Invisible

Invisible

This is a story about a girl who has never stuck out... But maybe, just maybe, with the help of a cute guy, she can change that.

published on January 08, 20131475 reads 93 readers 196 completed
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Chapter 5.

Surprise Visit

I parked my bike into the stand and groaned.  The rest of school was miserable, the events included me hiding in the library eating my lunch, and running laps in gym.  The only good thing was that it had stopped raining.  

I waved to the manager as I trudged up the stairs.  Finally, apartment 12C came into view.  I was working on finding my key when I heard yelling comeing from the inside.  

I pressed my ear to the door, attempting to make sense of the shouting.  

"Is this really how you've been raising Kasey and Maria while I've been gone?"  A voice screamed.

My mother returned, the volume equal.  "Why?  What's the matter with this place?"

I heard a long groan coming from the other person.  "Maria's nursery is an office, there is barely any room for her crib in there!  It's ridiculous!  Kasey doesn't even have a bed, it's a couch crammed into a tiny bedroom.  I looked in her closet, and she has what, three pairs of pants, a couple shirts, and a ratty jacket.  This is no life for a baby and a teenage girl!"

I knew that voice...

"Yeah, well, you weren't any help when you left years ago, now were you?"  My mom asked.  "You ran away when times were too hard, and left me alone."

"Oh, don't blame this on me.  I left for college, that I got a full scholarship for, I may add.  I left so I could do something with my life.  I got a job, i still send you money every month because I know sure as hell you're not making anything as a waitress.  Just because I did something with my life, and you're wasting yours does not give you the right to blame your laziness on me.  That's not fair."

There was a long pause as the realization hit me of who the voice belonged to.  Exitedly, I put my key in the lock and pushed the door open.  To my disappointment, the door was stuck, so I rammed it with my shoulder.

I looked at her.  Teresa, my older sister who left for college when I was thirteen.  

She looked different, older, more mature.  But it was still her, with her blonde hair, wavey like mine, cut to her shoulders.  She had the same chocolate brown eyes.  She was tall.  She was my sister.

Then, before I could open my mouth, I was engulfed into her warm embrace.
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youarecool
It's awesome dear
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on June 07, 2016
bluebear0914
very good... I loved it very much.
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on September 02, 2015
MysticVolume
Omgmmmmmm i fell inlove with this story
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Bmac99
Aw thank you
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on October 12, 2014
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on October 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
OMG IT TOOK MY 40 WHOLE MINUTES TO FINISH THE STTTORRRRYYY! AMAAAZZZIIIINNNGGG!
me reading the story:
me: *reading -10 minutes later-
parents: get off the computer
me: *keeps reading -10 min. later See More▼
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Bmac99
Thanks haha
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on August 24, 2014
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on August 24, 2014
Bmac99
Thanks everybody :D
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on August 13, 2014
WinterJo
OMG I couldn't stop reading!! XD
I spent a good part of my morning just reading this, :D
I loved it, and you are a great writer.
Sorry for babbling....
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Bmac99
Don't apologize! Thank you!
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on October 12, 2014
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on August 13, 2014
Infinity_Wolf
SO GOOD!!
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Bmac99
Thank youuu
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on October 12, 2014
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on August 11, 2014
The.Girl.With.The.Glasses
I love it!! This is an amazing story!!!
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Bmac99
Thanks :-*
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on October 12, 2014
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on August 01, 2014
Avienexjel
GREAT STORY AWESOME :)
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Bmac99
THANK YOU
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on October 12, 2014
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on July 18, 2014
JeweledOwl812
@Bmac99 Hey Bmac!! YOU GOT 1000 READS!!!!!!!!!!
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Bmac99
ARE YOU FREAKING SERIOUSSS AOSNSJSKABSOSNSJDBD OMGGGG
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JeweledOwl812
Cool! I haven't read Taking Chances yet (I think) so I'll check it out!
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on July 12, 2014
Bmac99
aw thanks. I am almost done with the next chapter of taking chances.
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on July 12, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Yep! :) I re-read it for u :)
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on July 11, 2014
ellotherelove
(sniff) beautiful
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on July 10, 2014
Bmac99
Thanks :)
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on June 09, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Wow! This is amazing!
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on June 09, 2014
Bmac99
WITH ABOUT TEN MORE READS WE CAN BUMP INVISIBLE INTO 3RD PLACE. WHO IS WITH ME?
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on May 21, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Wow. There are some fan fictions, that are really long, but incredible. This is one of those. You are an amazing author.
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on May 21, 2014
Bmac99
Guys...this has almost 900 reads. Help me get to 1000? Recommend this to friends, get people interested! Seriously! I love you guys.
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on May 12, 2014
Bmac99
Taking Chances has been updated!
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on May 12, 2014
Bmac99
Yes! That would be so cool!!!!!! And you can refer then back to this site or my wattpad account which is BeatriceB99!!! Thank you!!!!!!
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on April 26, 2014
XxChristoferDrewsWifexX
Okay so anyways. I'm going to start working on spreading your story now :3 sorry that I haven't started doing what I promised yet. Just been real busy. Anyways. Do you want me to create a cover for you? I mean like a lagit cover with the title and Authers name ( that would be you) ???
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on April 25, 2014
Bmac99
I would fall out of my chair if I was sitting in one.
LOOK AT HOW MANY READS THIS HAS!
Ugh, I love all of my fans :x
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on March 26, 2014
Bmac99
780 reads...wow...that is amazing you guys :))))
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on February 27, 2014
Bmac99
TAKING CHANCES IS NOW OFFICIALLY IN PROGRESS. TWO CHAPTERS ARE UP.
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on December 16, 2013
Bmac99
AND INVISIBLE IS #3 ON THE MOST POPULAR BOOKS.
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on December 14, 2013
Bmac99
OVER 700 READS?!? THAT IS NUTS! I LOVE YOU PEOPLE <3
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on December 14, 2013
Bmac99
ATTENTION: INVISIBLE SPIN-OFF ANNOUNCEMENT. THE TITLE IS GOING TO BE "TAKING CHANCES."
Summary: Maria as always been a good girl, but when she starts a relationship with the sexiest, most mysterious guy in school, she may just have to change that.
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on December 14, 2013
Bmac99
I HAVE OVER 15 PEOPLE WHO HAVE SAID YES TO THE SPIN OFF!!! I WILL GET TO WRITING AS SOON AS POSSIBLE. HOPEFULLY THE FIRST CHAPTER WILL BE UP BEFORE SUNDAY. IT SEEMS LIKE A LONG TIME BUT STARTING A NEW STORY TAKES LOTS OF PLANNING. I MAY BE ABLE TO START TONIGHT, WHO KNOWS? KEEP YOUR EYES PEELED FOR A SUMMARY/SNEAK PEEK OF THE BOOK ON MY WALL. LOVE YOU ALL<3 See More▼
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on December 10, 2013
Celestine
@peace_out what are you talking about?! your stories rock!
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on December 09, 2013
Celestine
I agree with @The_Brendan yes 4 spin-off!
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on December 09, 2013
Echo101
yes 4 spin-off!
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on December 09, 2013
Bmac99
Okay peeps!
I need three more yes's on the Invisible spin-off story!!! So if you read Invisible and have already told me you want this new story, tell your friends who read Invisible! If you read Invisible and want this story, please tell me. Comment here or, message me, or post on my wall!
And I would like to thank all of my supporters again. You guys have no See More▼
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on December 06, 2013
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