Which Opening Paragraph is Better for a Fanfic?

Which Opening Paragraph is Better for a Fanfic?

I'm writing a Warriors fan fiction. I already got most of it planned and a couple of chapters up on a different site but I think I'm gonna re-write it. Like, real serious now. Which opening sounds better guys?
Option 1.
The Moon was a thin silver claw in the sky, gleaming bright against the deep dark blue. Thick storm clouds approached from over the hills. The forest was dim, little stars glinted through leaves, shining courage and hope into the shadows. Silhouettes of all sizes were slinking into shallow burrows, woven reeds, bramble dens, some curled up in the open, fearless of the coming storm. Sleep was coming over the lake like a thick, warm blanket.
Option 2.
The Moon was a thin, silver claw in the sky. Its bright gleam raked the dark abyss surrounding it. Thick clouds slowly curled over the distant hills, ready to strike with a storm. Slivers of light flitted through the forest canopy, darting across the dimly lit foliage and shedding courage into the shadows. Silhouettes vanished into dens, a few stayed out in the open, fearless of the sharp gale that foreshadowed the approaching cloudburst. Sleep was sweeping over the lake as swiftly as the billowy wind.

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WarriorCats555
2 because the cats probs dont know what a blanket it...:3
on January 31, 2015
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gothicskittlescupcake
on December 13, 2014
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Elleyd
Both are phenomenal, gorgeous imagery, and strong vocabulary, and some of the best writing I've seen on Qfeast. Option 1 is a much more serene and calm opening, leading one to feel the weight of sleep and quietness on them. Option 2 is much more ominous, keeping the reader in suspense on the edge of their seat. Grammar needs a little work for both and some word choice is a little shaky but I'd love to work on you with that. If you want some more input ping me on my wall or over See More▼
on November 30, 2014
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JeweledOwl812
Option 1! Great writing skills
T3R3Z1
Thanks! If you want to read more I guess you could go to this link:
http://www.chickensmoothie.com/Forum/viewtopic.php?f=57&t=2478208&p=78282048#p78282048

But as I said I'm gonna probably re-write it.
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on November 30, 2014
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