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More Than Sibling Love (Dipper x Mabel fanfic)
Dipper and Mable Pines are close friends, partially because of them growing up together, being twins, and facing the supernatural wackiness that is the town of Gravity Falls, Oregon. But the main thing is something neither of them prepared for. Falling in love. And who is the best person to fall in love with than someone who knows everything about you? Both are too shy to make the first move, so they don't know the other feels the same.
I might get hate because of this, but I just wanted to try it.
I never thought about this... I always thought that I would be alone. But fate is cruel sometimes. I don't know when it started. All I know is that I started falling for the one closest to me. Hard. The worst thing about it, is that she is my twin sister, Mabel Pines. I guess it started when I stopped liking Wendy, but I started noticing things about her that I didn't really focus on before. The way her cheeks turned into adorable dimples when she smiled, the different sweaters she wore to show her personality, the way her beautiful chestnut brown hair went down to her legs, the slight tan she was getting by being in the sun most of the summer, and some aspects that I won't go into detail with... yet.
She was beautiful, turning sixteen in a month. She was tall, skinny, with some thickness in places guys love. She went from that weird childish girl in school, to the one who was getting asked out by guys everyday in a short two years. But, strangely, she always declined politely. She even declined the most popular guy in school. When I asked her why she did it, she just said, "I have my sights set on someone," but left it at that. I thought it was strange, but never brought it up again. I was envious of the guy she had her eyes on, but I didn't want to tell her about how I felt, because I felt it would ruin our friendship. Plus, we wouldn't be treated as a couple, even if she did feel the same way. What was the term.... incest? Yeah, that's the word. Incestuous couple were treated harshly. I didn't want to burden her with it, so I never told her. That is all I want to write for now, see ya. -Dipper Pines
{I hope you liked this. The next chapter is my first time writing from a teenage girls point of view. Anyways, see you guys. Peace. ~ (|-\\\-) }
I like it so far. I feel like you could have gone into more detail about the "most popular guy at school" and explained why he was so popular and how that made Dipper confused about it. I also feel like even though it's cliche' when someone gets a crush on someone else they always feel like the scum of the Earth and they are a God/Goddess from above. For example See More▼ you could write something like, "She was so beautiful, she's so unique and talented and has every guy swooning over her. And then there's me. The wimpy boy who can't get a guys email without it being out of fear or pity. She's perfect and me? Well.... I'm just that one guys."