Like Mah Song?

Like Mah Song?

This is a song I wrote cos I was bored :O Hope u enjoy! (PS: Plez don't copy)

published on May 03, 201422 reads 16 readers 9 completed

Forsaken

(Theme: Slow-paced up to Pre-chorus and Chorus)
There are days
Where you wonder
If you'll ever be free....
There are days
Where you just want
To be....
There are days
Where you look up
To the wide blue sky
But for me
Those days have
All gone by
(fast pace, emphasising every syllable):
Ev-ry place I come
Ev-ry place I leave
Ev-ry place I go
I grieve......

PRE-CHORUS
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I FIGHT for survival
In this cruel world
Until
Eeevvvry thing has unfurled
I need a sign
Something to see....
When will I ever be free?

CHORUS
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Abandoned
Exiled
Forasaken
What do I do?
I'm angry, afraid, and shaken
And all I have is you

BRIDGE
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I'm left alone,
Dumped here and stranded
For no reason at all
I was re-pri-man-ded
Into this downfall....

PRE-CHORUS

CHORUS

CODA
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(softly):
Abandoned, Exiled, Forsaken
I'm alone
In my thoughts
I thought I was safe, but as you can see....
Everything happens to me


I know most of it was rubbish, so can you please help improve it?
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Comments (9)

catqueen03
Nice!
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on June 21, 2014
Sarbar1010
great song based on a great book(s)
'The Forsaken + The Uprising'
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NeonTiger
Yeah thats where i got it from
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on June 14, 2014
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on June 14, 2014
TheSmolKookieMonster
Its good!
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on May 03, 2014
xxwhoviangirlxx
Wow! This is great!
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on May 03, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
I came up with many tunes for it it sounded great in most. Cool lyrics!
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on May 03, 2014
NeonTiger
thanx
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on May 03, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
Great! I sing irl, and i made up a tune for it since I don't know the actual tune. It sounded awesome! But do you sing or play an instrument
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on May 03, 2014
The_Panda_Otaku
Wow! This is amazing!
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on May 03, 2014