Hurt. (One direction fanfic)

Hurt. (One direction fanfic)

Angela has had a rough past and the only one keeping her together is her 'boyfriend' Troy. After breaking up with her, Angela is lost and sees a man that looks exactly like Troy but realizes it's none other than Louis Tomlinson. She meets the boys and somehow they don't really like her at first. After a few events, some of them starts growing feelings for her. Will she ever recover from her past and will she fall for one of the boys?

published on September 13, 20131165 reads 52 readers 45 not completed
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Chapter 28.
A painful death

A painful death

Louis P.O.V
I sat on a bench. It was midnight. I waited and saw a figure moving towards me. I stood up to see who it was. A man was holding Angela and Eleanor. Wait, El? He had a gun with him. "Tomlinson." No way. "Your choice. Angie or Eleanor?" No, I can't choose! "No, please just let them go!" "I'm sorry but it doesn't work that way. Now who, Angela or Eleanor?" I was shaking. I couldn't choose. I loved them both. I can't do this. Eleanor was frightened. I could see her shaking too. No, this can't be happening. Please no. Who do I love more. No! This is wrong. "You have one minute to decide." No! No! I can't let this happen. "I, I, I choose..." I jumped at him and punched him. He hit me with his gun and pushed me over. He was ten times bigger than me. "Wrong choice Tomlinson." And then a loud bang was heard. A body dropped on me. I saw who it was. Eleanor. The guy disappeared with Angela. "No,El, no!" "Lou, Louis." She whispered. A tear fell on her face. "Louis, it's fine. I'll be fine. Go, go, save her Lou!" "No, I love you Eleanor, please don't die on me." "Louis, don't cry. Smile, I want you to be happy. I love you Lou, smile." I wiped my tears and smiled. "That's better. Now tell me a joke Lou, one last joke." "I, uh, why did the mushroom go to the party." She smiled. "Because he was a f-f-fungi." She laughed softly and cupped my face. "One last song." She whispered. "Under the lights tonight
You turned around, and you stole my heart
With just one look, when I saw your face
I fell in love
It took a minute girl to steal my heart tonight (eh eh eh eh)
With just one look, yeah (eh eh eh eh)
Been waiting for a girl like you
I'm weaker
My words fall and they hit the ground
Oh life, come on head, don't you fail me now?
I start to say,
"I think I love you," but I make no sound." She smiled and kissed me before dropping. "El, no! Please don't go! No! El, I love you! Don't leave me, El nooooo!" I cried. She was gone. The girl I've always loved, she's gone. A man approached me but I didn't look up. "Wrong choice Tomlinson." He said before I blacked out.
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Comments (45)

bluebear0914
I am not a one direction fan at all but I like the story but could you skip a line when there is someone new talking. It is all packed together so I get confused.
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on August 17, 2015
Sombra
DID NOT MEAN TO CLICK ON THIS AHHH I THOUGHT I CLICKED PERCY JACKSON STORY AGHHHHFHHFDHFDH
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on November 17, 2014
zoe_williams
i would have gotten my sass on with zayn by now and i have almost cried a few times
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on July 09, 2014
cupcake_queen33
Don't worry I almost cried in that chapter to. :( :( :( :( :( :( :'(
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on May 23, 2014
THEVAMPSDEMILOVATO
I wanted her to be whit liam
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on January 09, 2014
JKRowling
I've reread this a million times. Its soooooo good
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on January 05, 2014
Thehost
I like it but you need to put speaking o diffreb t lines
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on November 29, 2013
zokeina
how old r u ?
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on October 13, 2013
zokeina
this is starting to get messed up first she goes with zayn then liam and than zayn again why cant she just stay with
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on October 13, 2013
zokeina
no problem:D
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on October 13, 2013
ChokolatLover
Thanks :)
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on October 12, 2013
zokeina
nice story especially when zayn falls of th stairs i hate that boy he is like so annoying he says he is a muslim f**k him i hope he goes hell. i will follow you :D :D:D
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on October 12, 2013
ChokolatLover
Yeah, this story wasn't really about them, sorry, maybe in the next story, it'll be about them. :)
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on October 05, 2013
JKRowling
I like how at the end you explained y Harry and Niall weren't in it cause we both know I was complaining. Good story!
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on October 05, 2013
JKRowling
when will there be more
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on October 03, 2013
JKRowling
yay!
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on September 30, 2013
ChokolatLover
Don't worry, I have something reserved for Harry and Niall :)
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on September 29, 2013
JKRowling
that was good. I still think Niall and Harry need to be more involved. Hardly get to see them anymore. :( I think that Angie should have a chance to send Zayn to jail but she chooses not to so he gets out. Good story and hope this helped
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on September 29, 2013
ChokolatLover
Yes good idea! Ok need to write that down :D
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on September 29, 2013
JKRowling
haha I hear you. If you don't mind I might give you more stuff. Zayn should get mad at Liam and think that Angie is in love with him and cheating on him so Zayn goes out with Perrie. I think Niall and Harry could use a bit more involvement and Louis should go out with someone.......... what do you think
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on September 29, 2013
ChokolatLover
That's a great idea! She falls for Liam and yeah.... Stuff happens. But after your idea, I have another idea but then it will make this story longer but I guess that's a good thing for you guys lol but bad for me since I have to write it :p
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on September 28, 2013
JKRowling
That was good. Don't stop. You should have her get better. In the hospital Zayn can't bear to see her like this so he doesn't show up. She doesn't like this as realizes that Liam is there. She falls for her
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on September 28, 2013
ChokolatLover
Awww! Don't cry! Come let me give you a hug. *hugs*
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on September 28, 2013
Foxface22
I'm crying.Literally! :((
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on September 28, 2013
Foxface22
I'm crying.Literally! :((
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on September 28, 2013
JKRowling
PLEASE
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on September 26, 2013
JKRowling
I MUST HAVE MORE
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on September 26, 2013
KellyClarkson
:(( so sad almost cried
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on September 26, 2013
KellyClarkson
:(( so sad almost cried
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on September 26, 2013
summertime
Why:((
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on September 26, 2013
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