Do Not Read This.

Do Not Read This.

Trying to make the beginning of a Fantasy novel. Not sure if I'll keep this version, I've restarted about 10 different ways, so probably not. Oh well, enjoy. Please give comments, suggestions, critiques, I would love to be a great writer one day ;)

published on April 17, 201392 reads 48 readers 24 not completed
show story details+
Chapter 4.

Interrogation.

"No." I whisper. I watch him warily, trying to figure out what he shocked me with. With huge disappointment, I realize he is a Tenzo. He can give off short bursts of electricity.
''You are at my mercy. You shall answer anything I ask." I realized that he was only a year or two older than myself. Looks like he is 16 years old. Maybe.
"Fine." I whisper. He looks surprised at my compliance. "Well? Are you going to ask something?" I snap softly.
"Don't get sharp with me!" He suddenly yells but I do not flinch. I am used to yelling. He sounds... nervous.
"I wasn't." My voice is a harsh whisper. A small surge of electricity flows through my body and I stifle a scream. The boy's face is tensed up, and then he looks surprised and the shock is quickly cut off. "I wasn't!" I yell, I am trembling in my seat, my bony hands have the edges of the chair in a death grip.
I shake more quickly, against my will. 'Calm down.' A familiar warning voice says in my head, my father's voice.
The boy looks at me suspiciously and he paces back and forth in front of me, his eyes keep trained on my own. I glare back arrogantly. "You said you wanted to speak with me." I say and I vaguely wonder where my book bag is.
"Yes. Now," he glares at me cynically. "are you, or are you not, a werewolf?" A low growl escapes my throat and I clutch at the chair even harder, trying to pull myself together.
"No." My voice is calm and has a tone of finality in it, contrary to my utter terror on the inside.. An electric shock angrily surges through my being again, but worse than ever. I scream a shrill tone, the note echos in the warehouse-like building. "No!" I plea. The boy has a look of tire, his face showing signs of fatigue.
"I told you. You can't lie to me."
"Ah- But I can." I recklessly state.
"Unsuccessfully." I frown at this, and I wonder how he can tell? Surely he isn't a Hybrid...
Join Qfeast to read the entire story!
Sign In. It is absolutely free!
4.9
Please Rate:
4.9 out of 5 from 11 users
Add story to favorites
▼Scroll down for more stories

Comments (24)

kindperson
you know what
.
.
.
. See More▼
reply
Report
on July 14, 2015
Avienexjel
Good. ;)
reply
Report
on July 17, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Will you please continue? You're a really really really really really really really really really really really really really really talented writer!
reply
Report
on June 06, 2014
Nobody.07
O.o *that moment when you think your writing sucks... and you've people who really like it. That's when you know you are too picky with your own stuff* XD
reply
Report
on October 21, 2013
THEVAMPSDEMILOVATO
this is good
reply
Report
on October 09, 2013
swageyamatobiyolo
OMG WHEN DOES THE BOOK COME OUT
reply
Report
on October 08, 2013
kikizoey4me
You know if you title it do not read it most peoples natural instinct is to read it xD
reply
Report
on August 27, 2013
kellygirl2
Good but well confusing
reply
Report
on May 04, 2013
Nobody.07
I would like everyone to know that Qfeast automatically Copyrights all works that are posted through this site. Though yes, I think I will take off the chapters... >.>
reply
Report
on April 23, 2013
GONETOOLATE
Liked it, but if something you write is really good then don't post it on the Internet for too long, someone might take it.
reply
Report
on April 23, 2013
fleur22045
write more!
reply
Report
on April 23, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks guys :D It means a ton, no joke :3
reply
Report
on April 18, 2013
Idiot_Killjoy
.........YOU NEED TO WITE MORE OR I WILL DIE!!!!!!!!! =P
reply
Report
on April 18, 2013
secretgirl
Its amazingly,I loved it
reply
Report
on April 18, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks Marge!! XD
reply
Report
on April 18, 2013
TheDoctorsAwesomestAssistant
AWESOME!!!!!!! I agree with everybody else:D
reply
Report
on April 18, 2013
Nobody.07
I'm working on it right now, Big Mac!!
reply
Report
on April 18, 2013
Bmac99
Soo Good! I want to know what she's training for so add more soon... please!
reply
Report
on April 17, 2013
Nobody.07
thanks Clove ;) Means a ton when I see/hear others loving a piece of writing I created XD
reply
Report
on April 17, 2013
Clove
I love this, you have great talent :)
reply
Report
on April 17, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks Beauty!! ;) I will and you will find out that the father is mentally ill... etc.
reply
Report
on April 17, 2013
Beauty784
I like the idea! I agree with Steph, what is the training about? Anyway, you should continue!
reply
Report
on April 17, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks!! ;) Usually I don't stick to a story- obviously check out the stories I've made and they are never finished XD And this story I have rewritten several times... oh well- I will keep with this one for Qfeast!
reply
Report
on April 17, 2013
HellRaiserPrincess
I see that your already becoming a great writer. This story is off to a good start and it leaves the reader to thinking: "why is she training?" I love stories like this that make the reader think and wonder you know? It's a good start and very interesting/enjoyable to read. Please continue on with this and let me know when you right more.

-Steph<3 =)
reply
Report
on April 17, 2013