My Poetry and the Like

My Poetry and the Like

Title's pretty self-explanatory. This ranges a lot from dark and scary to light and happy!

published on April 15, 201492 reads 25 readers 9 not completed
show story details+
Chapter 2.
Night Is Bright (not exactly a poem)

Night Is Bright (not exactly a poem)

Water dripped from the ceiling. My hot breath echoed off the rough walls. I would love to describe more to you this cave I am trapped in, but there is nothing to see except for the Darkness.
Darkness.
You have not seen Darkness until you come to this cave. It surrounds you like a cloud of livid smoke and ash. Breathing seems harder for the blackness of it all chokes you. As the black seeps into your lungs, it turns your heart as cold as its own.
The Dark has a personality to it too.
It follows you with ease while you trip and stumble through its ebony corridors.
Its laugh resonates around you when you fall into the shallow creek.
The worst are its gloomy eyes. They glare down at you like an innkeeper who hates his guest. They twinkle like an invisible star when you moan, they thin to slits as you discover something new. The ash of the Darkness’ eyes makes you shiver and sweat, laugh and cry, die and live.
As I write this I can remember its cold icy, wet hands claw at my throat.
So I’m sorry if you were looking for a cave description but the Darkness is the scariest place I’ve ever been.
Join Qfeast to read the entire story!
Sign In. It is absolutely free!
4.8
Please Rate:
4.8 out of 5 from 4 users
Add story to favorites
▼Scroll down for more stories

Comments (9)

MockingjayDistrict
Wow, all these poems are beautiful. I live the way you described Darkness with human traits and characteristics. If I didn't know better I would have thought these poems were written by a professional. You could really become famous from writing!
reply
Elleyd
Thank you :D
reply
Report
on July 03, 2014
Report
on July 03, 2014
Nightcat
whoa...................these are like story-poems :D the language is amazing, description and feels and too much amazing stuff for my brain *bang*
reply
Elleyd
haha xD and yea the last two arent really poems just descrptions
reply
Report
on June 30, 2014
Report
on June 29, 2014
MMMMMMM6
You should definitely submit this to a competition or something. Even if you don't win you will still get your work out there. That's what ive been doing :)
reply
Report
on June 02, 2014
MissFattyPattyPoo
Cool! I luv them!
reply
Report
on April 26, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
You are such an amazing writer! I cannot express in words the extents of your talents! (LOL that sounded like I was some sophisticated British socialite)
reply
Report
on April 26, 2014
Tariyukimew
beautiful ^~^
reply
Report
on April 21, 2014
threebeltking
THESE ARE AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!
reply
Report
on April 15, 2014