Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014289 reads 36 readers 16 not completed
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Chapter 12.

Rules and Regulations

"Rule one," Tyler announces. "No mentor shall lay their hands on their client in any way, example, high fives are a huge NO," Tyler tells me. I nod. "Not that Lord Pocheco would ever high-five anyone, being the blizzard he is," He adds under his breath. Eli makes an annoyed sound, but then agrees. "Rule two," Eli roles his eyes.
"Tyler could I not say the rules?" Eli asks.
"Nope!"
"Why not?"
"Because you're such a BLIZZARD, you make everything seem ten times worse than it is!!" Tyler pretends to make a sad face. "Anyway, rule two, no mentor shall show any positive interactions whilst around their client, for example smiling or thumbs up or something," Hey, wait a minute, earlier, when Eli told me his full name, I swear he smiled. I glance at Eli, he looks at me for a spilt second but then looks away. "Rule three!" Tyler stops for dramatic effect. "This one is the most important!" He extends his arms demonstrating how big of an importance this rule has.
"Oh just get on with it," Eli complains.
"Wait, you must remember this one, Lord Pocheco, you especially," Tyler pauses, looking at our reactions. "The. Third. Rule. Is," Tyler begins, pausing between every word. Eli groans.
"No mentor shall develop feelings for their client!" Eli blurts out, unable to hold his patience.
"I told you not to say it!!" Tyler complains like a little kid.
"Okay, okay, don't make a big fuss, I just wanted to know the rules,"  I say quickly. Jeez.
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ChocolerryPOP
Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
EyelessIngrid
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Sarbar1010
Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
NeonTiger
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Aliyss
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
DarkAngel1204
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Jeweled_Feather
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014