Godly Rescue [The Story]

Oh yeah, baby, it's finally here! The long-awaited story about what happens when the Gods of Olympus are held prisoner by Kronos in the deepest part of Tartarus, and only their offspring can save them.

published on January 07, 201628 reads 16 readers 11 not completed
Godly Rescue [The Story]

Prologue: Melody's Journey

Melody
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Something about today feels a little off. I don't feel like my usual cheery self, which is very strange. Was it the news I heard last night about moving further south? I don't want to lose my friends from this area; they mean a lot of me. I love to jam out with my friends, especially in front of the whole school when we write a new song we want to perform in the talent competitions.
The home phone then rings, and I hear my mother. "Hello? Oh, hello Laura! Yes, she's here, hold on." As she walks up the stairs, I pretend to write in my diary. She knocks on my door, and I look up. "It's for you, Melody."
I take the phone. "Hello?"
"Melody! How are you?"
I smile. I can always count on Laura to lift my spirits. "I'm okay."
"Okay? What happened?"
"I found out I'm moving in a few weeks," I reply, as my voice drops its cheery tone.
"You tried talking to your parents about this?"
"I'm not allowed to. Mother says it's for the best, with her new job."
"You know, how come you never talk about your dad?"
My eyes widen. I don't know how to answer. I've never known who my father was until a few months ago.
But how am I supposed to tell my best friend that my father is the God of the Sun, Healing, Music, and Poetry?
"I've never really met him," I lie. "I guess he and my mother broke up a while ago."
"Ouch... sorry I asked."
"It's fine, don't worry." I then check the time: 7:33AM. It's a school morning too. I should be getting ready for the long journey to Camp Half-Blood. I've told all my friends that I'm heading to a Summer Camp for the Musically Talented. Nobody can ever know the truth. If they were Half-Bloods too, it would be so much easier to tell them where I was going; they could come with me, and we'd jam the nights away.

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With the car packed, my mother and I open our doors and twist our bodies through the small space to get in the car. I turn round to take one last look at the house. After all, I won't see it again until autumn. When I look back at the front, we are well on the road, as my mother starts to drive to the motorway. I plug in my headphones and listen to the glorious music of my favourite artists, including David Guetta, Clean Bandit, Taylor Swift, and OneRepublic. It's also a perfect opportunity for a few winks - yes, I'm still quite tired.

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When I next wake, my mother is gently tapping me.
"Melody, wake up. We're here."
I open my eyes, and in front of us stands Half-Blood Hill.
"How long was I asleep for?" I ask.
"The whole journey. Three hours."
So I was asleep for the whole three hours it took to get to Camp Half-Blood. Wow.
As I hug my mother good-bye, I grab my items and start to walk up the Hill.
But that's when I feel the ground start to shake.
Odd. I have never felt this hill shake before. And no case has ever been talked about among the other Half-Bloods.
What is going on?
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VictoireWeasley1821
Twenty One Pilots are awesome
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on April 23, 2016
AlwaysBeInfinite
Nice! Keep it up! I'm enjoying it!
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on April 22, 2016
Miss.Red
Are you going to update it soon? :) I really like it. :)
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Weiss_Schnee
Aw, thank you!
And I intend to update soon, but... I want to make a re-make of the prologue, @Rebel_Fangirl and I talked about it, and it definitely needs to be changed.
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on February 10, 2016
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on February 10, 2016
vive_la_revolution
Awesome! But kind of confusing. Did her friend not know about Melody's missing dad? If Melody only found out that she was a demigod a few months ago... Has she been to Camp Half-Blood before? If so, why'd she leave? Does this take place over the summer? Why would she care about a tremor, anyways? She may just think that it was her imagination. And if she didn't See More▼
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Weiss_Schnee
That's all gonna be revealed later. Prologues are meant to be brief anyway. The details in a story come later, in the actual chapters. It's just what authors do, so... I kinda learned to do that.
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vive_la_revolution
Yeah. I bet it'll be awesomepic!
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on January 09, 2016
Weiss_Schnee
Hmm.... perhaps if I scrap this and re-write the prologue then...
I want this written in a tense way that's going to attract people in.
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on January 09, 2016
vive_la_revolution
That's fine. Suspense is usually one of the hardest things to write about. I think that it helps if it's a very short, unrevealing POV of a villain written while you listen to intense music. Your writing will seem more suspenseful and the setting will reel readers in.
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on January 09, 2016
Weiss_Schnee
Yeah, ik, I'm not exactly good with suspense...
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on January 09, 2016
vive_la_revolution
Gotcha. Although... Prologues are supposed to be vague, but not like this. This isn't vague like the-suspense-makes-me-want-to-read-more vague, but I-am-so-confused-is-this-even-worth-my-time vague. Still cool, though.
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