Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 201379 reads 17 readers 23 completed
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Chapter 13.
Flash gets some news

Flash gets some news

Flash slinks onto the couch after putting the fowls to bed. Daisy smiles, "so... The fowls are asleep." Flash nods. Daisy sighs "there's something I gotta tell you Flash." Flash looks at Daisy and ushers her to continue, "there's something I never told you, I was scared you would shun me for it." Flash looks into Daisy's eyes, "I would never shun any pony for anything." Daisy smiles and continues, "the reason Doctor corn didn't want any pony else in there was cause I have a heart condition." Flash just smiles at daisy, "Daisy. I don't care how you are, where you came from, and what you have, you are a sweet, gentle, caring mare. And I fell in love cause you are a mare that comes once in a lifetime." Daisy smiles and they kiss. After a while Flash speaks, "daisy, I got a heart condition to, it slipped my mind after all that happened." Daisy half smiles, "well it hasn't exactly been a smooth run for you." Flash nods in agreement.

Flashes IPony rings, he walks off to answer it. He soon comes back looking upset. Daisy looks at him and asks, "what's wrong Flash." Flash tries to find his words then manages to reply, "that was Big Bill..." Hearing his tone daisy braces herself as he continues, "my father he.." Flash bursts into tears crying. Daisy comforts him. Flash manages to finish, "has cancer!" Daisy is taken back she thinks 'how can such a strong, fit stallion get sick so fast.' At that moment Violet walks in, "what's happened Flash." Daisy looks up from Flash and answers, "his father has cancer." Violet gasps, "does Raincloud know." Flash replies "no, she is in Pony Palace with Lilly." Violet nods and sits on the other side of Flash. There's a knock on the door, Violet gets up and opens it, Harold is standing there. Violet coldly says, "What do you want." Harold surprisingly replies in a gentle tone, "I was in town and I heard about Mr. Pegasy, may I come in." Flash calls, "You may come in." Harold enters and sits in a chair, "I'd like to apologise for attacking you like that, I had no right to hit a mare ether and I'd like to make up for it, ill give you the money for Mr. Pegasy's treatment." Flashes eyes light up, "you would do that for me." Harold nods, "you'd better go tell your father." Flash nods and then Harold leaves. Violet grabs her coat and says, "I'll go find Doctor Corn." And trots out the door. Soon after she leaves Flash gets up to leaves then asks, "will you be ok with the kids." Daisy nods and kisses him before he leaves.
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Comments (23)

Amore_Cheilo
Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
Moonlight_Dreamer
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Sassymaker100
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
Mikaela.Hyakuya
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Rainbow_Bird
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
Princess_Twilight
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
ChokolatLover
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
ChokolatLover
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on July 31, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
DragonFireGirl8
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
Anime_Fanguy
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
cady213
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
cady213
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013