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I wrote this in my English class for coursework and know I really want other people opinions as I hope to be an author when I'm older. it is about a girl who was created with the purposes of being and government assassin this is a bit about her introduction to the government ...sort of, please don't be afraid to point out mistakes and tell me if you think its an good.

published on March 17, 201514 reads 8 readers 4 not completed
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Chapter 2.
need some help

need some help

I was originally just going to leave the story like this but I was wondering what you all thought. so I have decided to leave it up to you, I would like some feedback from the story and whether you think I should continue it

thank you xoxo
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TrashCow
I loved this story. There are a few grammar errors that I think you should check over in the first chapter, but I loved the plot and the idea of an emotionless character who is essentially perfect at a lot of different things. I'd love to see more of this story!
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on July 25, 2017
vive_la_revolution
Definitely continue, I love it! There are some grammar errors, but other than that, it's awesome!! Do you need help with story ideas or anything?
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meMEme13
@MerTaylor thanks for the advice it might be a while before I fix it though because it won't let me post anything on a computer, right now I am on my phone and yes I would love some help with story ideas x
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vive_la_revolution
OK great! I think that as you continue, she should kind of start to change. She'll start to develop feelings and an ability to change how she acts. Maybe she'll fall in love with one of the people she's supposed to kill, and that will trigger the change. Since she's only like a prototype, the people can't really control her.
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