Try Hard

Try Hard

One girl. Four boys. They will all compete to win the girl's attention - but do they end up trying too hard each time? A 5 Seconds of Summer fan fiction. Though you don't need to know who they are to understand it! ;)

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Chapter 4.
Chapter Good Girls (Luke's P.O.V.)

Chapter Good Girls (Luke's P.O.V.)

Ashton went on a date with Ally. He went out the Sunday after we first saw her, and when we asked where he went, he immediately told us that he was out with Ally. Michael, Calum and I were so jealous. We didn't even know that he had found her phone number.

Ally was kind of taking over my life. I thought about her constantly. But I'd never talked to her - I don't know if she even noticed me.
Then one day, she made me lose my best friend.

My best friend, Lauren, was over at my house. She went up to the bathroom, and I was talking about Ally with Calum.
"Seriously, Luke," he sighed. "I don't know why you're going after Ally too. I mean, you could have Lauren!" Then I said something that I shouldn't have said. I really wish I didn't say it. But I did, and I paid the price.
"Maybe," I agreed. "But, you know, Lauren's just not Ally. She's nice, but she's not as pretty as Ally..."
Calum was staring at me with his eyes wide, and he nodding to the doorway. I turned, and I saw that Lauren was standing there, and it looked a lot like she had tears in her eyes. I was about to apologise, but she ran off as fast as she could. I can't blame her. That was the worst thing I'd ever said.
Lauren has always been quite insecure about the way she looks. She's really pretty, though, and I actually had a crush on her as well as Ally. I'd always told Lauren that she was the most beautiful girl I'd ever seen. I'd meant it, too. But now, I wasn't sure.
Calum kept staring at me. "I'll go talk to her," he said, and walked outside. He came back a few minutes, looking solemn. "She never wants to talk to you or even look at you again," he told me. "She's really upset. She's bawling. I think it hurt her even more because she knows Ally." "She does?" I exclaimed. Calum nodded. "Lauren said that Ally lives a few door down from her," he explained. "Apparently, she's really popular, and all the girls want to be her best friend, and all the boys love her. So she's even more distraught because you know how insecure Lauren can be." I bit my lip, and agreed. "And now she really hates you," Calum continued. "She said that you used to tell her that she was really pretty. Now she isn't sure if you actually meant it. She thinks you were lying. And now she's questioning your whole friendship." "She told you all this?" "Yeah." "Well...oh, I have no idea what to do!" I sighed. "I just lost my best friend because of Ally!" "You should at least try to talk to Lauren," Calum suggested. "You're just saying that because you're hoping that we'll become friends again and you can get Ally!" Calum didn't reply. "I knew it!" I shout. "Well, I also care about your friendship. But I wouldn't be surprised if she never talks to you again. I'm kind of siding with Lauren on this one." "I would too," I mutter.

A/N: Sorry, Heartbreak Girl readers! :(

I'm trying to include some of your OCs in the next few chapters. So please stick with me, they'll be included eventuallly. :)

Just telling you, I changed what I said Ally's hair colour is (in Chapter 1) because of the song. I'll be saying something about her hair in an upcoming chapter, so just in case you were wondering about it when that chapter is put up.

Thank you so much for reading, my lovelies. I know it's not good so far, but please continue reading, I think it'll be better when I start the song. This is just getting started. ;)
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Weiss_Schnee
WOOHOO MORE'S FINALLY OUT!!!
NOW WRITE MORE!!!
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CrystalDiamond2323
WRRRRREIIIIITTTEEEE MMMOOOORRFEEEE
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MockingjayDistrict
Thx 4 updating!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw you're lovely!! :D I'm so sorry that I didn't update for ages though!!!
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MockingjayDistrict
PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I NEED A HAPPY ENDING FOR LUREN NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on July 31, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
I'm good either way
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on July 19, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
It sounds like a great idea, as long as there's Luren! I like this story, but that fic sounds great!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thanks!! :D I'll make a poll about it now!
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Weiss_Schnee
That sounds like a good idea Ari.
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you!! :D
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CrystalDiamond2323
Write more soooln
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swageyamatobiyolo
I won't be able to update tomorrow, Sunday or Monday.
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MockingjayDistrict
OMG I felt so bad reading that chapter! Poor Luke!!!!! :((
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swageyamatobiyolo
I know! :((
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you so much!! :D I feel like this story is so bad though... :(
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MockingjayDistrict
It's a good chapter in writing though! Super descriptive!
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CrystalDiamond2323
WRITE MOOREEEEE
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MockingjayDistrict
Omigod I'M GOING TO DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :(( :(( :(( :(( I ship Luren so much, FIX THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :(( :(( :(( :(( Other than that, you're a really good writer!
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MockingjayDistrict
It's okay!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha!! :D
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MockingjayDistrict
Maybe it is! Well along with Percabeth, Romione, Aryagon, Keeta, Jiper, Fourtris, Hinny, Rorina, Nasuatagh, Luville, and other ship names!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Haha, it's like Luren is one of your favourite words!! :D
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MockingjayDistrict
Forever and ever! LUREN LUREN LUREN
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swageyamatobiyolo
We're still Luren shipping buddies, right??
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MockingjayDistrict
:(( Your *sniff sniff :((* welcome.
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw, sorry!! :((
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swageyamatobiyolo
Aw, thanks!! :D
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CrystalDiamond2323
Awesome!!!! Write more soon!
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Weiss_Schnee
AWWWW SO CUTE!!!!!!!!
I AM TOTALLY INTO THIS!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you so much!! :D
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Weiss_Schnee
Np! :D
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razzberri
This is my OC:
Name: Jen
Age: 63
She is: Calum's grandmother

She is very sweet to everyone, and does generous acts of kindness. For example, she made a really delicious cake for Calum and the other 5sos boys, for after one of their concerts. Her hobbies include knitting, sewing, reading, and puzzles. Plus she's a wonderful cook!
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razzberri
I hope she can be in the story!! Sorry that she's probably a weird character...
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swageyamatobiyolo
I do like your idea! :D I would have never thought of creating a character like her!! :D
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razzberri
You really think so?? :d I just thought it might be interesting to include an older relative of his...:) I hope you really do like my idea....
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swageyamatobiyolo
Oh, no, it's okay!! :D She's different, and that's really cool!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Cool!! :D
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CrystalDiamond2323
Can I have an OC?
Name: Lindsey
Age: same as others
Personality: funny, talkative, sarcastic, outgoing
Hobbies: art related stuff, writing, meeting new friends See More▼
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swageyamatobiyolo
I'll include her when I can! :D
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MockingjayDistrict
Awesome! I loved Heartbreak Girl, I'm glad you're writing more! Continue with the teasers, and if you accept OC's than you already know my info!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you so much!! :D And are you saying she would be Ally's best friend?
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MockingjayDistrict
You can choose what Dawn is.
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on July 12, 2014
swageyamatobiyolo
You can change who she is if you want, because you guys won't be finding out much about Ally...
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MockingjayDistrict
You can decide.
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CrystalDiamond2323
Awesome!!!!
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swageyamatobiyolo
Thank you!! :D :D
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