled, higher accuracy (and bullet velocity), and the addition of "bullet" cartridges are what was improved. Maybe not the barrel, but it was made for their higher ups personal protection.

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That may also be the only one of its kind....in Tyler's hands...
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
Improved? Ha, I'd like to see that
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
The Foxes made their own, improved version, they never claimed it was completely of their design...though kept the design relatively secret.
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
Stupid foxes, stealing serpent knowledge and claiming it as their own, those cunning thieves. Whoa, Deja vu
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
The Vulpes smiths made another, smaller version as well which was handed to Tyler's father...then"taken" by him when he left Shedan territory.
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
No, it was made by serpents, it ws serpent technology, serpents made it as the pinnacle of their war tech, and awarded to dare for saving a family of gunsmiths
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
But....that (maybe the serpent tech is an improved version) was developed by others.
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
Oh for hells sake this is why you people aren't ready for serpent tech
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
The rifle may have exploded due to an excessive amount of gunpowder...
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
... What did you do to the rifle?
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on July 19, 2016
tylnapp
Your rifle...it sort of...
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on July 19, 2016
Dungeon_Master
MUST. FIND. AND. DO. STUFF. I MISS DARE!
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on July 19, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
*slams head on table.* Darn it... Darn it... Darn it... I noticed that Leo and Lily have the same backstories. D: Well, should I change mine?
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tylnapp
That is up to you, though having two characters with similar backgrounds may prove easier for them to speak to each other.
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
Lol, sure. But I'll have to start tomorrow as its 3:30 here and I have a bit of work tomorrow :/ sorry, but yeah I'd love to :D
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
Can't wait. XD Wanna rp Impure on your page?
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
XD thank you, wait until ch. 9 (Ish)
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
Um, not really. But I do love how you make Leo and Martin be silly or something like that. X3
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
OK, sorry about that, anything that is confusing in the story thus far?
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
Okay, I'm trying my best to understand. No need to try, I always figure it out later. Sort of.
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
Sorry if I'm confusing you with all of this but the plot of this story is very complicated and it is kind if like undertale in the fact it is very hard not to give away spoilers. I plotted this story out for 2.5 years so it's gonna get a but tricky
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
Oh, okay.
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
Yeah, I have the story centered around five major arcs, the story is currently in the first arc, or "Arc-Rila"
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
Oh, makes sense.... I think.
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
OK, you may be wondering but that was purely for character placement as to when your character will be introduced
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
??? Um, 3?
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
Also, now as a random choice, pick a number from 1-5.
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
Um... Okay? Your welcome.
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
Ah, interesting, this plot just smacked into a stone slab and stuck in place like a puzzle piece. Thank you
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
*sits up.* No clue. Shocked? XD Hmm, maybe a snow leopards ears and tail. Or a white wolfs, can't decide.
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
XD why the fainting? On an unrelated note, if you were to give your character an animal aspect, what would it be?
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
OH MY LORD!!! *faints.*
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on July 17, 2016
Wisperton
I did say I had a great idea, didn't I? XD
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on July 17, 2016
XxFallenGirlxX
True.
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on July 17, 2016
Dei_Dei
I've finally caught up :P
I'll probably redraw Linda
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Lol, OK :D
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on June 25, 2016
Dungeon_Master
This is a masterpiece rivalling that of David Gemmel, Or R.A Salvator
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Dungeon_Master
It's just missing that serpentine aspect
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Dungeon_Master
No judgement here, I'm a shockingly bad one myself
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on June 15, 2016
Wisperton
well it's done and being uploaded but please keep in mind i am not the worlds best artist ;_;
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on June 15, 2016
Dungeon_Master
No biggie
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on June 15, 2016
Wisperton
Ok, thank you for the information
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on June 15, 2016
Dungeon_Master
No biggie, and Dare, as modeled in my head to be like a Australian Taipan (National pride) Is most likely to be in anything to the desert to hot, tropical areas
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on June 15, 2016
Wisperton
also, thank you so much for the compliment! It means a lot :D
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on June 15, 2016
Wisperton
the story starts off in the south eastern corner, while the desert is in the north eastern, and bayou is closer to the west. i was meaning to ask you what habitat you would wish Dare to be in,
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on June 15, 2016
Dungeon_Master
LThen what does dare classify as?
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on June 15, 2016
Wisperton
yeah, i have mapped out the entire nation, which is called "Alma" in reference to one of my friends. i've put in similar easter eggs with this (Such as Lake Horo, as in Horo the wise wolf) but the main feature is that the location matters, reptilian shedan such as Kappas and caiman lie within the Dessert and Bayou biomes scattered throughout the world
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on June 15, 2016
FallenAngel48
....I LOVE IT!!! You did an amazing job writing this story, I hope you will keep writing. :3
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Wisperton
Thank you! It means a lot
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on June 11, 2016
tylnapp
Interesting...I see Rin and his companion have managed to enter the story...It is interesting thus far, and I cannot wait for more.
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Wisperton
Thanks
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on June 04, 2016
tylnapp
I see the new title photo for Impure, and it looks interesting, I like it.
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Wisperton
Thanks :D
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tylnapp
No problem.
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on May 14, 2016
milfs
LONGEST.
CHAPTERS.
EVER.
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Wisperton
XD
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on May 12, 2016
Dei_Dei
R.I.P Claire
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on May 11, 2016
Dei_Dei
I feel like drawing Linda :3
Is there a reference picture?
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Wisperton
Eh, the closest I have would be my ch.3 teaser. It's found under my profile
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Wisperton
Anywhere you want, really^_^
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on April 27, 2016
Dei_Dei
I've finished it! ^_^
I originally meant to do it digitally, but due to an incident I have to do it on paper
Where do I upload the picture?
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on April 27, 2016
Wisperton
^_^
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on April 25, 2016
Dei_Dei
Okay I'm working on it now ^_^
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on April 25, 2016
Wisperton
OK, sorry about that
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on April 25, 2016
Dei_Dei
It's a bit blurry so I'll use the description from the story
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on April 25, 2016
Wisperton
Oh, yeah
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on April 25, 2016
Dei_Dei
The person on the top right*
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on April 25, 2016
Dei_Dei
Is it the one on the top right?
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on April 25, 2016
LavenderLace
Holy hell chapter 1 is deep as space!!
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LavenderLace
Rhyming like fúckin Zecora
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Wisperton
:{) yeah, I was going by impure rather than qfeast chapters.
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on April 25, 2016
LavenderLace
Aww no need... It happens to me all the time... It's becoming a bit of a problem ^^'
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on April 25, 2016
Wisperton
Nvm, I'm gonna kick myself now
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on April 25, 2016
Wisperton
Oh, lol I didn't know. Which rhymes are you referring to?
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on April 25, 2016
LavenderLace
Zecora is a my little pony character she rhymes all the time
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on April 25, 2016
Wisperton
What? Sorry I don't understand
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on April 25, 2016
Wisperton
XD
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on April 25, 2016
Dei_Dei
I think I've heard this Chi and Mana from somewhere... :) love the logic
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Wisperton
Thx :)
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on April 05, 2016
Dei_Dei
Advice:
There are grammatical errors that are bothering me, and it's a little difficult to see who's talking but the plot is great so far! Keep writing ^_^
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Wisperton
Alright, thank you ^_^
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on April 05, 2016
tylnapp
*Starts to Redraw Leo with his new Shedan bits*
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Wisperton
I'll update the story when word wants to work -_- sorry the continuation of this being stalled is bugging me too
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Wisperton
It should be up tomorrow
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on April 07, 2016
Wisperton
Finished the chapter
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on April 07, 2016
Wisperton
I had it working, but it crashed again, guess I just never mentioned it :/
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on April 04, 2016
tylnapp
*Contenplates about an earlier said matter* I believe you said at one point that you had word fixed....I guess it isn't...
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on April 03, 2016
tylnapp
Oh... that's new.... a new 'turn' of events one could say.
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Wisperton
Lol
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Wisperton
Lol
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on March 08, 2016
tylnapp
*stops drawing* well that ends my drawing...*sees it is completely different from what he invisioned* Well...I guess I'll draw that then...hmmmm... since Leo is a tad bit different now... I guess I should draw him again! He's "one of us" now.
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on March 08, 2016
Wisperton
Lol, I have trouble making it symmetrical sometimes, it's the emblem that's on the wax on the profile pic of Impure OCs
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on March 08, 2016
tylnapp
*tries drawing the tattoo/birthmark that was on Leo's arm*
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on March 08, 2016
Wisperton
Lol, yeah I'm trying to introduce more plot to it.
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on March 08, 2016
tylnapp
It was an interesting segment today.
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on March 08, 2016
tylnapp
*Sees a lot added*
I guess I know what I'll be reading for the rest of this day! Well done, hope to see more later!
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Wisperton
Lol, thx. And there will be
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on February 27, 2016
Shadows147
I love it! ^^ I advice you to please keep writing.
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Wisperton
Thank you, that really means alot :)
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Shadows147
^^
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on February 26, 2016
Wisperton
It's OK :D
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on February 26, 2016
Shadows147
Okay, cause I just wasn't sure at first.
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on February 26, 2016
Wisperton
No. It's just a filler to show the stress of the war.
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on February 26, 2016
Shadows147
Hey, on the second chapter about the Shedan boy, is that Ashlynn's brother, Liu?
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on February 26, 2016
Shadows147
^^
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on February 22, 2016
Wisperton
-ω-
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on February 22, 2016
Shadows147
Yay! ^^
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on February 22, 2016
Wisperton
XD don't worry, I look forward to completing this one. I will update it this Thursday (rest of chapter 1 added, maybe start on ch.2)
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on February 22, 2016
Shadows147
Anytime. But seriously, please keep on writing. I wanna know what is going to happen next! :D
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on February 22, 2016
Wisperton
I hope people don't think the chapters are too long. This is later out as a novel on my laptop.
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vive_la_revolution
They do seem reeeaaally long, but they're worth it.
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Wisperton
Lol, yup, just wish a couple more people would read it, took a year and a half (well, almost 2 by this point) and I'd like people to see what I've come with. But if they don't oh well.
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on February 15, 2016
vive_la_revolution
XD Makes sense.
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on February 15, 2016
Wisperton
Well, that's the reason it takes 2-3 weeks to post new chapters XD
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on February 15, 2016
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on February 15, 2016
Wisperton
Thx :D
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on February 15, 2016
Wisperton
I'll update this story whenever i can connect my laptop to the internet, depending on how much of it i have done, i have een writing it for 1.5 years now
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on January 16, 2016
vive_la_revolution
Prophecy = FREAKING PERFECT. You are going to famous for this one day.
Chapter One = Kind of confusing, and has some grammar errors that are kind of bothering me, but overall really good!
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Wisperton
thx, whats confusing about it? i want to make it clearer, and ill correct the grammar in a sec
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Wisperton
better advise all the comments here... dont attempt what you read at home, thank you
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on January 16, 2016
Wisperton
aaaaand done with adding lines
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on January 16, 2016
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on January 16, 2016
Wisperton
it will take a second though, gtg do something real quick
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on January 16, 2016
vive_la_revolution
OK, awesome! :D
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on January 16, 2016
Wisperton
ok, ill do that
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on January 16, 2016
vive_la_revolution
1. There are a few run-ons, and I had to re-read those parts multiple times before I finally understood what it meant.
2. It will be easier to understand AND look smoother (and be grammatically correct) if you start a new line/paragraph every time someone speaks.

Mostly just those two things.
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