My Alternative Ending to Allegiant

My Alternative Ending to Allegiant

As we all know, Veronica Roth gave us a rather tragic ending for Allegiant, which left millions of initiates heart-broken. But I took it into my own hands to start writing an alternate ending to it. So yeah, here it is.

published on June 01, 201464 reads 29 readers 25 completed
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Chapter 2.

Chapter Fifty

(Time to find out the REAL alternate I make! Get ready!)

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TRIS

"HOW DID YOU inoculate yourself against the death serum?" he asks me. He's still sitting in his wheelchair, but you don't need to be able to walk to fire a gun. Bit like Shauna.
I blink at him, still dazed.
"I didn't," is all I can say.
"Don't be stupid, Tris," David says. "You can't survive the death serum without an inoculation, and I'm the only person in the compound who possesses that substance."
I just stare at him, not sure what to say. I didn't inoculate myself. I know I didn't. The fact that I'm still standing upright is impossible. Or maybe it's because-
No. There's nothing more to add. It's impossible. Leave it at that.
"I suppose it no longer matters," he says "We're here now."
"What are you doing here anyway?" I mumble. My lips feel awkwardly large, hard to talk around. I still feel that oily heaviness on my skin, like death is clinging to me even though I have defeated it.
I am dimly aware that I left my own gun in the hallway behind me, sure I wouldn't need it if I made it this far.
Yeah, big mistake there. Way to go, Tris.
"I knew something was going on," David says. "You've been running around with genetically damaged people all week, Tris, did you think I wouldn't notice?" He shakes his head. "And then your friend Cara was caught trying to manipulate the lights, but she very wisely knocked herself out before she could tell us anything. So I came here, just in case. I'm sad to say I'm not surprised to see you."
"You came here alone?" I laugh at him. "Not very smart, are you?"
His bright eyes squint a little. "Well, you see, I have death serum resistance and a weapon, and you have no way to fight me."
"Don't count on that!" I hear someone shout. It sounded like...
No way!
But then I know it was true that I heard him. Because I see him running to me.
Tobias.
He's holding my gun. He must have seen it on his way and picked it up.
Thank God.
"Tris, catch!"he says, throwing my gun to me, and I catch it. He then runs past David and snatches his gun.
"Well well, Tobias Eaton," David says. "I should have known you'd come save your girlfriend."
"Shut UP about her," Tobias says, holding David's gun at him. I do the same with mine.
"You wouldn't shoot me." David believes we're not going to shoot him.
He thought wrong.
We both pull the trigger at the same time, and David falls from his wheelchair, lying motionlessly.
He slumped out his chair like Eric did when Tobias shot him.
Tobias pulls me closer to him by my waist and fits his mouth to mine.
We will always have each other.
I have Tobias.
He has me.
That's how it's meant to be.
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Comments (25)

TsumikiMiniwa
Sooo much better. It didn't leave me as a sobbing heap under my blankets like the real book. I was heartbroken. Almost literally. TRIS WAS SUCH A GOOD CHARACTER!!!!!
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on October 25, 2015
Ravenclaw3243
Bya! Great story!
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Weiss_Schnee
Thank you! :D
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Ravenclaw3243
NP! Lol, it's like David totally thinks he burned Tris, and Tobias comes running in! It's like the formula all the superhero movies use, you know? Like evil robot is about to swallow lady whole, but Bobby the Super Duper Ketchup man ( I just made that up. ) flies in and kills the robot and saves lady! (I'm too lazy to give her a name.)
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on July 13, 2014
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on July 13, 2014
BlazingFlame48
I luv it!!
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Weiss_Schnee
:D Thank you!
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on July 09, 2014
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on July 09, 2014
JeweledOwl812
YESSSS! David BYE BYE! We won't miss you!!!
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Weiss_Schnee
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on July 01, 2014
JeweledOwl812
<4
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Weiss_Schnee
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on July 13, 2014
JeweledOwl812
@Ravenclaw3243 intended :)
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on July 13, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
Less then four? Oh. I see your pun. LOL. Intended or no!:D
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Frostgoddess
AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Weiss_Schnee
In Veronica Roth's ending, Tobias doesn't come back that quick, David shoots Tris, Tris sees her mother, and then goes with her to Heaven. So basically, in the real ending, Tris dies.
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Ravenclaw3243
Spoiler!
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on July 13, 2014
Frostgoddess
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on June 24, 2014
ellotherelove
Good
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on June 01, 2014
Weiss_Schnee
Thank you!!!!!
This is my first time writing an alternative ending to a story, so thanks so much for this praise people!!!
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on June 01, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Yes! I <4 it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS IS SO MUCH BETTER THAN THE REAL ENDING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You should have written the ending, not Veronica Roth!
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Ravenclaw3243
I like both.
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Weiss_Schnee
YOU'RE AWESOME, MD!!!
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on July 13, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
I don't like things that make me cry, (unless they're tears of joy, or some other circumstance) so I prefer Jackie's ending, despite Veronica's writing skills.
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Weiss_Schnee
I'm glad you like it! At least now that I've written that I won't wake up in the middle of the night screaming "NO! TRIS!"
XD I don't really scream that XD
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on June 01, 2014
swageyamatobiyolo
SO SO SO MUCH BETTER!!!!!
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on June 01, 2014