pokemon adventures of dawn (please read.. it is interesting)

You know about pokemon charecter dawn who lives in twinleaf town right? Now i have created a story on her.. Plz read it .. It is quite interesting. the protagonist of this story is dawn.

published on April 2012 reads 4 readers 5 not completed
Chapter 1.

The journey begins

"Dawn! Comb your hair fast and run!!or else you will not get the starter " said my mom ,johanna."yes coming" i said.. I love to comb my hair.  I am Dawn and i am from twinleaf town.


today is the day when i will get the freedom..to become a pokemon coordinator..wonder whom i will meet in my journey.. But bad news .. When we went to the professor's lab he told me to join Pokemon school!but i wanted to start my journey but what can i do.. My mom told me to join and i was forced into it but day by day i loved going to school and  made many friends .. And there i made a best friend.

.. Her name is Zoey . She is kind and it is even her dream to be a coordinator.. Wow! In my first day we got pokemon starters!!unbelievable!i thought i wont get but yes, i got one in the class. I chose a piplup and for the contest purpose they gave us a pokemon to all.. I got a..   buneary.

. I did not know anything about it but luckily we have a pokedex to check and it was a normal pokemon which i made to learn dizzy puch and ice beam.it is hard to teach pokemon. i had a problem with my pachirisu.. Wait i did not tell you the story., ok.. It happened so that we were made to find and catch pokemon on our own in professor's class. i found a cute pachirisu sleeping. I thought " such a sweetie" and touched it and .. What  happened? it gave me a thunder shock.
zap and everyone laughed at me..gosh!anyway i caught  it . How? by running and making my piplup  and buneary . Run!!that day was memorable for me. and my first pokemon which i caught was pachirisu.
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Hikari_Chan
Now check again. Plz
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on April 20
Hikari_Chan
Now i edited again.please check😊if it has anymore faults please tell me. I won't feel bad
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Hikari_Chan
Emm, if you are confused.. I wrote the intro now. I means it is dawn who is speaking
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EclipsedWolf13
No,I meant that it's hard to know who's talking when there are no capitalizations for names and the beginning of sentences.
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EclipsedWolf13
I think you should work on your grammer cause it's harder to read your story.Your story is pretty intresting,but it's hard to tell who's talking and I feel like you're adding to many run on sentences.I am pretty picky with words that are mispled and misusef.This is pretty intresting so far though.
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