Marvel: What do you think of my Supervillain idea?

Marvel: What do you think of my Supervillain idea?

I've just made a new OC and I would like to see other people's view on it to see if it good or not. Please Review!

published on October 04, 201516 reads 12 readers 16 completed
Cyber's Profile.

Cyber's Profile.

Name: Cyber MT.
Nicknames: None.
Age: Unknown. (Teenager.)
Gender: Male.
Species: The Triets.
Hero/Villain: Supervillain and sometimes Anti-hero.
Height: 4'4"
Weight: 46.8 kg.
Eye Colour: Deep Amber. (Non-human eye colour.)
Hair Colour: None.
Skin Colour: White at the front and yellow at the back.

Appearance:  "Parasaurolophus-like" yet stands on two legs with shorts legs but with long arms. White under belly with part of face as well. Thin shell on back with short tail with two spikes. And beak like mouth.

Has black squares embedded in wrists to make a sort of black wrist bands. Also has a plain black sash
made out of a metal that able of store small things.

Personality: Friendly, easy-going, witty, likable, adventurous, reckless, impulsive, thrill-seeker, resourceful, lone-wolf, Make-Do Attitude, cheeky, back-stabber, Rule-breaker, clever, devious, cowardly, selfish and Careless.

Powers: The black band hold a powerful energy called "Twilight matter" that he turn from Solid, Liquid, Gas and Plasma at will. Then use it many different ways.

Also has sensors at the back of head (Natural to his Spices.) that can pick up vibrations though the air that help his predict his opponent's next moves. But only works in close combat and can't pick up energy based attacks.

Fighting Style: Mainly fights from a distance, attacking his opponent with long ranged hard-hitting energy based attacks. Takes high risks however has a hint cowardliness in his fighting style, so he will use cheap tactics. He is also isn't very skilled when it comes to close up combat which is why he tries to keep his distance.


Weaknesses: Lacks former training and has the same endurance as a normal human. So can be killed by a simple hand gun. Also can sometimes make careless mistakes. Due to being a teenager he is still a bit immature.

Goals: It's not clear if he has any specific goals but though his own words he claims: Trying to get though life and have fun while doing it. He also sometimes acts as a mercenary for other villains.
Crimes: Minor to major thefts. (The minor ones are usually for Supplies. For example, stealing from supermarket for food.) trespassing, breaking and entering mass destruction of private and government property, manslaughter and murder (Rare.).

Success rant: High. (Defending on type crime. Success rant of Major Crimes: Medium.)

Shield Most Wanted Number: #26

Speed:         /////////////////////////////////                    Intelligence: /////////////////////
Strength:     ///////////////////                                      Agility:        ///////////////////////////
Power:       //////////////////////////// Defenses:    ///////////////////////
Endurance: /////////
Tactics:      //////////////////////////////////

Other: Cyber has a habit of making friend with Superheros. Prim examples: Spider-man, Iron-man, Deadpool, Hawkeye etc. however this does not stop him from fighting them. But he won't try to kill them.
Another is that's he's always switching back and fount between allies. One day he could be teaming up with the
  avengers but the next Cyber there worst energy. He's only does though for personal gain and so many incluing
  supervillains don't trust him.

Has a pet liquid like creator that is part robot that rides around on his solder. However she isn't a very good fighter so cyber only uses her if needed.

Backtory:

Born in the middle of a huge Galactic War, with both Parents being the leaders of an entire army made from billions!
(This army was simply known as the "Savager's Army")  Which had fought Thanos's forces for 100s of years.)

Cyber was kept hidden from the world and trained to become the next General of the Army. However the training was harsh and the level his parents experted him to live up to were high. When ever he steped out of line, he would be put back in place quickly. His parents were even starting to think of him as a failure. Cyber hated this life.
The training, the lack of freedom and the whole thing with leading a entire army of billions one day. Why did he have to live like this? And why should he? So one night, when no one was looking, he made his move. Using the skills he learnt from his training to hack into a ship's computer and took control. Then he ran away.
A young boy completely alone in deeps of space and on run. Cyber was forced to join a group of Pirates. Where he spent the rest of youth learning to be a criminal. One day he captured by an unknown alien raise and tested on.

Gaining his twilight matter power while tested. He soon become powerful enough to break free and saving baby Xray along the way. Adopting the Xray as his pet he wondered the universe, starting he life as an outlaw. Until he finally came to earth. Where he took a liking to it and settled down.


Songs:
(Yeah, I know this is a bit out of no where but I personally think that songs are a very good way of showing off a character. So if you listen to them, you'll get a better idea of who Cyber is.)

1) This song is from Cyber's childhood while in his training and it's from his mother's point of view: [link]
2) The next is meant to show long after Cyber ran away and enjoying the criminal life: [link]

3) This song will need a bit of story behind it, in order for it relate to cyber:

There is a massive battle going on with Supervillains and Superheros fighting to get hold of a powerful artifact. Cyber ends up betraying all of them by stealing the artifact behind everyone's back. At first he enjoys the thrill of all theses people coming after him however he soon realizes his huge mistake, seeing his life is now on the line as a group of other angry Supervillains come after him.

The song, it's self takes place when he and his pet Xray are on the run from practically everyone. Cyber starts to feel distressed but tries to cheer himself up by saying "At least we stole the show."  : [link]    




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Comments (16)

Pale_Master
Looks a bit to overpowered
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dragonrider789
Not really, he has quite a few weaknesses; He has little to no training, He still has the same endurance of humans so a gun can be enough to kill him if not blocked also his senior power only works in close combat with non-energy based foes.
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Pale_Master
Ah. all good then
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on October 08, 2015
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dragonrider789
So what makes his overpowered?
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Pale_Master
He has to many abilities and his stats are ridiculous
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grace.love
i think its great but you could probably work on like,, who his friends are at least
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dragonrider789
I bid. It say near the bottom that: "Has a habit of making friends with superheros like: Spiderman, Deadpool, Ironman and Hawkeye." But not too many villains trust him due to him being friends with superheros.
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Bookworm10
That's good
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on October 06, 2015
Marvele
Awesome super villain, especially his design and that he's an anti-hero. I can see Deadpool and him as friends from what I've gathered.
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dragonrider789
Thanks! He's not full friends with deadpool but one the few people that can at least tolerate him.
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Marvele
Haha, yeah.
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Crazy_fangirl_of_Harley_Quinn
Sounds like an Amazing supervillan!
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dragonrider789
Do mind being a bit more detiled?

So do you like his personality best, his power, him pet etc.
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dragonrider789
What do you like about him?
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