Collection Of Poems I Have Created

Collection Of Poems I Have Created

No Plagiarizing! These are just poems I have made, love, hate, pain, fear, running, nature- you name it. Can't promise they are good, but I can promise they are near my personal best! Suggestions, Comments, Rates are all great! Rates spread the word of the story, and Comments help me improve!! Help me out- I'd love to become an author one day!!

published on April 23, 201328 reads 15 readers 9 not completed
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Chapter 4.

Magnifying Glass

(I just figured how to do this, and so I taught my brother who was super bored. I was just watching him, he was concentrating so I began writing. This actually happened, I read him my poem and he said that, so I added it XD . Not good, but I thought 'oh well, I'll add it' :)

The boy sat on the sidewalk,
   crisscrossed-applesauce
Two hands, steadying the glass
  smoke twirling to the sky
Toothful grin beams up at me
  as I read my work aloud
"That's me, isn't it?"
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Nobody.07
P.S. put which poem you are talking 'bout XD
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on April 26, 2013
Nobody.07
Thank you Clove and Wolfness- for the complements and for the critique. Yes, to wolfness, I do want critique, no matter how harsh :P And yes, I did have to cram a few words... I'm in a class where the teacher knows I can write, but compared to the others, my work is very well, yada yada so when I put this on here, I didn't really patch up those things I didn't See More▼
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on April 26, 2013
wolfness
Very good, though, if you want critique, the rhythm is a little forced, as though you tried to fit in a bit to many words where there weren't enough syllables
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on April 26, 2013
Clove
You have amazing talent xD, good luck in the future - you are destined to be a writer!! :)
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on April 24, 2013
Nobody.07
thanks guys!! Though, which one, Fleur? @.@
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on April 24, 2013
fleur22045
wow!
I thought that it was a great poem!
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on April 24, 2013
GONETOOLATE
I loved it. It makes me think of an older couple with many years spent together. :3
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on April 23, 2013
Nobody.07
Thanks! The 3rd and 4th lines I couldn't remember from my actual poem, the others were easy to remember cause they were my favorite XD (3/4 the poem, yeah I know)
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on April 23, 2013
catesonskates
Great! If you made the second part yourself, after forgetting, is amazing! You are wonderful with the poems you make. Great job!
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on April 23, 2013