Clouded

Clouded

Cloud was wondering in moonlight valley when something struck her, will her pack take her back? Will her brother remember her, or was he there and is just pretending?.. Read to find out

published on September 17, 201670 reads 11 readers 23 not completed
Chapter 1.

Prologue

Sun shone on my as I walked down a small crystal blue river. Scents flooded up my nose, a tingling feeling rushed up my pelt as my brother splashed water onto my clouded silver fur. "Ohh you're gonna pay for that" I yelped playfully. I splashed water onto his black fur.
We continued this water fight for a while until clouds covered the sky bringing the rain. The drops fell onto our fur as we ran up the now muddy bank. "Agh" my brother screamed I rushed towards him. "Grab my paw" i yelled frantically trying to call for help, even though we lived alone. No one came I let go causing us both falling into the water... Blue and grey clouded my vision 'This is the end" I thought as I closed my eyes as the coldness wrapped around my wet fur. 'This is it'



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wolfd3mon99
Name: Shadow
Age: Young adult she-wolf
Rank: Lone wolf
Back story:
Shadow has lost her pack to another vicious pack of wolves. She is the only survivor. In fact, she is very wary around other wolves but gets along well with foxes. Her best friend is a silver fox named Marko. See More▼
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on February 17, 2021
tylnapp
Name: Skorlün
Age: Adult Wolf
Their distinguished achievement that made them Alpha: Reunited a broken pack, and recruited some oddities.
BackStory:
Skorlün was raised by an Omega, and a Rogue packmember of the Bramble Leaf Pack. His Mother, the Rogue had killed her own pack members while defending her den. She was of a near midnight black pelt, with razor sharp See More▼
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tylnapp
Alpha Form...

*Had a longer form...but Qfeast comment limitations...*
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on December 12, 2016
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on December 12, 2016
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Hope you liked the last chapter I try to work on it as much as I can but I don't really have time anyway if you're here pleas please please go read Enchanted by the night it really good I promise!!! And it's the first time I wrote a story From readers view (I don't know what I'm saying lel)
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on December 12, 2016
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Hoi~ to all those reading this, I just want to say thank you for all the to forms and that sorry I haven't uploaded a chapter to this book
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tylnapp
It is alright, you write well, and writing takes necessary time.
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on October 15, 2016
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on October 15, 2016
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on October 14, 2016
toughwolf3
My oc Misty has had black magic as a power since I joined Qfeast Months ago....But it's okay Misty can be around before Cloud was So it doesn't bother me much...When Misty dies, she gives her power to someone else..
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on September 23, 2016
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on September 23, 2016
GalacticBiRavenclaw
Name: Indigo
Age: Adolescent fox
Rank: Explorer/medic
Backstory: Her dad, Forest, ate poisonous berries and went insane. He killed Indigo's mom, Moon. Forest then abandoned Indigo. However, Indigo got struck by lightning and developed the power to knock somebody out just by aiming a paw at them.
Power: Can knock someone out by pointing at them with a paw See More▼
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WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Thanks so much!, I'm sorry I can't post the next chapter I've been really busy
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on September 22, 2016
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on September 22, 2016
tylnapp
An Alpha form..?

Name:
Age:
Their distinguished achievement that made them Alpha:
BackStory: See More▼
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tylnapp
I thought this may have been required...as I saw an earlier post that stated you required an Alpha form...but it seems I may have been mistaken...sorry if I was...
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tylnapp
Alright...thanks.
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on September 25, 2016
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
It's ok, but this form is aw some! You can fill it in to make an alpha if you want :D
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on September 23, 2016
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on September 23, 2016
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on September 22, 2016
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Also I need more characters it's hard making them up on my own :'(
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on September 21, 2016
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
Btw if you don't like what I have done so far with your characters then please tell me and I'll change it :)
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on September 21, 2016
tylnapp
Name: Tilan
Age: Young Adult Fox
Rank: Sapper (Trap maker and such)
Backstory: Born to a small family below an oak tree within the small Oak forest, he was first out of three children to be born. He grew up doing things he had seen many two-legged creatures doing, using a strange herb that was long and thin, but strong enough to lift himself with enough of the See More▼
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on September 19, 2016
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on September 19, 2016
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
E.g.
Name: Cloud (CloudedMoon)
Age : pup
Rank: none yet ( alpha m/f, medic, so on)
Back story: See More▼
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on September 18, 2016
WolfRavena_CharaLover_UT_FNAF
I just wanna say a big thanks to all you guys who commented on my story, it really boosts me to write more, and to know that someone is actually reading it, so I'm here to ask if you guys want o be in the story, if so then just type up a RP form for your animal, I'd suggest to go with a wolf or a fox
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on September 18, 2016
tylnapp
This looks good thus far.
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on September 17, 2016
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on September 17, 2016