Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014289 reads 36 readers 16 not completed
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Chapter 4.
Back To My Past, Part 1

Back To My Past, Part 1

I have so many questions.
If I never meet Dominick, then I never get the offer for the money If I killed my best friend, then I never try and kill him, then I never die!
So...does that mean I'll still be dead? Or not? UGH!! I'm so confused. In fact, I'm still trying to soak everything in.
"Stephania," Comes a voice from behind me. A strange voice, it seems familiar, but from where? I spin around with shock. "Scared you, didn't I?" The person asks. I look up. It's the boy who read out my task. He has smooth, blonde hair, that could easily be mistaken for gold. His eyes as blue as the sky surrounding us. White t-shirt along with shining white jeans and a black and white blazer, also black gloves and a black necklace.
"Umm, yeah, a bit, I guess..." My voice trails off.
"Well you're going to need your wits about you when you go down, you must be careful," The boy tells me.
"Careful? Why?" I question eagerly.
"The Dark Angels, they see through you, they know you're dead, they seek to stop you from completing your task so you can join their army," Now you tell me.
"How will I spot them?!"
"Their appearance, black hair, black eyes, grey clothes," I nod, swallowing the boulder that has formed in my throat. As if correcting my wrong wasn't hard enough.
"When do I go?"
"Twenty minutes," The boy turns around. "Oh and by the way, the name's Eli," Then he walks away.
Eli.
"Okay,"

I will not let the Dark Angels stop me from completing my task.
I will succeed.
Now that's final.
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ChocolerryPOP
Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
EyelessIngrid
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Sarbar1010
Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
NeonTiger
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Aliyss
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
DarkAngel1204
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Jeweled_Feather
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014