Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014289 reads 36 readers 16 not completed
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Chapter 7.

Just My Luck

Eli curses as he paces around the, should I say, cloud.
"What?!" I ask, growing impatient.
"You're sure it was a Dark Angel?" Eli asks, a slither of hope, flickering in his eyes.
"Yes, I'm sure," I reply. The hopeful glance packs it's bags and flies away. "Why is it so bad?" Eli stops in his tracks, adjusting his blazer and clearing his throat.
"Sorry, I don't usually act like that," Eli stands up straight. "It's bad because Dark Angels don't usually appear till you've been in there for at least a week, for them to be there is unusual and dangerous," In other words, I have no chance of getting into Heaven.
"But why would they be here early?" I ask, growing impatient.
"They want YOU in THEIR army, no, let me rephrase that, they REALLY want you in their army," I stand there, flabbergasted. People actually want me? This is getting strange. Too strange.
"When do I go down again?" I ask, dreading the reply.
"Tomorrow," Eli replies. "In the meantime, you'll have to amuse yourself somehow, or just get an early night sleep, may I remind you, It's five in the afternoon," Eli turns around. I can see his amazing gold and silver wings, folded behind his back. Eli walks away.

So, I'm wanted in a dark army. In a way, I should be honoured, but I will never let myself sink into the depths of darkness, like I did when I was, what you could say, alive.

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ChocolerryPOP
Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
EyelessIngrid
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Sarbar1010
Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
NeonTiger
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Aliyss
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
DarkAngel1204
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Jeweled_Feather
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014