https://www.qfeast.com/story/Mseinv/Lurking-Nightmares-The-Return Can I have some critique on this even though it's not yet finished and it may have a few spelling errors.
Lurking Nightmares: The Return
Remember the day those teens died and became the animatronics that vowed revenge? If so, they've been relocated to another place but this time they won't be on the stage no more. Those animatronics were locked away in storage decaying from missing parts and than there are the newer animatronics who are the best attractions for "Funtime City" it may seem fun but what's the story behind them that creates their forms. Are they also young teens who've suffered like Ellie and her friends? Find out in Lurking Nightmares: The Return.
@luckpup There is a first story that I have made before this one. It is completed and you may read it if you want.
on August 31, 2016
@LilGaster Your welcome. Reviewing it was my pleasure, I'll be sure to read any more chapters that come out.
on August 31, 2016
I think this is going pretty good.You asked for it to be critiqued, so make sure to keep your reader engaged, don't get too cliche, or confusing. I just think you should show more character, and scenario detail.
on August 31, 2016
on August 31, 2016
You turn away I'll be right beside you, you cut me off
But I'll always have another way to find you
My body's still mending your in for a sight
Another night, but it doesn't get easy
Cause it's not picking up all the pieces
That they salvaged
No matter what the ending, you won't last the night
But I'll always have another way to find you
My body's still mending your in for a sight
Another night, but it doesn't get easy
Cause it's not picking up all the pieces
That they salvaged
No matter what the ending, you won't last the night
on August 31, 2016
on August 31, 2016
ChocolerryPOP added a new chapter to Lurking Nightmares: The Return
Right For The Job
April 16th, 2018
The next day I told my mom about what job application I chose to fill out and she offered to drive me over to Funtime City to hand it over to the manager but I said "There's no need mom, I can drive myself over there. Thank you for offering though well I'll seeya later" waving bye I dash outside to my black scooter, I place the papers tucked safely in my side bag and take off riding about my scooter at the right time and right speed I check the addresses for Joshua Rd 4567 ... Read Full Chapter
The next day I told my mom about what job application I chose to fill out and she offered to drive me over to Funtime City to hand it over to the manager but I said "There's no need mom, I can drive myself over there. Thank you for offering though well I'll seeya later" waving bye I dash outside to my black scooter, I place the papers tucked safely in my side bag and take off riding about my scooter at the right time and right speed I check the addresses for Joshua Rd 4567 ... Read Full Chapter
on August 31, 2016
Being at home makes me feel overwhelmed or lonely sometimes when around my family.
While at school I'm partly stressed and partly happy when I'm with friends.
I don't get why I feel like this, I guess the life I'm living isn't very enjoyable for me.
While at school I'm partly stressed and partly happy when I'm with friends.
I don't get why I feel like this, I guess the life I'm living isn't very enjoyable for me.
on August 31, 2016
I just drew a picture of Goldtrap (Golden Freddy x Springtrap)
7+ likes and I'll post it
7+ likes and I'll post it
on August 31, 2016
To those who think Mangle is female.
Mangle may have a female appearance but it's claimed by Scott Cawthon that Mangle is a male.
Even Marionette and Toy Bonnie are males who also possess female appearances.
Mangle may have a female appearance but it's claimed by Scott Cawthon that Mangle is a male.
Even Marionette and Toy Bonnie are males who also possess female appearances.
on August 31, 2016
My arm feels numb
on August 31, 2016