Phases of the Moon

The little boy Magik's last memory was his mom tucking him in to bed. Now he is awake and in a strange place he has never seem before. Is he asleep? And what is with the moon?

published on April 12, 201424 reads 9 readers 5 not completed
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Phases of the Moon
Chapter 3.
Escape

Escape

evil alien: HEY!!! prisoners are escaping from the SAS!!! call reinforcements!! REINFORCEMENTS!!! Magik: oh no! 78k: let me handle this. (in evil alien voice and language) *ducks* they went to the top of the castle!!! Magik: nice one! they all are going to the top. 3... 2... 1... JUMP!!!! *jumps off* now land on that UFO and we can get in and fly away. I suppose that you can fly? 78k: yes. both: *lands* evil aliens: HEY!!! they are not up here! WHO SAID THAT?! was it 43t? 43t: was not me! Magik and 78k: *fly away in UFO* evil aliens: Look what 43t did! he should go in jail for that! CURSE YOU 78K AND HUMAN!!!
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beeesafe
Good story but a little 2 fast into things.
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on April 13, 2014
Mcdazzle2000
(BTW i am following u)
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on April 12, 2014
Mcdazzle2000
good story, but needs editing. (look at punctuation, dialogue, and try to explain the escape more) don't worry, it has a good plot-line, so you wont need to work on that too much. if u need my help, i will help you. i edit my stories all the time, and i'm rewriting one of them, so don't feel bad. :p u got this!
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on April 12, 2014
SC_Q.13
okay. thanks for the feedback! now I will try to make it better in the future ;)
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on April 12, 2014
ellotherelove
It's cool but a little too fast-paced. I didn't understand.
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on April 12, 2014