Divergent - Amity Initiate

Divergent - Amity Initiate

This is about a girl called Nera (full name Neralia) who is in Dauntless but then chooses Amity. No copyright intended, a section of this is from the actual Divergent book, which is written by Veronica Roth and it is hers to own.

published on May 04, 2014207 reads 27 readers 33 completed
Chapter 1.
The Choosing

The Choosing

Sweat shines on my forehead. I stare forward. My mum and dad are by my side. We are about to enter the Hub for the Choosing ceremony. My Dauntless friends stick by me. We are normally joking and laughing but today we are all silent. I know why. They know what I am going to choose.
We walk through the big doors and toward the elevator. All the other Dauntless crowd around me and our leader, Four, presses the button to take us up. I wait nervously, my stomach jumping like it is on fire. When the doors slide open, I am shoved forward and out to the top floor. I follow my parents and friends through the corridor to a long square room, where the five faction bowls are placed at the front. Abnegation stones, Amity earth, Dauntless coals, Erudite water and Candor glass. I follow everyone to the Dauntless seats and sit myself down in one. Then I wait.
"Welcome." A voice says. It is Marcus, leader of the Abnegation. "Welcome to the Choosing Ceremony. Welcome to the day we honour the democratic philosophy of our ancestors,  which tells us every man has the right to choose his own way in the world."
I squeeze Mum's fingers. She looks at me and smiles.
"Our dependents are now sixteen. They stand on the precipice of adulthood, and it is now up to them to decide what kind of people they will be. Decades ago our ancestors realised that it is not political ideology, religious belief, race, or nationalism that is to blame for a warring world. Rather, they determined that it was the fault of human personality....."
I zone out and lay back in my chair. What do I choose, what do I choose. I look over at the Amity. The Erudite. Candor. Abnegation. And finally, I look at us. Dauntless, the brave one. But I can never be brave. I am weak. I am afraid. Right now, I am afraid of what I will choose. I do not know what I believe. I am torn between the factions, which to choose. I don't know what to do.
"Those who blamed aggression formed Amity."
I glance over at the Amity, dressed in red and yellow. They look happy and free. Just what I want to be like.
"Those who blamed ignorance became Erudite."
The Erudite wear smug looks on their framed faces. I have never liked that look that hangs around the Erudite, that sort of superior aura that floats around their faction.
"Those who blamed duplicity created Candor."
Truth has never been a strength of mine.
"Those who blamed selfishness made Abnegation."
I do not like Abnegation for their seriousness. They are kind and loyal but too solemn.
"And those who blamed cowardice were the Dauntless."
I do not blame cowardice. It is okay for everyone to be scared. The Dauntless are not brave, they are suicidal.
Marcus keeps talking but I do not give an effort to listen. I stare blankly ahead, numb with fright.
Sixteen years. Sixteen years of death and pain and suicide...and for what? For people to think I am brave and to admire me? To believe in the lie I have created?
No. No. I will not let this continue, I will not let this continue.
I return back to the scene before me. Oh God. Marcus is calling out names. No, no, please don't let this be it.
"James Tucker." calls Marcus. I watch as a boy in Dauntless clothes makes his way forward. He stumbles as he goes and takes the knife from Marcus. His hands are shaking and he can't use it, but finally, he manages to and puts his hand over the Candor bowl. Blood drips onto glass. A transfer.
I look at the Dauntless. They are booing and hissing. He is a traitor now.
"Caleb Prior." An Abnegation boy. He walks over with shaky legs and takes the pointed instrument from Marcus's hands. He chooses Erudite.
A hubbub rises from the crowd. Murmurs become speech, and even shouting.
"Excuse me!" Marcus yells, "Quiet please!"
Everyone stops. I sit still.
"Beatrice Prior." A smallish girl stands up, from Abnegation. She takes the knife and chooses Dauntless.
"Neralia Huton."
Oh no. My mum gives me a gentle push, and I stand up shakily. Picking my way through rows and rows of Dauntless, I make my way to the front of the room. Marcus holds the blood-stained knife in his hands. I pick it up and feel it's weight. So many times I have used this as a weapon. Now I will have to use it to determine my entire future. I walk to the five bowls and examine all of them, but only one draws me to it. I walk forward and slit my hand. Beads of blood appear on it. I scan rows of Dauntless and find my mum and dad. I look them straight in the eye, as an act of farewell, rather than an act of defiance. Then I gather my wits, and push my hand over the bowl of dirt and grass. My blood drips down.
I am one of them now.
I am Amity.
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DaNerdBird
This is very good
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on February 14
Maya_swan
AWESOME!!!! I found this book from on of my friends i love it and i find it funny how i published my own divergent book of a transfer to amity seven hours ago if you want i can send you link but only if you want and again AWESOME BOOK!!!
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NeonTiger
Okay! sure i'd love to read it
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Maya_swan
thx!
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Lucky_Queen
This is awesome! A couple of errors (like Dauntless are the only ones who jump off of trains, the bread doesn't actually have that effect unless you're given the straight chemical and too much of it, etc.) but otherwise, AWESOME!!!
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on May 12, 2015
sisaloofafump
please make more! It's tied my favorite story on qfeast please, please, please, please, PLEASE write more!!!!!!!!
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NeonTiger
Thanks!
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on November 24, 2014
Lady_Artemis
OMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG THIS IS SO AWESOME!!!!
And yep, it's true!
You can't put out a Dauntless flame!
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on June 22, 2014
sisaloofafump
This is AWESOME!! I love it!
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on June 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Awesome! You can't put out a dauntless flame! I'm Divergent too! (DO NOT READ THE NEXT PART IT HAS SPOILERS UNLESS YOU READ ALLEGIANT) (Everyone is, you find out in Allegiant that OUR world is Divergent.)
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Maya_swan
I havn't read alliegent yet but my sis ruined it for me.,...,curse you sis!!!
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on May 12, 2015
MockingjayDistrict
It's fine, this was worth it.
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on June 18, 2014
NeonTiger
thank u so much! It took such a long time though, so sorry that u had to wait
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on June 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
REALLY, REALLY, REALLY GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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NeonTiger
Ur New Girl story is WWWWAAAAAYYYYYYY better!!
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NeonTiger
Okay, but gtg now bye
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on June 16, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
You MUST write more!!!!
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on June 16, 2014
NeonTiger
You too!!!
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on June 16, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Aww thanks! You're an awesome writer NeonTiger.
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on June 15, 2014
Lady_Artemis
THIS IS AMAZING, YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE!!!
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NeonTiger
thanx i will!
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on June 14, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on June 03, 2014
swageyamatobiyolo
Love this!!
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on May 05, 2014
NeonTiger
PS. post a message on my writing page if you want a character put in
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on May 05, 2014
NeonTiger
thanks. I tried to write in the same style that Veronica Roth uses.
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on May 05, 2014
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on May 04, 2014
rue2160
I LOVE IT!
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on May 04, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Really good , please write more!
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on May 04, 2014
NeonTiger
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on May 04, 2014
swageyamatobiyolo
This story is amazing so far!!
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on May 04, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
yeah same!
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on May 04, 2014
Lady_Artemis
I love this so far!
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on May 04, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
this is good!
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on May 04, 2014