Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014289 reads 36 readers 16 not completed
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Chapter 18.

Close Call and a Fall

We watch and listen in horror, as we listen to keys entering the keyhole.
"I'm just gonna get the broom!!" A man's voice shouts. Eli grabs my arm and clicks his fingers. The gold light dances around us, illuminating the room. The key is removed. I watch as the doorknob begins to turn. We're not out of here yet!! What are we going to do? If he sees us, we're toast!! The door starts to open.
"Hey, Geoff!" We hear. The door stops opening for a split second, turning my blood to ice. Fear surges through me, my heart is beating so fast it feels like it's going to burst out of my chest. The door begins to open again. No! Not yet!! I shut my eyes closed as fear consumes me.

I feel Eli let go of my arm, my eyes still closed.
"Steph," Eli calls.
"Is it... over?" I fall to the ground, overwhelmed with relief. I fall with a THUMP.
"Lord Pocheco!!" Someone screams. Tyler. "How could you let her fall?!" I hear his footsteps approach as I open my eyes.
"Rule 1," Eli states.
"There must be a rule about not harming your client as well," Tyler mutters. I feel a hand shake my shoulder.
"What?" I question.
"Are you alright?"
"Tyler, go away," I murmur.
"Harsh," Tyler states. I push myself off the ground and stand up.
"I'm fine,"
I sneak a glance at Eli. He has his arms crossed and shaking his head in disapproval.
"What?!" I ask.
"He was only trying to help," Eli explains. I sigh.
"Whatever,"

Tyler walks up to me as Eli sits a few meters away.
"He's changed since you got here, in these two days, he's become happier, you've changed him, don't make him break rule three, be careful," Then he walks away.
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ChocolerryPOP
Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
EyelessIngrid
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Sarbar1010
Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
NeonTiger
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Aliyss
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
DarkAngel1204
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Jeweled_Feather
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014