Spirits (1)

Spirits (1)

A group of Mobian friends face life in a not-so-normal high school. They all thought it was normal, until they start seeing peculiar, tiny specks of lit. They are tempted to follow them, but the lights, they find out, are actually Spirits. They need to save the school from them. But, the first thing they need to do is escape the island that they get stranded on. The spirits are not seen by others, and only they can see them. The only thing the other students can see and hear is fear, screams, and killing. They're going to have to gear up, or else the school won't be the only thing going down.

published on January 31, 2016277 reads 42 readers 83 not completed
Chapter 1.

Chapter 1 ~ Eternal's POV

I remember it well; the cold, dark, night sky above my house.
The view from my bedroom was breathtaking, and I loved looking down on the cherry-blossom trees in the backyard, and looking at the tiny pinpricks of light coming from the sky.
I almost felt as if it was trying to give me a message.
I sighed.
The door opened.
I turned my indigo-eyed gaze towards the bronze door.
My friend Shori Arcticfox stood there in the open.
She and I had been friends since... Well, since forever.
We never did anything without each other.
Though we were complete opposites, we were still best friends.
Like Ying and Yang.
Sun and Moon.
Butter and Potatoes. Wait, butter and potatoes?
Ah, whatever. You get the idea.
"Still awake?" She asked.
"Uhh, yeah. What's it look like to you?" I asked.
Without saying a word, she pushed her long, snowy white hair out of her face and climbed into her small bed.
"Going to sleep? This early?" I asked.
"Early? It's phantom hour!"
"...Oh."
The phantom hour was when the clock struck midnight, and phantom spirits would roam around town. Or at least, that's what my mom told me. She yawned and put her head underneath the blue sheet.
I yawned too.
I guess I should be going to sleep too.
I climbed into my bed.
Nothing special.
My bed was just plain old boring white.
It was like a blank canvas, ready to be painted.
I'd paint a simple, yet so complicated design on the covers, if I could.
Naaaaah, the paint would just soak through the covers and I'd end up ruining my bed.
Hah, I guess I could say I never really thought about my actions.
People cowered in fear sometimes.
Others acted as if I was... The evil queen or something.
Okay, so sometimes I'm cold and violent, but I had another side to me.
I tucked into my bed.
The next thing I remember, the alarm on my clock went off.
I fell out of my bed. "Oof."
5:00 AM?!Wow, it was only 5 hours after midnight.
Shori hit the snooze button, and got up.
I then got up.
I glanced at Shori.
"You set the alarm again, didn't you?"
She gave me a sheepish grin and shrugged.
"You idiot." I walked into the bathroom and brushed my teeth.
Everything was the same about me.
I was still a cat, still had the same indigo gaze, same purple dyed hair. Heck, I could kinda see the purple fading, revealing the chocolate brown hair I had.
After, I got dressed into my purple shirt and plum coloured jacket, black jeans, yada, yada, yada. I was wearing what I always wore.
Shori was already downstairs, dressed in her usual outfit.
"Hurry up!" I yelled.
My mom, a golden-furred lynx named Felicity Fierycat glanced at me. "Alright."
She put two plates on the table. Shori and I licked our lips. Pancakes!
Shori took one plate, and I took the other.
We started chowing down on the syrup-drenched mountains of delicious goodness.
I stopped. I looked at Shori's plate.
It looked as if she had gotten a quarter more pancakes than I did.
I clenched my fists. "YOU IDIOT!!! SPIT IT OUT, SPIT IT OUT!"
"Why?" She asked.
"YOU GOT MORE THAN I DID, YOU DIMWIT!"
"Relax, Eternal. She maybe got just one bigger pancake than you did, that's all." My mother said.
"Fine. I'll let it slide."
I glared at Shori the whole time we were eating breakfast.
I felt as if she was a queen.
Everyone loved her.
Was it her obsession over leeks?
Was it her snow-white fur?
Was it the way her hair shined in the shimmering daylight?
Was it the fact that she was WAY taller than me?
Was it her stupid-but-somehow-cute-dimwittedness?
What WAS it that was so special about my best friend?
This really proved how different we were.
I never understood why people hated me.
I guess it was because I came from the underworld.
Or maybe the fact that I'm mean, hostile, and violent to everybody else.
I don't even KNOW.
Sometimes I wished I was Shori, that way I would know WHY she was so special.
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Kanmuru
Yucc
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on May 20
ShoriTheArcticFox
Wow this is getting older but its still good
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Kanmuru
I'm not gonna update this no matter how many people comment on it.
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on November 29, 2016
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on November 29, 2016
oSHORIo
Oh poor Shori :33
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on October 06, 2016
SHSL_Robot_Kiibo
Finallly you mentioned Vix's backstory
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on June 05, 2016
Kanmuru
Everyone is now starting to die...
Cross your fingers!
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ChickPea
U KILLER X3
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on May 06, 2016
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on May 05, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Mystic: I'm not a show off!! Electra's the show off
Electra: Well excuse me
Laurane: You both are idiots
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Dead_Misfortune
Those are old comments i posted of which i apologize for doing so. I did not mean to make her that way those comments have been deleted @Vixen_shadowninja_fox
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SHSL_Robot_Kiibo
Oh, alrighty. I think Arashi told me that's why she made Mystic die. Because she was just confused and yea.
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on May 07, 2016
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on May 07, 2016
SHSL_Robot_Kiibo
Just askin, but why are all your comments facts about Mystic? It kinda makes Arashi feel like she messed up on Mystic in the story.
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on May 07, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
(O.O unexpected)
Electra and Mystic: Ow...
Laurane:*laughing*
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Kanmuru
Arashi: *looks down at Mystic and Electra, who are at the bottom of the cliff*
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on May 05, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Neko: Nope *walks away*
Laurane:*watches her leave*
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on May 05, 2016
Kanmuru
(I love how Arashi said "Bye bye, motherfückers." so innocently XD)
Arashi: Would you like to be next?
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on May 05, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Laurane: She has a point
Neko: -_-
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on May 05, 2016
Kanmuru
Arashi: I'm the one who created the story. I have control over everyone whos in it. *smiles evilly*
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on May 05, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Neko: Seriously you had to kick my girlfriend down a cliff side?
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on May 05, 2016
Kanmuru
Arashi: *smiles, looks down there at them, and waves* Bye bye, motherfückers. C:
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on May 05, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
(Well then, still Mystic isn't really a show off but okay X3) Laurane: Bye
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on May 05, 2016
Kanmuru
*the both land down below, which is probably a hundred feet below the bridge*
(THANK GOG YOU DIDN'T KILL ME, BECAUSE THIS IS ACTUALLY WHAT'S GONNA HAPPEN! I won't guarantee everyone's gonna be alive, though.)
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on May 05, 2016
Kanmuru
(Pls don't kill me)
Arashi: *turns into guardian form, and Shokku Punches both Mystic and Electra off le bridge, making them fall* YOU IDIOTS.
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on May 05, 2016
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on May 05, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Awesome
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on April 27, 2016
Helpless
NUUU
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on March 16, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Finish the story! It's getting good!
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Dead_Misfortune
Just read it. Seems very interesting
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on March 16, 2016
Kanmuru
I just added a new chapter ^_^
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on March 16, 2016
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on March 07, 2016
Helpless
"My tummy got a boo-boo..."
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on March 03, 2016
Helpless
They left Gaiaaaaa. D:
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Kanmuru
D:
I'm sorry
When they get out of the maze they eventually go back for her
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Helpless
😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮
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on March 02, 2016
Kanmuru
She won't be killed.
Though in the next story I make, they all do die, but they have to find their way back.
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on March 02, 2016
Helpless
D:
Me and Taylor made a ship called GreenGaia, so you better not kill her.
D:
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on March 02, 2016
Helpless
Gaia's tummy got a boo-boo. D:
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on March 02, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Doubt Mystic's gonna enjoy the maze
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on February 29, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Hope Gaia lives and now Heaven turned dark? Uh oh that isn't good.
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Kanmuru
Maybe Suntail's the next to turn dark >:3 You'll have to find out soon
Also, now people are dying... Who knows...
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Dead_Misfortune
Uh oh. They better keep a look out than.
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on February 22, 2016
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on February 22, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Woah. Where the heck are they at?
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Dead_Misfortune
Omg XD
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Kanmuru
Shori named a bush George, so now the bush is named George Bush. XD
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on February 21, 2016
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on February 21, 2016
Kanmuru
They're inside George Bush apparently XD Get the joke?
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on February 21, 2016
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on February 21, 2016
Helpless
Eternal needs to take a serious chill pill.
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Kanmuru
Yep. As if it's not obvious enough. XD
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on February 20, 2016
vive_la_revolution
FINALLY

Now I have PROOF that I'm not the best writer on Qfeast!

XD Yeah. Anyways, this is AWESOME!!
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Kanmuru
Thanks! This isn't the best story I wrote though! I was pretty lazy with this, and I'm surprised about how much good criticism it's gotten! Thank you!
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vive_la_revolution
You're welcome!
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on February 19, 2016
Kanmuru
Oh, wow! Thanks!
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on February 19, 2016
vive_la_revolution
NP! I'm not even kidding, though.
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on February 19, 2016
Kanmuru
Wow, thanks! XD
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on February 19, 2016
vive_la_revolution
NP! YUUUSSSS!! I would totally buy ALL of your books. XD
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on February 19, 2016
Kanmuru
Thanks, again! I've actually already been considering becoming an author! XD
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on February 19, 2016
vive_la_revolution
It's seriously one of the best books I've ever read. You NEED to consider a job as an author. You would totally be famous.
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on February 19, 2016
Helpless
Bruh. You /HAVE/ to add! x3
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Kanmuru
Sorry! I forgot! DX
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Kanmuru
I get busy a lot, so I'll add a new chapter now!
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on February 17, 2016
Helpless
D:
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on February 17, 2016
Helpless
Gaia also has a Batman obsession. I'm not sure if I included that detail.
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Kanmuru
It's fine.
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on February 10, 2016
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on February 10, 2016
Helpless
x3
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Kanmuru
Which part sounded the funniest? XD
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Helpless
x3
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on January 31, 2016
Kanmuru
XD
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on January 31, 2016
Helpless
x3
Gaia could've been like, "But Raven is literally BLOOD RED."
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on January 31, 2016
Kanmuru
"It looked like someone had their period ON Gaia's canvas"
XD
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on January 31, 2016
Helpless
Lol to when they were painting.
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on January 31, 2016
Queen_Miku
Studying?
AIN'T NOBODY GOT TIME FOR DAT!
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Kanmuru
XD
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on January 31, 2016
Helpless
xD Gaia!
"Ain't nobody got time for that!"
That's my favorite quote so far.
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Kanmuru
It was originally going to be like this:
Gaia and Shori: Ain't nobody got time for that!
*they both pretend to flip a table, Gaia accidentally flips her Swedish Fish into a garbage can*
Gaia: NUUUUUU *jumps into garbage can* SWEDISH FEESH, SWEDISH FEESH, SWEDISH FEESH!
Raven: ... See More▼
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Helpless
xD
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on January 31, 2016
Kanmuru
I should've added that in! XD
This part would've been hilarious XD
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on January 31, 2016
Helpless
Sounds like Gaia x3
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on January 31, 2016
Helpless
xD
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Kanmuru
XD
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on January 31, 2016
Inactive_leave
I'm actually quite surprised how this had turned out.
Sure, I had never heard about this before you had posted and released it,
but I had read the title and description, and I wasn't interested at all.
But, as I read through my News Feed, I saw a lot of people liking it c:
So, I checked it out myself. See More▼
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Kanmuru
XD I was really rushed with the description
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Inactive_leave
Np.
I think this is something from a story I had read one day:
'So, I walked in the place and screamed instantly THERE WAS BLOOD AND BODIES EVERYEWHERE! And COVENTITLY the killer came around the corner!'
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on January 31, 2016
Kanmuru
Wow, thanks.
The thing is, it's quite unique.
I know what you mean, like, "THE HAPPY COUPLE DIES TOGETHER" cliché or "I feel this is a bad moment" cliché
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on January 31, 2016
Inactive_leave
XD
I am quite interested in the story since I have read it XD
But, oh my god, you don't even know how many stories I have read somewhat like these and them having like 50000000 clichés.
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on January 31, 2016
Kanmuru
Nah, it's fine. At least you weren't like "AND LEIK I HATTED IT SU MOCH ANS OMG YAH"
(Lel I think that was more funny than true XD)
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on January 31, 2016
Inactive_leave
I noticed XD
Sorry if I sounded offensive with me not interested in it.
Its just me personality XP
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on January 31, 2016
Dead_Misfortune
Love it so far. Keep it up.
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on January 31, 2016