Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 201379 reads 17 readers 23 completed
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Chapter 11.
Daisy and Flashes new fowls

Daisy and Flashes new fowls

In the hospital everypony waits, Flash paces rapidly to and fro in the waiting area. The doctor comes out. "Who is the father." Flash steps forward, "I am." The doctor takes him in to see his new children. The doctor congratulates them. "It's a colt and Mare. Flash asks" May I take them to show the others." The doctor nods.
Flash Bursts through the door. Exclaiming. "One of each." The two families make a circle and take turns holding the babies. Daisy walks in and sits next to Flash. "What's there names." Flash starts, "I named the filly Daffodil." And Daisy adds, "and I named the colt Flame." All the family murmurs the two new babies names.

Just then the princess and prince arrive. "We're here to se the new arrivals." And they are soon handed the babies. "What are there names. Flash sees Daisy has fallen asleep next to him. "The red one is named Flame. And the yellow one is Daffodil."
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Comments (23)

Amore_Cheilo
Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
Moonlight_Dreamer
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Sassymaker100
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
Mikaela.Hyakuya
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Rainbow_Bird
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
Princess_Twilight
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
ChokolatLover
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
ChokolatLover
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on July 31, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
DragonFireGirl8
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
cady213
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
cady213
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013