Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014289 reads 36 readers 16 not completed
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Chapter 11.

Why Doesn't He Fly

"Lord Pocheco!!!" Comes Tyler's loud, yet soft voice. "I have alerted the council of Damian not continuing!" He adds. I gaze at Tyler's outspread wings as he flies effortlessly towards us, my eyes wander over to Eli's folded up wings. I know this is my first day here, but I've never seen Eli fly. I shake my head, discarding the thought. I stop and my surroundings are nebulous for a split second.
"Thank you Tyler, now please, come and land, you'll tire if you fly for too long," Eli orders.
"You kidding? I could fly all through the night!" Tyler tells us.
"Tyler!"
"Fine, ruin my fun, just because you can't fly!" Tyler yells. My eyes widen. Eli can't fly?! I look at Eli's wings again. In stories and fable, every angel could fly, Dominick used to talk about how all stereotypes were true and we just didn't know it, I guess Eli is living, no sorry, dead prove, that stereotypes are complete nonsense.
"Damn it Tyler, do you realize what you just said??" Eli asks angrily, yet quietly. Tyler lays his eyes on me and they widen.
"S-sorry Lord Pocheco!" Eli glares at Tyler, scaring Tyler half to death. Then he relaxes, places his hands in his pockets and turns his head to where I am standing, his turquoise blue eyes look into my crystal blue.
"It's alright, she would have found out anyway," He looks like he wants to smile, but he doesn't.
"Lord Pocheco, remember the rules!" Tyler says quickly.
"I am aware of what I can and can't do," Rules?! What rules?
"You know Stephania, you're probably the first client who isn't already in tears because of their death," Tyler tells me softly, with a hint of amusement in voice. I want to cry, I want to cry till my eyes hurt, but I know this is what I get for the bad I did. I was never that close to my family anyway, don't get me wrong, I do love my family, just not as much as other people like theirs.
"Whatever," I mumble. Tyler crosses his arms and pretends to be upset.
"So rude," He mocks. I smile for the first time today, well it's not really toDAY anymore. It's dark with the stars showing us where we are.
"I don't think it's me who has to be reminded of the rules," Eli says coldly.
"Correct me if I'm wrong, Lord Pocheco, but don't those rules only apply to mentors?" Eli is about to argue, but instead nods and gazes at the flo - cloud. Silence hangs between us.
"Would one of you tell me what the rules are?" I ask eventually.
"Sure!" Tyler says happily.
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ChocolerryPOP
Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
EyelessIngrid
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
JeweledOwl812
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Sarbar1010
Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
DarkAngel1204
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
NeonTiger
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Aliyss
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
MockingjayDistrict
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
DarkAngel1204
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Jeweled_Feather
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
CrystalDiamond2323
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
Ravenclaw3243
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014