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Your_Average_Fangirl
http://www.qfeast.com/story/GDVYkw/Forestclan
Plz tell me what you think so far!
Forestclan
Forestclan
http://www.qfeast.com/story/GDVYkw/Forestclan
Young Aquashine only memory of her birth clan is leaving and she seeks her history and what lies ahead in the future and find out about a prophesied cat before her named Silverflight for she is the only adult cat left from the previous generation with the villains known as darkclaw and lightclaw.
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Your_Average_Fangirl
@Celest_Stories yes..I have been told the same by a few other experts. So im still working on that.
on January 01, 2015
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Celest_Stories
As I am not very familiar with the WarriorCats series, I can't give proper advice on the story. Instead, I will give advice on the sentence structure and grammar. You had many run-on sentences, I advise that you quickly fix those because it's very hard to read a sentence that continuously goes on and on and on without a break, such as the sentence I had just See More▼
on January 01, 2015
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Your_Average_Fangirl
@Celest_Stories ok....?
on January 01, 2015
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Celest_Stories
I'm going to warn you that I'm not sugarcoating anything.
on January 01, 2015
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on December 31, 2014
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Celest_Stories
Since Shine said I was good at helping people with writing, I've decided to do this. Ask away
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on December 31, 2014
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