Clouded

Clouded

Cloud was wondering in moonlight valley when something struck her, will her pack take her back? Will her brother remember her, or was he there and is just pretending?.. Read to find out

published on September 1786 reads 9 readers 34 not completed
Chapter 1.

Prologue

Sun shone on my as I walked down a small crystal blue river. Scents flooded up my nose, a tingling feeling rushed up my pelt as my brother splashed water onto my clouded silver fur. "Ohh you're gonna pay for that" I yelped playfully. I splashed water onto his black fur.
We continued this water fight for a while until clouds covered the sky bringing the rain. The drops fell onto our fur as we ran up the now muddy bank. "Agh" my brother screamed I rushed towards him. "Grab my paw" i yelled frantically trying to call for help, even though we lived alone. No one came I let go causing us both falling into the water... Blue and grey clouded my vision 'This is the end" I thought as I closed my eyes as the coldness wrapped around my wet fur. 'This is it'



(Yea yeah it's short what eves any way continue to the next chapter)
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Hoi~ to all those reading this, I just want to say thank you for all the to forms and that sorry I haven't uploaded a chapter to this book
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tylnapp
It is alright, you write well, and writing takes necessary time.
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RainSweptFlower
Name: Storm
Age: adult wolf
Rank: beta wolf (skilled hunter/fighter)
Back story: Storm was born in a pack but was an outcast. When she got older she soon became a beta wolf and was a skilled hunter. She was known around the pack then and didn't feel left out but some of the wolves didn't trust her since she was nice to most loners. She would vist the river at See More▼
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Awesome! Thanks for the RP forms it really helps
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toughwolf3
My oc Misty has had black magic as a power since I joined Qfeast Months ago....But it's okay Misty can be around before Cloud was So it doesn't bother me much...When Misty dies, she gives her power to someone else..
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MysticMedievalSamuraiPrincess
Name: Indigo
Age: Adolescent fox
Rank: Explorer/medic
Backstory: Her dad, Forest, ate poisonous berries and went insane. He killed Indigo's mom, Moon. Forest then abandoned Indigo. However, Indigo got struck by lightning and developed the power to knock somebody out just by aiming a paw at them.
Power: Can knock someone out by pointing at them with a paw See More▼
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Thanks so much!, I'm sorry I can't post the next chapter I've been really busy
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tylnapp
An Alpha form..?

Name:
Age:
Their distinguished achievement that made them Alpha:
BackStory: See More▼
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tylnapp
I thought this may have been required...as I saw an earlier post that stated you required an Alpha form...but it seems I may have been mistaken...sorry if I was...
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tylnapp
Alright...thanks.
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
It's ok, but this form is aw some! You can fill it in to make an alpha if you want
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Also I need more characters it's hard making them up on my own :'(
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Btw if you don't like what I have done so far with your characters then please tell me and I'll change it
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tylnapp
Name: Tilan
Age: Young Adult Fox
Rank: Sapper (Trap maker and such)
Backstory: Born to a small family below an oak tree within the small Oak forest, he was first out of three children to be born. He grew up doing things he had seen many two-legged creatures doing, using a strange herb that was long and thin, but strong enough to lift himself with enough of the See More▼
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Shadow_The_Wolf
Name: Shadow
Age: young adult wolf
Rank: hunter
Back story: he was born in the forest but was abandoned by his parents but found after awhile and was took to a pack he stayed there and is now growing up and learning in the pack that helped him
Power: death? See More▼
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Awesome!, Lol did you now that when I got CloudedMoon's RP form from a quiz it said she had the power of death too
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Shadow_The_Wolf
Ya it's cool they have the same power
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
E.g.
Name: Cloud (CloudedMoon)
Age : pup
Rank: none yet ( alpha m/f, medic, so on)
Back story: See More▼
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
I just wanna say a big thanks to all you guys who commented on my story, it really boosts me to write more, and to know that someone is actually reading it, so I'm here to ask if you guys want o be in the story, if so then just type up a RP form for your animal, I'd suggest to go with a wolf or a fox
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Shadow_The_Wolf
Would it be fine if I made a form?
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Shadow_The_Wolf
Great story so far!
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Thanks!
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tylnapp
This looks good thus far.
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Fang_The_Alpha_Wolf
Good story I'm thinking of writing one myself
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