Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 201379 reads 17 readers 23 completed
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Chapter 12.
Dash's news

Dash's news

As Daisy and Flash walk through town with Flame and Daffodil in there carriage. DJ-colt greets them and has a look at the babies. "They are cute. If you ever need a party with music give me a call and I'll come, I'll give you 10 years free music." Daisy kisses him on the cheek, "thanks DJ-colt." And they carry on walking. They get to the farm and dash greets them, "howdy. Nice to see y'all. I have some bad news an' great news but Big Bill Donno the good news yet." When inside Flash takes out Flame and Daffodil and put them on the floor, he then changes Daffodil. Dash starts, "  the bad news is I can't have a baby." Daisy hugs her, "I'm so sorry." Dash continues, "the good news is me an big bill are adoptin a little filly, and I got a letter today sayin that we passed the test so will have her in a month or so." Flash finishes changing daffodil and says, "I'm glad. What will you two name it?" . Dash replies, "that's what me an bill gotta talk about soon." At that moment Big Bill comes in and asks, "what have we gotta talk about soon." And gets on the floor and plays with the kids. Dash smiles, "we got a le'er from the orphanage... We are able to adopt her." Big Bill jumps up and Hugs dash. "Yehaw! I know the perfect name." He pauses then continues "I thought we'd call her Lickity split." Dash smiles, "that's a gorgeous name."
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Comments (23)

Amore_Cheilo
Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
Moonlight_Dreamer
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Sassymaker100
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
Mikaela.Hyakuya
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Rainbow_Bird
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
Princess_Twilight
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
ChokolatLover
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
ChokolatLover
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on July 31, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
DragonFireGirl8
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
cady213
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
cady213
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013