Let Me Die

Let Me Die

17-year old Jamie Collsburg is upset about dying, especially after learning she wasn't supposed to die, her brother was. The unexpected arrival of a innocent girl named Arianna proves that Jamie can reset the story, her fate. And switch places with Arianna in the nick of time. But when it actually happens, Jamie finds what it's like to have a family mourning over another sibling--not good. But she knows she's never going back. And Arianna knows she needs to get back, before the whole world is turned off balance with their disappearance.

published on April 05, 201452 reads 32 readers 6 not completed
Chapter 1.

Dying (Jamie)

It doesn't hurt.

You may cry for just a little bit, but it's not like your really going to burst into immense tears. Nope. Not at all. Because there's only 1 step in dying. Well, that's what you think. Just one step. It doesn't hurt. You just...kind of do it. But that wasn't the case with me. I was 15 when it happened, and I'll always regret saving him. My brother. Jonathan.

I know it doesn't make sense. But it does. Or it will. I'm still dead. And now, here's why. It was a dark gloomy Sunday afternoon, and my brother was pestering me about the new Minecraft collection of Legos. I wasn't listening, even if that new ship update sounded somewhat cool. I was staring at the bottom of my high tops on my bed, blocking him out the best way I could. But he wouldn't stop. Finally, I walked on top of the balcony. I thought I was alone as I started to cuss him out, but there he was again, my 11 year old brother making a fuss about why he wanted it for his birthday and why he deserved one. I was just like, shut your hell up. But he wouldn't stop, and I swerved before he could bump into me. His whole body weighed over the edge, swinging back and forth on the 5 feet up rail. "JAMIE!! HELP!!" he yelled.

At first, I had the meanest sprit. He had pestered me all day about it. Why should I save him? Why shouldn't he die? But that wasn't the real Jamie. The real Jamie would save him, annoying or not. I raced for him swinging him over, and then starting to fall and slip. But as I shouted for his help, he stood there. And then, he ran off. His little legs, his chubby, stupid legs running farther and farther away from me.

I gasped, and my breath became short and stout. "AHHHHH!" and that was it. I fell. The gardener watched me, and all I wanted to do was kill my family. For not caring. For ignoring my screams. I fell down harder, the ground almost making contact with my fragile skull. And boom!! It must've seemed like an explosion, but I felt no pain. And I knew I had died. I knew it. I was in a light of bubbling white, and nothing else.

I couldn't remember anything...and then it all came flowing back to me. Minecraft...balcony...my brother, the gardener, my skull. And before I knew it, everything in my world was DARKNESS.
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stuck.in.a.creepy.house
1. There will be romance, and I'm not sure in which particular chapters, but I'm thinking maybe in between her school time and trying to go back to Earth.
2. I can't answer this, as it would be a spoiler, but it is a connection to the story.
3. Of course!! I will make a page where you can post them. I can't make a link to it, so here's a deal. I will get 10 new See More▼
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on April 07, 2014
DanielleCim
This is like, the only story I want to keep reading on here, because you always leave us waiting for more, each chapter. I just have a few questions:
1. Will there be romance, and if so in which chapters??
2. How come Arianna has a suspicion of her parent's job? Is it part of the story or a distraction mystery?
3. Can WE come up with a few of the characters?
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on April 07, 2014
stuck.in.a.creepy.house
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on April 05, 2014
madison1
Good!
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on April 05, 2014
stuck.in.a.creepy.house
It's a top priority!!
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on April 05, 2014
madison1
Love it you should add more
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on April 05, 2014