My Breath Away

My Breath Away

This extraordinary story will take your breath away!!! A thirteen year old girl is trapped inside of her ice cold mind for years to come will she ever make it out of the icy cold pit?

published on March 23, 201330 reads 27 readers 7 completed

Dying so early.

I remember nothing but a flash of light and I was in a bed. My father told someone to take me to the emergency room I needed immediate care. I was rocking and I felt people touching me, my eyes were open but I was not awake. "Lorine? Are you awake honey?" said my father he looked as if he were panicing, I couldn't say anything when I tried to think of words to say my mind just could not compute. I was hungry it felt like I had been here for hours but it had only been minutes the people that were touching me left the room and so did my father I was alone in the room I felt colder then usual when this happened. I could see snowflakes drizzling before my eyes it was pretty but scary to me. Lorine Parkner daughter of Thomas Parkner and Angelina Parkner their only daughter at that I had Severe Tics I would slice my finger and not even know, the pain would not come I wouldnt feel any pain if it did come. My eyes were now shut I could hear small sounds people telling other people to fill the needle with the medicine I needed quickly or I could pass away. My heart felt like it dropped at that moment my life could end any second now and I couldn't even say goodbye to my father or mother to let them know I love them. All I heard was a longing beep and I closed my eyes and went to sleep or did I?




I Died March 15 1908.
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Comments (7)

ChokolatLover
that's so sad! But nice description though!
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on July 21, 2013
planetfroot
Awwww she died that's sad ^\^
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on July 20, 2013
klovecutie03
Wow great story
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on July 14, 2013
girlonfire
Awesome description, you've got skills! x
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on March 24, 2013
RosenEliza
Thank you, Very Much I will start writing My Breath Away 2 right away I have just finished my other book called: Faded Death look for it in horror book's It's really good and its longer!
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on March 23, 2013
HellRaiserPrincess
This is a very good story and I saw a few spelling errors and sentence fragments but nothing major. I love how u started this off and hope u continue writing onto this =) this is rated five stars
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on March 23, 2013
RosenEliza
I know this book is short but I am working on two other books and just needed one out of the way! I will maybe make another My Breath Away book after I finish my other Books. My Breath Away was suppose to be a episode book (witch means one chapter at a time in show form.) but I just couldn't handle 3 books at a time! Anyway, Enjoy this Book!
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on March 23, 2013