Burning Ice

Burning Ice

"Hi. I'm Elsa. I'm 15, I have cryokinesis, and my life officially SUCKS. This is my story..." "Hey. I'm Jack. I'm a spirit, I'm quite literally frosty, and my life sucks. This is my story..."

published on January 15, 2015361 reads 59 readers 30 not completed
Chapter 1.
Elsa

Elsa

Hi. I'm Elsa. I'm 15, I have cryokinesis, and my life officially SUCKS.
This is my story...

It all started when I almost killed my younger sister.
I was 8. Yeah, I know. Way too young to be an almost-murderer. But hey, it was an accident. I have cryokinesis -- I can control ice or snow with a touch or gesture or even just my mind. When I get excited or upset or angry or overly emotional in just about any way, it goes off like a rocket.
Anyways.
It was a beautiful winter night. My sister, Anna, wanted to play. She dragged me to the Great Hall, where we skated and built snowmen and sucked on icicles for hours. She started to play a game, jumping from pile of snow to pile of snow like they were mounds of leaves in the autumn. She started jumping out over nothing, 'flying,' and telling me to catch her. I did, of course. It was fun. Then I slipped.
She jumped out, but I was disoriented and couldn't see where she was going to land. I desperately shot out with my hand.
It hit her in the head.
She was knocked unconscious, but the force of the blow knocked her safely backwards onto a nearby snowdrift.
"Anna!" I screamed, scrambling to my feet and rushing to her side. A streak of her hair turned white.
"Mama! Papa!" I cried out desperately for help, not noticing the frosty, rough ice crusting the walls, the floors, the ceiling, the doors.
They somehow forced their way in. Everything from that point on is a blur -- Papa finding a map that led to the trolls somewhere in the library, riding out to their hiding place in the woods, removing Anna's memories of my powers.
Coming home, a mess of sobs and tears and frigidness.
My parents decided to lock me away. Anna moved to her own room. I was kept cooped up in my own. I had to keep the door locked and only let in my parents or servants bringing food.
My home became my prison.

And here I am, still locked away like a fairytale princess. Except in this case, I'm so scared of hurting people that I don't want to leave. And yet I want to live. I want freedom. I want to fall in love. I want to see my sister again. I want to do more than sit all alone and sulk for the rest of eternity.
For now, nothing happens.
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Princess_Twilight
You are a GREAT storywriter. Are you going to be an author when you grow up? You should. I would buy your books.
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Princess_Twilight
Yeah! I love your stories sooooo much.
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Lucky_Queen
Thanks... >.<
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Princess_Twilight
I would say they are.
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Lucky_Queen
Thanks... But I don't think that they're actually publish-worthy material.
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Lucky_Queen
Really?
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ELINAviolets
@Rebel_Fangirl Kk :3
First off, what I find interesting, is your way of using the movie as head-start and continue your own story-line. That way people can easier imagen the character and you don't really have to introduse the characters because they already excist. Second is how every chapter is it's own perspective of a person, although I sometimes felt that See More▼
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ELINAviolets
@Rebel_Fangirl
Grammar and creativity are good, even if there are movies about the characters already.
Characters themself are displayed smoothly, although Jack litterly came crashing down to his love-interest AKA Elsa.
And the pictures were good, it's just that most of Jack's pics look like he ate a lemon XD
And that's probably about it, hope this is usefull See More▼
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Lucky_Queen
XD Thanks!

I agree with most of it. Thanks!
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ELINAviolets
ITZ AWESOME X3

I'd really like if you could make more chapters, and if you want crittesism for the story just ask me ^-^

But still, ITZ AWESOME X3
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Lucky_Queen
Thanks!!

I would LOVE a critique. I really need one, too. XD
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Insane_feline
This is so freakin adorable!!!!!
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Lucky_Queen
Thanks!
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Insane_feline
Your welcome!
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Lady_Artemis
ERMAHGERD THIS IS AMAZING!!!
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Lucky_Queen
Thanks! I'm working on an epic twist. The next chapter is going to be written from Anna's POV! However, I can't find any good pics of her with fire powers... Oh well.
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Lucky_Queen
No, of course not! And thanks again.
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Lady_Artemis
Fire powers for Anna, that would be f*cking amazing!
Also, something about this makes me wanna write a new updated Sonackie fan-fic...
Hope you don't mind?
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SmolBeanie696
I LOVE THIS! ITS JELSAAAAA
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Lucky_Queen
Yep I love it too I can't stop writing!!
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Bookworm10
What does it mean when it says, "My hoe became my prison"?
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SmolBeanie696
I think she meant 'home'...
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Lucky_Queen
Oh oops typo

I meant "My home became my prison."

Lemme fix that...
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Lucky_Queen
Yep, it definitely does. :3
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Bookworm10
Ah. That makes much more sense!
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MagentaHusky
Nice story! :3
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Lucky_Queen
Thanks!
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