Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014289 reads 36 readers 16 not completed
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Chapter 20.
Eli

Eli

Eli's P.O.V

What the future holds scares me. I have always tried to live in my past, trying to put the future off, for as long as I can. I died when I was only five, so I had no task, as I had so far done nothing wrong. I was pretty much raised by angels, leading on to the test. To earn the title of 'Lord' and become a tester, you have to pass a test, and I'm not talking a pen and paper test, I'm talking a hard, physical test. That was when I was cursed. As soon as I passed, they cursed me, an experiment. I can't fly, unless something motivates me.
"Eli," Comes a voice from behind me. Only one person calls me Eli, not Lord Pocheco. I turn around, my blonde bangs covering my eyes for a split second.
"Steph, hi," I greet, the early morning sun giving me the ability to actually be able to tell who's in front of me. "What time is it?" I ask.
"Five twenty-six," Stephania announces. Five. Twenty. Six. You've got to be kidding me. I thought it was at least six o'clock! "You tired?" Stephania taunts playfully, reading the surprise on my face.
"No, I was worried that you were," I say blankly. I want to say some witty comment to her taunt, smile at least. The smile that used to be plastered across her face, disappears with my reply. I look away to avoid the disappointment pulling down Stephania's mood. I feel horrible talking to everyone like this. With most people, their task would be over by now, but Steph's task will go on for a while. Why can't I smile, just once, at least I'm allowed to go with her when she goes to her task, except I keep losing my temper.
"When do I go down?" She asks.
"WE, go down at eight, so in about two and a half hours," I respond, emphasising on the 'we'. I watch as she tries to hide the smile creeping across her face.
"LORD POCHECO! STEPHANIA!" A-voice-that-sounds-an-awful-lot-like-Tyler's yells. Steph spins around and smiles widely.
"HIYA!!" She yells back. I nod in Tyler's direction as he jogs up to us. He gives a mischievous grin.
"What are you two doing up so early?" Tyler questions, mischief spilling off his voice.
"Talking," Steph replies.
"About what,"
"Stuff,"
"Well I want to talk about stuff too," Tyler says, pretending to be offended. I watch as Steph rolls her eyes and grins. I walk away.
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ChocolerryPOP
Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
EyelessIngrid
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Sarbar1010
Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
NeonTiger
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Aliyss
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
DarkAngel1204
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Jeweled_Feather
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014